Welcome To Boring Equestria
In a world of painfully bright colors where even at night this place would give one an eye sore, due to the cartoon like brightness of this world. Especially if one saw the bright pastel colors that illuminated the surrounding darkness in the form of a weird, yet actual physical manifestation of literally a rainbow.
Anyway, a soft cool breeze blew through the strange lavender night sky, which caused the green leaves of a large oak tree to gently shake by the wind's touch.
Around the tree most of the surrounding buildings were thatched houses, the odd one with a tiled roof. It was sort of a medieval like town, but was a lot cleaner than the average medieval town and it had many modern appliances like toilets and showers.
Many pink love hearts were painted on the side of houses, and there were other strange things like a house that looked like it was made of gingerbread and candy.
The town was called Ponyville, which was a terrible pun for a name, considering the bizarre pastel alien pony people that inhabited it.
The oak tree near the center of town had such a thick trunk that a place of knowledge was carved into the tree itself. The knowledge, history of this world and fictional stories were categorized by text. In the odd place there was small specs of dust covering little areas along wooden shelves. These shelves were lined neatly with the very things in which the text was written, these rectangle shaped objects were known as books.
The books were divided in perfect alphabetical order on the shelves, and also divided by genre and age rating. Books of an explicit nature and generally not fit for young eyes to read were safely locked away in a bright purple wooden chest.
This was of course a library. But not just a library, for this tree had several floors and was in fact a home.
Upstairs there was a strange, lavender colored, feminine in appearance being that was fast asleep. The creature was breathing softly in her sleep under a light blue blanket on a large queen sized bed. The blanket was themed with several dark blue spiraling galaxies.
This being was known as a 'pony' by their kind. The pony in question, like everypony else on this planet didn't really look like your average pony. For starters this heart attack cute cartoon pony had beautiful wings, a unicorn's horn sticking out from her forehead, large forward facings eyes that were as big as basketballs, hooves capable of grasping objects. Her name was Twilight Sparkle, and she was an alicorn, though her type of pony were often romantically referred to as a 'princess' most of the time.
Nothing of noteworthy happened for the next several hours, other than Twilight shifting position
slightly a few times in her asleep or her mumbling something incomprehensible.
Until she opened her eyes...
***
Twilight slowly opened her eyes, followed by yawning briefly, before inexplicably her eyes widen along with her jaw dropping.
"Huh! I'm back in the Golden Oak Library?" she said with a low voice in awe.
Twilight jumped out of bed and began pacing around the room deep in thought. "This is not possible! This has to be a dream!" She slapped herself across the face. "Ow! No this is not real! Tirek destroyed this place yesterday!"
She trotted down the stairs, when she came down the stairs what she saw nearly made her eyes pop out.
"No no no! This is not logical," she shouted.
Across the room from her stood another Twilight smiling broadly and wagging her tail excitedly in greeting. However, this Twilight did not possess wings.
"Oh good morning me, did you sleep well last n--
"Ahhhaaaa!" Alicorn Twilight screamed as she placed her hooves over her head while her eyes darted rapidly from side to side. "Am I going insane?!"
The alicorn was in such a panic that she was already hyperventilating. However, the other Twilight continued to smile stupidly with glee and remained completely oblivious to the stressed alicorn.
"No no no! This is definitely not possible! How are you me?!" Her horn charged with magical power. "Are you a Changeling?" she shouted while she pointed a hoof at her other self accusingly.
"What's a Changeling?" the other asked curiously.
"What do you mean what's a Changeling? Are you stupid or something?!"
The other Twilight brought a hoof over her mouth whilst she gasped in shock.
"Did you...." her ears drooped back as she frowned, "did you just call me stupid?" she said in a low voice as her lip quivered along with her eyes beginning to become moist.
"Uhhh.... yes." she said nervously as she gave her a strained smile.
The unicorn's whole body before her had suddenly began to tremble as she shook like a leaf along with her legs wobbling like jelly, all the while rivers of tears fell down upon her face.
"Uh, are you OK?" she asked with a look of concern etched on her face as she took two steps toward the shaking unicorn.
A moment later the other Twilight fell on the floor as she whaled in misery, so many tears were streaming down her face that already a puddle of tears was forming on the floor underneath her.
"How.... how could you say such a thing? Ponies don't say mean things ever! Why are you so mean!?" she screamed in anguish as Princess Twilight with her eyes wide just simply stared at the distraught unicorn in utter confusion. "You hurt my feelings! I've never been so sad in my entire life!"
"Oh, stop being such a crybaby," she said crossly as she rolled her eyes.
"I'M NOT A CRYBABY!" she shouted defensively.
With a hoof over her eyes Princess Twilight sighed as the unicorn began wailing even louder as she rolled along the floor while kicking her hooves, as a result she splashed her 'tear water' all over Princess Twilight, due to the massive puddle of her own tears beneath her.
"Alright! I'm sorry! Just please stop crying!" she shouted.
Suddenly she stopped crying, followed by jumping back onto her hooves with a big smile on her face as if nothing happened.
"I forgive you friend."
"Um, I'm not sure if I could call you a friend just yet."
"Wh... What?" she said in a low voice as her eyes began to water again."You aren't my friend?"
"Hah... oh, um I was just kidding! Of course you are my friend." she said nervously while straining a forced smile.
The seemingly unnatural smile returned to the unicorn's face.
"Oh... You almost made me cry again there. I'm glad it was just a joke."
Twilight rubbed her forehead. "So, am I in some sort of parallel universe now?"
Twilight felt as if her skeleton nearly jumped out of her body when her other self had suddenly lunged forward and wrapped her hooves around her.
"Yes and we'll be best friends forever and ever!" she shouted excitedly.
"Uhh, sure," she said nervously as she scratched the back of her neck. "Incidentally, how can I get home?"
The other Twilight backed away while gasping in shock.
"Why would you want to go home? Your world is horrible and your ponies are evil and mean!"
"I beg your pardon, "Twilight narrowed her eyes angrily,"my world is not horrible and most ponies are good and not mean!"
"But your world is not perfect like my world."
"Perfect, as like everypony is nice in your world?
"Yes. Everypony is nice in our world. Nopony ever did a bad thing ever."
"What about King Sombra or Tirek?"
"Of course, those two own a flower shop and sell daffodils here."
"Is there any crime?"
"Nope. Everypony is a morally good pony and no pony ever does a bad thing ever."
"Give me a history book now!" she shouted.
The other Twilight levitated a book toward her, which was entitled 'Our Perfect History'.
_____
The world was created by Princess Celestia and everypony was happy and nothing ever bad happened.
The End
_____
"See, our history is perfect and nopony ever did anything bad ever."
"How is that possible? Is this some sort of wish fulfillment fantasy land made real? Do you have any more books?"
"Nope. That's the only book in existence."
"You're lying! This is a library!" she shouted.
"Yes, but all the books are blank."
"So you stagnated yourselves.... How can you be even intelligent?"
"Magic."
"Did you ever have a war ever?"
"No, because friendship is magic."
"Righttt. How do you know there isn't going to be a great cataclysm in the future?"
"I know, because magic and nothing ever bad happens here."
"How can you know? What if there's some hostile alien species out there?"
"First, there are no aliens in our universe, second if there was Celestia's magic would protect us."
"But how do you know there's not any hostile alien species out there?"
"Magic," Princess Twilight sighed in response. "Can't you see that everything is perfect here? Why would you want to go back?"
"Well, I miss my friends and general every day drama. Makes me feel alive you know."
"Hey I feel alive, despite the fact I'm one of the first ponies Celestia ever created, thus I'm nearly as old as time itself."
Twilight's face became pale.
"How... how is that possible?"
"Duh, everyone is immortal here and we all live happily ever after forever."
"If everypony is immortal, do you suffer from overpopulation? If so, how do you feed everypony?"
"Magic."
"OK, how do you stop the world from being overflowed with bodies?"
"By making the world bigger with magic and making more Equestrias."
"OK, how do you stop gravity going to bone crushing levels due to you increasing the size of your planet?"
"Magic."
"How do you keep Equis habitable? Surely-
"Magic."
"How do you entertain yourselves?"
"Magic."
"How do you maintain an economy if you use magic to fix everything? Wouldn't Earth Ponies be angry that their livelihoods are ruined due to your overuse of magic?"
"We fix it with magic."
Twilight sighed burying her face into her hooves.
"How do you keep sane?"
"Magic."
"What's the point of living?"
"Magic."
"Stop saying that!"
"But magic fixes everything!"
"Right. So you live in an endless loop of eternal happiness, with no drama nor struggle for anything that goes on forever and magic fixes everything?"
"Yep."
"Forgive me, but that sounds boring."
"You really are evil aren't you?"
"No, I just don't want to die of boredom. You may be content to live here forever and ever, but not me. I don't want to be surrounded by Mary Sues forever."
"But life is perfect when you don't have to struggle for anything."
"No. That just makes life boring and utterly pointless."
"But.... but but... magic."
"AHHHAAAAAAA! CAN I PLEASE JUST GO HOME NOW BEFORE I GO INSANE!" she shouted in the Royal Canterlot Voice as her mane went on fire and eyes glowed bright red.
The other Twilight sighed.
"Alright fine." she said sadly.
She flashed her horn and with a blinding flash of light Princess Twilight had disappeared.
***
Twilight reappeared in the middle of what had once been her library with a big smile on her face.
"At last, freedom from that overly perfect world."
The End
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This kind of peace is what all heroes strive for.
Really put the finger on what makes this show good: conflict.
Kudos.
4575077
Well yeah, if everything was perfect I most likely would have never watched the show. And perhaps the Brony fandom might not have ever existed.
4575034
My boy!
4575156
Wait. So I didn't end up cumming inside Rainbow Dash?
Huh. That makes a change. Though I can't tell if that's good or bad. I think it might be good?
But being serious now, this was great. Magic.
4575248
Not this time. Thought I'd so something a bit different.
Mr Bean is magic man.
The concept of perfection is unattainable. Because no matter what, someone's going to find fault with it. And sometimes, in a paradoxical sort of way, that fault is perfection itself.
While I think this is a solid philosophical message you're presenting here, it's hard to take it seriously when you're playing it solely for laughs. Which is ironic, because honestly, the humor is rather lacking. Nothing in this was really all that funny. I know what was supposed to be funny, but lamp-shading can only get you so far, my friend.
Also, why did Perfect!Twilight zap Princess Twilight to her world to begin with? To take away the pain of losing Golden Oak Library? To have somepony new to play with? Because the Almighty Cthulu told her to? You'd think that Twilight would ask that at some point after discovering that this isn't the home she knows and loves, but she never gets around to it.
What really gets me, though, is that this could've been a lot stronger if you went a different route. If this was more Lovecraftian in nature, or perhaps modeled after The Twilight Zone (no pun intended), it would've made for a more compelling read, thus making your message that much more resonant. I honestly thought Perfect!Twilight was going to insist on keeping her doppelgänger in this purgatory of blandness forever. Seriously, she was kinda creeping me out. But, you shut that notion down before it could even get started. Tsk, such a waste.
As it stands, you had the potential for a great philosophical think-piece, but you didn't bother to take advantage of it. I'm sorry, but I find that to be most disappointing.
4575275
What an insightful comment.
Well, I don't have much time on my hands. So, I just wanted to make a quick slightly more intelligent one shot than usual. *Points to trollfics.*
I know perfectly well I can't write to save my life. So if anyone thinks they can do better, I would love to see someone write a story (and a better story) with this very concept.
I think something's worth pointing out: your narration very much feels like the narrator is directly speaking to the reader.
I find it unsettling.
Maybe it was on purpose.
4575275
"Life is pain, princess. Anyone who says differently is selling something."
Don't know what to say, really. I liked it, but you know, no offense, it did fell rushed as if more could have been done instead of "that one conversation that is the entire story".
Still, it had some funny bits, and you didn't overextended the element of repetition, which could have easily made the story annoying.
Overall: good comedy, (personally) too short, okay concept, although nothing too original, fun read.
I'd give it a solid FUN out of FUNNIEST.
*also yes, this *cough* review *cough* was completely unprofessional and was more of a rant.
Well that was... Short.
What is the cure to everything?
I shall never use the word magic in this context ever again if this is what I sounded like! 
Magic
...
EVERYTHING IS MAGIC!
Maybe you need some MAGIC MAGIC MAGIC BITCH!
4575836
Magic is best answer.
4575836
Just like how...
I'm sorry.
Possibly this is some sort of gotcha! aimed at those fans which dislike Grimdark fanfics or Deathfics, but if so it's just too silly to offend.
At first I thought this was going to be about Generation 3...
I'd be frightened if I was put into a world like that..... Seriously, though human kind is pretty chaotic and violent, I would prefer that then...."Perfect world."
But this story was hilarious! XD
4576315 Wish that would say everything is magic
You know, reading this I can kinda see Discord's view on things.
Who the hell would want to live in a place that terribly boring?
4577684 It kind of is like generation 3 though.
Da faq did I just read?
...
......
.........
4580597 A PERFECT FANFIC!!!
Seems like normal Equis to me.
4580634 I don't know about "perfect"- pretty damn good, but not perfect. the first sentence confused the shit out of me until I figured out what Mr. Rush was trying to say.
4580973 Well you catch my point it's hilarious and entertaining.
4580957
Uh King Sombra and other random evil ponies?
4581029
Sad excuses for villains if you ask me.
I like the story.
4581142 Well, Sombra DID enslave the crystal ponies after all.
4583289 He's a brat, not a villain.
4583538 He is? I had no idea actually.
Next question..
"What's your name?"
"Magic"
"Where does all your magical energy come from?"
"Magic"
"But.. that breaks the law of conservation"
"Magic"
"Why do you like Celestia?"
"Magic"
"Mind control?"
"Magic"
"How did I get here?"
"Magic"
"How can I get home"
"Magic"
4575275
The reasoning to bring Princess Twilight there.......
magic
The answer for everything is Magic, how could i not see that?
4586857
It is kind my response to some MLP FIM fan fiction that depict equestria way too perfect.
4586765
What should come next is Twilight returning with friends to de-perfect their perfect world for them. That world ... um how could Pinkie Pie even be in a world like that at all? It is horrible.
4580957
No it doesn't and you know it. So please stop pretending to be retarded.
4605279
I'm sorry, I don't recall knowing who you are. You must not know me very well, I like to make jokes about these kinds of things. Get it? A joke. J-O-K-E.
Even if you didn't get it, don't be a little fucking pussy about it.
4605435
... Aw shit man. I'm REAL sorry about this.
My pills were wearing off, and when they do, I get impulsive. I just read some horribly misanthropic Conversion Bureau tripe, so I was a little depressed.
Impulsiveness+Depression=Regrettable Actions.
Sorry...
4605614
Don't even fucking try that. I've heard more than plenty of this bullshit before where people are like, "hur dur, I had a rough day", or "mah peels didn't work". So I wouldn't even bother.
4605639
... I deserve that.
Guess I'll just have to accept the fact that I burnt this bridge before it was even built.
I'll stop bothering you.
4584188 What is the meaning of life?
"magic"
Teehee, just have this musical number and it would be even more "perfect".
Appreciate that I killed at least 60 brain cells listening to that mush.
4658102
I just listened to that song. I too felt I lost 60 brain cells listening to that.
4661729 I felt so deliciously evil posting that
Magic. Magic. Magic. Magic.