CHAPTER FIVE
Emerald went to find Rarity after she had finished all the jobs, the cat still following her.
"Rarity?" she called out "I'm all done!" She looked back at the white cat following her. "And there's this cat who is following me!"
Rarity poked her head into the room. "You're finished? Oh, good! Go upstairs and get washed up. I'll bring dinner to you later." she glanced at the cat "Don't worry about the cat, that's just Opalescence, though she usually only likes me and Fluttershy."
Emerald opened her mouth to respond, but Rarity had already left the room.
Emerald was climbing the steps when she heard the door open.
"Rarity, I'm home!" a voice called.
Emerald bolted upstairs and into Rarity's room before she could be seen. She sat on Rarity's bed for a while, but got bored. She looked around for something to do, but only saw the fashion magazines that were formerly in the basket she used as a bed. She went over to the window and sighed. "It sure looks like they're having fun," she said, watching three fillies playing outside.
Suddenly they ran off and Emerald sighed. Then her eyes lit up. "Maybe..." she said, thoughtfully "If I could just disguise myself as a pony I could see what the rest of the town looks like!"
She jumped as she heard a meow from behind her. She turned around and smiled. "Hello Opalescence," she said.
***
"Dang-nabit!" Applebloom cried for the umpteenth time as her apple she was trying to carve lost another piece. "Ah thought this would be jus' like carvin' a pum'kin!"
"I'm not having much luck with this paper-mâché either," Scootaloo grumbled.
Sweetie Belle turned to look at her friend and giggled "Maybe you could go as the paper-mâché monster," she said.
Scootaloo glared at her "Ha, ha, very funny," she said, before going back to trying to get newspaper shreds out of her mane.
Sweetie Belle shrugged "It was only a suggestion."
***
Emerald crept out from behind a bush, disguised as a mint-green pegasus filly with a lavender mane. She looked around for Rarity, and not seeing her, she set off.
She trotted past a building that oddly resembled a gingerbread house. She could smell cakes and cookies, and went to investigate.
Suddenly, a pink pony with a very fluffy mane came out of nowhere. "Hi I'm Pinkie Pie!" she said excitedly "I've never seen you before, so you must be new! And if you're new, you don't have any friends!" she pause for barely a second "Hay! I could be your friend! Oh, and I'll need to throw you a 'Welcome to Ponyville' party, too, so you can meet everypony!"
Overwhelmed, Emerald backed away and ran off in the the direction of the boutique, leaving Pinkie Pie to talk.
***
"And we'll have cake, and ice cream, and pie, and...." Pinkie paused "Hay, where'd she go?"
You spelled Hay instead of Hey. Hey is "Hey where'd she go?" Hay is "We need some hay for the horses.
5252122 I did that on purpose, but rereading it, it's starting to bug me, so I might change it, lol
5252146 Yeah, sorry. I'm a big grammar person. My friend once asked me how I was so good at grammar.
5252157 lol
Often if I see a grammar error, I get really irritated. If words don't look right to me, I get irritated. I hate the word grammar, because my mind always tells me to spell it grammer.
5252206 I hate the word realize, because everyone spells it realise.
Almost done with another chapter! That's a record, three in one day!
Not liking the small chapters. I mean, look around, usually only the worst stories have chapters less than a thousand words. Heck, it's taken you nearly six months to right less than 3500 words (Author notes are counted in words total, after all) which is kind of the standard chapter length for most other stories. Stories that release as many words every few weeks usually.
Oh good, she does know how to transform. For some reason it seemed she'd couldn't.
Pinkie that's terrible!
Keep going! ;)
I thought that it said in one of the starting chapters that she couldent? Or was that a diffrent story? hmmmm I dont remember...
Also, Chapters could deal with being longer.... Atleast 1000 words but that could just be me... It feels like they could use more details in each chapter that I've read thus far.... I feel as if in this chapter, she could have been cought by Rarity, but Rarity not know who she was and then she gets away after a short talk....
But thats just a thought....
Besides that this is a rather cute story and I cant wait to see what happens next. And I hope that I give you something to think about....
5252122 Tis a pun!