This is scaring the HECK out of me! the creature is in my mind and I imagine it as this evil black beast . good job on the story though, it gave me shivers!
That... was disturbing. Even more so than the fic i read about apple bloom meeting the zombie version of herself. Can't wait to see what happens next! Will sweetie conquer her fears and defeat the horror from the shadows? Will the monster get a snog? Did sweetie soil her sheets?
One night, I was lying in bed, when I heard my Chuck Norris bobble head say one of his lines. Normally that wouldn't have disturbed me too much, as he is rather sensitive to movement and I had the AC on full blast.
But after he kept repeating himself for quite a while, I became a bit sceptical, especially considering the fact that the sound appeared to be coming from underneath my bed! To make matters worse, not only was my room nearly pitch black, but I had been watching a rather spooky anime called Ghost Hunt before hand!
So I decide to get up and turn on the lights (because there is no way in hell that I'm gonna check if it's dark) and with great reluctance I check underneath the bed.
And my god, there was a fucking thing lying down there.
In my panic, I hit my head on the wooden frame of my bed and backed desperately against one of my closet doors.
That's when I looked to my right and saw Chuck Norris' head being pushed down upon by a leaning book on one of my shelves.
I checked underneath the bed again and it turns out that the 'thing' was simply a towel!
So yeah, it's kind what I imagined was underneath my bed!
4748735 Reminds me of one time when I couldn't sleep. I have an overactive imagination (I'm on a Friendship is Magic writing a fanfiction. Of course I have an imagination! ). Back to the point, at the time I had a stack of boxes in the room at the time and, I swear to this day, that I saw them not only move, but dance towards me in the reflection off the tv! It looked like the kind of dance a scarecrow might do (if that makes any sense ).
That's a sweet-ass monster right there, although its terrifyingness is lessened by the fact that it appears to be reaching out through a car wash. You know those strap things car washes have.
4748796 Couldn't help yourself could you? I blame myself for that one, it's my fault. On a related note, close as that is, it doesn't quite reach it. Think of it more a
Quite good. I especially like how you tied the title in with the final line. Usually, I am disappointed in the so called horror stories but this is a real gem so far. I will admit that my cat decided to paw at the door about 3/4 of the way through and I started at the sound. I will have to wait until tomorrow to continue, but I am very much enjoying the story so far.
I do agree that it needs some editing. If you ever need an editor, please feel free to ask. I have a Bachelor's of English and would love to help sometime.
This was genuinely quite disturbing. Good job!
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Thankyou very much friend!
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You're welcome.
This is scaring the HECK out of me! the creature is in my mind and I imagine it as this evil black beast . good job on the story though, it gave me shivers!
and the pic for the story scares me a lot
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Thankyou very much friend, glad to see that it's done it's job well!
That... was disturbing. Even more so than the fic i read about apple bloom meeting the zombie version of herself. Can't wait to see what happens next! Will sweetie conquer her fears and defeat the horror from the shadows? Will the monster get a snog? Did sweetie soil her sheets?
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Thanks for the comment!
The next chapter is going to be a hell of a lot more disturbing than this, I'm already nearly a third of the way done with it!
So, prepare your anus!
Where on earth did you get the idea for this creature from? Can't wait to read more.
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Well it's actually a pretty funny story!
One night, I was lying in bed, when I heard my Chuck Norris bobble head say one of his lines. Normally that wouldn't have disturbed me too much, as he is rather sensitive to movement and I had the AC on full blast.
But after he kept repeating himself for quite a while, I became a bit sceptical, especially considering the fact that the sound appeared to be coming from underneath my bed! To make matters worse, not only was my room nearly pitch black, but I had been watching a rather spooky anime called Ghost Hunt before hand!
So I decide to get up and turn on the lights (because there is no way in hell that I'm gonna check if it's dark) and with great reluctance I check underneath the bed.
And my god, there was a fucking thing lying down there.
In my panic, I hit my head on the wooden frame of my bed and backed desperately against one of my closet doors.
That's when I looked to my right and saw Chuck Norris' head being pushed down upon by a leaning book on one of my shelves.
I checked underneath the bed again and it turns out that the 'thing' was simply a towel!
So yeah, it's kind what I imagined was underneath my bed!
4748735 Reminds me of one time when I couldn't sleep.
I have an overactive imagination (I'm on a Friendship is Magic writing a fanfiction. Of course I have an imagination! ). Back to the point, at the time I had a stack of boxes in the room at the time and, I swear to this day, that I saw them not only move, but dance towards me in the reflection off the tv! It looked like the kind of dance a scarecrow might do (if that makes any sense ).
That's a sweet-ass monster right there, although its terrifyingness is lessened by the fact that it appears to be reaching out through a car wash. You know those strap things car washes have.
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Made me think of this glorious bastard!
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=nauLgZISozs
Scarecrow!
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Yeah, the cover art most certainly does not really represent how I want the monster to be perceived.
I'd like it to be perceived as a much less muscular version of what the cover art shows, something not too dissimilar from a spider!
I do plan on changing the cover art fairly soon, think of it more as a placeholder!
4748796 Couldn't help yourself could you? I blame myself for that one, it's my fault.
On a related note, close as that is, it doesn't quite reach it. Think of it more a
Quite good. I especially like how you tied the title in with the final line. Usually, I am disappointed in the so called horror stories but this is a real gem so far. I will admit that my cat decided to paw at the door about 3/4 of the way through and I started at the sound. I will have to wait until tomorrow to continue, but I am very much enjoying the story so far.
I do agree that it needs some editing. If you ever need an editor, please feel free to ask. I have a Bachelor's of English and would love to help sometime.