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  • E Words are Louder

    Derpy Hooves tries to befriend a certain purple mare new to Ponyville and its social stigmas.
    5,455 words · 1,271 views  ·  123  ·  0
  • E Clash of the Heavenly Titans

    What do you do when living goddesses start pranking?
    8,740 words · 1,893 views  ·  161  ·  1
  • T Mezza Voce

    Octavia digs into Vinyl's past after upsetting her when she accidentally destorys her shades.
    27,085 words · 3,085 views  ·  163  ·  2
  • T For Want of a Dawn

    Sometimes, in order to discover one's own self, they must venture into the depths of hell.
    225,592 words · 6,525 views  ·  671  ·  22 · gore
  • E Blood is Thicker / The Reluctant Reunion of the Redoubtable Rabble-Rouser

    Two stories about the relationship between The Great and Powerful Trixie and Twilight (Non-shipping)
    43,751 words · 2,309 views  ·  258  ·  7
  • T Shadow Over Ponyville

    Rarity sticks her nose in where it does not belong, to wonderous (and disastrous) results.
    13,743 words · 1,056 views  ·  53  ·  3
  • E Bug and Stalker in: The Infiltration of Blueblood Manor.

    Princesss Luna suspects Prince Blueblood is up to something and sends two wanna-be spies to investigate him.
    8,012 words · 257 views  ·  8  ·  2

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  • Today
    Retro Reviews Season 2: Lesson Zero

    1 comments · 19 views
  • 1w, 1d
    Retro Reviews Season 2: The Return of Harmony.

    5 comments · 55 views
  • 4w, 2d
    An idle thought.

    Sometimes, I like to think about my stories thematically, like the basic theme that persists through every story, or the change that comes about through the conflict. For instance, Words are Louder might be summed up as 'Derpy learns to be more open'. Or, for another example, Shadows over Ponyville being 'Rarity learns to stop worrying and love the meat'. (If you haven't read that yet, a pox on thee! It's probably my most planned story ever! Lol.)

    Actually, thinking about it as I type, there is another level to this theme, especially in sequels. To use my most prevalent examples:

    Sunset - Twilight learns and accepts her past

    For Want - Twilight accepts her present.

    [Redacted: Unauthorized Access - Using placeholder "Part Three"] - Twilight learns about her future.

    Whoops. I shouldn't have said that last one. How clumsy of me. ;P

    ... And what's this about a bronze dragon on my master to-do list? How peculiar.

    While I'm at it, I might as well also add that the Retrospectives for Season Two will be coming along in October. I can't see Season Five being more than 25 weeks away by now. So there's that at least. ^^ Yay.

    10 comments · 77 views
  • 6w, 4d
    I'm not dead...

    ... Just unmotivated. x_x It's hard to find motivation for me to sit down and write anything right now. Life is a demon who gets their jollies on the suffering of others and loves to kick someone when they are down. It's that soul-crushing thing that weighs on the mind, even if it has no weight on it's own. I am not out of ideas or anything; in fact I have an abundance of them. The thing I am really lacking right now is the will to make things happen; the burn one feels one they get over the Blank Page Syndrome and get into a groove where, in a flash, several hours have passed and a few thousand words are down. Have I lost my way? Have I forgotten the reason I started writing about ponies in the first place? With another long hiatus ongoing and not even a hint of when it may be over, it certainly is easy to think that way. Perhaps it is the task of going back to fix Mezza Voce that is making me this way? It certainly isn't fun to go through so much work and try and figure out what can be kept and what should be gone completely, and then to replace the missing bits with a similar amount of words.

    But I have rambled too long. These are not excuses. But with every passing day I feel just a little more guilty and a little more fearful about what I have not done and what remains to do. Will people like the changes and my new ideas? Or will they find me lacking after so long away? I don't care about how many followers I have, but it still hurts to disappoint.

    I'm doing it again. >> To stop this from getting too long and prosy, let me postulate something. To those out there who write: what do you do to get motivated to finish something, even if you are not feeling quite too good about yourself or motivated? How do you FORCE yourself to get s(yay)t done?

    Oh, and I'll probably restart my Retrospective Reviews in October, but with no given schedule. So there's that. Maybe. Yay?

    10 comments · 83 views
  • 21w, 2d
    Season Four Overall Review

    3 comments · 162 views
  • ...

Some things in this world happen by chance. Others do not. Twilight Sparkle is about to learn a disturbing truth that will turn her world upside down.

- Originally written May 2011 for Deviant Art

Reading this story first is strongly recommended:

(Blood is Thicker) http://ciroton.deviantart.com/gallery/26378692#/d3e1ndq


~Image by JohnJoseco~ ~Edited by BrotherPrickle on Deviant Art~

First Published
8th Apr 2012
Last Modified
8th Apr 2012
#1 · 132w, 6d ago · 1 · · Redemption ·

Finally! Thank you for uploading it here :twilightsmile:

#2 · 132w, 6d ago · 2 · · Redemption ·

I see you decided to put this story on here as well. I'm going to say that this story was one of the two fanfics that really got me into MLP fanfiction (no regrets). I was literally shaky after reading this originally (story drew me in that much, again, no regrets).

#3 · 132w, 6d ago · · · Redemption ·

Woooo! Glad you could make into Fimfiction, this is Benny by the way.

#4 · 132w, 6d ago · · · Redemption ·

This was the first MLP fanfic I ever read, happy you uploaded it here.

#5 · 132w, 6d ago · · · Redemption ·

yay! :twilightsmile:

#6 · 132w, 6d ago · · · Redemption ·

Ugh, why do the chapters names have to remind me of the Twilight saga? :pinkiesick:

It's still a great story. :yay:

#7 · 132w, 6d ago · · · Redemption ·

Can't wait for your other stories to show up here as well.

#8 · 132w, 6d ago · · · Redemption ·

Glad to see this on fimfiction as well. I really loved this story. :3

#9 · 132w, 6d ago · · · Redemption ·

Despite how silly and strange Twilight being a golem was, I have to admit this story was written pretty well and was a very entertaining and engaging 'what-if' scenario. However, the sequel, as I attempted to read was just far too long for my taste with such a concept that really doesn't stay appealing for the length of a novel.

Still, entertaining story none the less. :ajsmug:

#10 · 132w, 6d ago · · · Redemption ·

Completely epic.:pinkiesad2:

#11 · 132w, 6d ago · · · Redemption ·

For the life of me I kept thinking the name was something else (And that it was already on here).  Thank you so much for putting it on FIMFiction so I can read it again!:twilightsmile:

And that is the most epic picture in ponydom.

#12 · 132w, 6d ago · · · Redemption ·

Awww :pinkiesad2:. Why doesn't this story have more views? It's well written, it's has a very good plotline I've never seen before, and the emotions and characters are well written to. This story deserves more views.

#13 · 132w, 6d ago · 1 · · Redemption ·

The "Oh, by the way, Trixie is your sister" acknowledgements didn't really add anything.  It feel like a pointless attempt to keep this fic in continuity with your other story, even though there was no real reason to do so.    It's not like Trixie had any role in this story.

#14 · 132w, 5d ago · · · Redemption ·

AWW YEAH!! my favorite story is on the site? I'm so happy. :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::yay::yay:

#15 · 132w, 5d ago · · · Redemption ·


True, and I realized this a little while after it was first published, but I am not the kind of person to go back and change things once something is published, no matter how much I may want to facehoof over it. Like the ending to My Little Muffin: lackluster and a deus ex in hindsight. :facehoof: So unless I decide to do it over from scratch (which is a lot of time and effort) it is not likely to change.

#16 · 132w, 5d ago · · · Redemption ·

wow i remember this story it was the first one i read on equestria daily man i loved this story.

#17 · 132w, 4d ago · · · Redemption ·

Wait, this has 700+ views. How's it BELOW "My Little Sister" which is a oneshot poem with only 180 views?

.....FimFiction is stupid like this when it comes to the "popular" stories list.

On a lighter note, you're on FimFiction. HUZZAH!

I was apparently very late to the party for reading this. For Want Of A Dawn was already out and had like 4-5 chapters. But it's still awesome all the same. Trackfaved and thumbed (up) with a passion.

#18 · 132w, 4d ago · · · Dawn ·

That's quite a skeleton in Celestia's closet.  I LOVE IT!!

#19 · 132w, 4d ago · 1 · · Twilight ·

And now Twilight is content with the knowledge...OR IS SHE?!

#20 · 132w, 4d ago · 3 · · Moonrise ·

"My entire life is a lie."

And then, an insanity that makes 'Lesson Zero' look like a tiny tantrum.

I mean, YIKES!

#21 · 132w, 4d ago · · · Eclipse ·

WOW.  That was amazing.

#22 · 132w, 4d ago · · · Redemption ·


#23 · 132w, 4d ago · · · Redemption ·

so this is what happened: :twilightsmile:  :twilightoops: :twilightangry2: :facehoof: :twilightsheepish:

#24 · 132w, 4d ago · · · Redemption ·

I was wondering when you were going to post sunset to this site.:twilightsmile:

Though I am surprised this does not have more views.

#25 · 132w, 2d ago · · · Redemption ·

Oh, hey, this made it here! Is your in-progress fic going to make it to FimFiction at some point? :D

#26 · 132w, 2d ago · · · Redemption ·

Yay! Soon "For Want of a Dawn" will be here, and I won't have to suffer dA anymore! :yay:

...on the other hoof, though, I have been stuck on Drifting through Draconia ever since it was posted. I am SO bucking behind right now... :facehoof:

#27 · 131w, 5d ago · 3 · · Twilight ·

I give her one night's sleep before she kicks into super OCD mode.

#28 · 131w, 5d ago · · · Redemption ·

Hmm... this was a surprisingly nice story, a story with forgiveness and sin both. Not something I could see happen canonically (all that stupid spirit of the show, etc. etc.) but that being said? This story rocked.

#29 · 131w, 5d ago · · · Redemption ·

This is seriously one of the most genius ideas I've ever heard of for a story, this was a amazing story. Good job.

#30 · 131w, 5d ago · · · Redemption ·

This was an absolutely amazing read. I enjoyed it thoroughly and spent about 4 hours on it! I loved your use of names for twilight and the princess. And I nearly cried when she called her mom. Adding tricked as a sis was a nice touch too! Anyway, awesome read and watching you!


#31 · 131w, 3d ago · · · Redemption ·

think this was the second fic i ever read, and probably the only so far that i have re-read. this one was also the real start of my fanfic reading :pinkiehappy:

#32 · 131w, 3d ago · · · Redemption ·

You know, Twilight should be tagged separately from the mane six as she is the most important character (likely she was untagged do to them being collapsed into a single tag).

#33 · 131w, 3d ago · · · Redemption ·

Great story. Bravo.

It was an interesting concept, having Twilight being a golem. Something I would have never expected.

#34 · 129w, 5d ago · · · Redemption ·

This is my favorite story of all time, I love the plot and the events and suspense and the tension amongest Twilight and the other characters. Flawless story.:twilightsmile:

#35 · 129w, 3d ago · 1 · · Dawn ·

You need to post ''for want of dawn' here. I'm watching you

#36 · 129w, 1d ago · · · Redemption ·

I didn't even notice this had been posted! What's wrong with me? Thanks again for bringing another great piece of work to this site.

#37 · 129w, 1d ago · · · Dawn ·

Oh my

#38 · 129w, 1d ago · 1 · · Moonrise ·

Oh MY.

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#40 · 128w, 6d ago · · · Redemption ·

This one is here?!? Awesome!!! :rainbowkiss:

#41 · 128w, 2d ago · · · Redemption ·

Is it recommended that I read "The Reluctant reunion of the Redoubtable Rabble-Rouser" as well before this seeing as it is a sequel to "Blood is Thicker"? I am really keen on starting to read this sooo.....:pinkiehappy:

#42 · 128w, 2d ago · · · Redemption ·


Nope! Just Blood is Thicker. ^^ Of course, if you WANT to read 'Reluctant Reunions', then by all means, go ahead! ^^;;

#43 · 127w, 2d ago · · · Redemption ·

I didn't think I would ever like a grimdark story so much. It's powerful, it's heart-wrenching, and yet it's so beautiful.

This won't upset my headcanon, but I wouldn't mind if something close to that turned to be true (Yeah, of course it could :rainbowlaugh:)

This made me go through the whole emotional gradient, which is no small feat considering my depressive tendencies. Your portrayal of Derpy (sorry, Ditzy burns...) was pure genius, as well as your use of the Doc. The fight was both breath-taking and heartbreaking, and it's conclusion left me crying in a corner for half an hour.

You Sir are an artist, and I should be honored to read any future fanfic of yours. Actually, I probably wouldn't hesitate to buy any book you might publish in the future, if you get the opportunity.


#44 · 126w, 6d ago · · · Redemption ·

The three smartest ponies acting pants-on-head retarded for more than a minute just doesn't work for me

#45 · 126w, 3d ago · · · Eclipse ·

I loved this battle, just raw energy and emotion of it.

#46 · 125w, 6d ago · 2 · · Moonrise ·

Moonrise -> Moon -> Luna -> Lunatic

On a more serious note, I really like how you managed her change from calm and collected to a mad ball of purple energy by using hallucinations. I was wondering how you wanted to do that at first, but I never expected that.:twilightsmile:

#47 · 125w, 2d ago · 1 · · Moonrise ·

Ummm...ACID TRIP!!:flutterrage::flutterrage:

#48 · 123w, 5d ago · · · Redemption ·

Just that cover image is enough to pique my interest.  That combined with the description inspired one of my semi-rare "O fuck... :pinkiegasp:" moments.  I haven't read Blood Is Thicker yet, though, so I suppose I should get on that.

Le sigh...  So much to read...  :fluttershyouch:

#49 · 123w, 3d ago · · · Redemption ·

Most impressive. I respect your work here. You know how to work with the heart, as well as with magic in combat, not easily done between casters who can essentially do anything. I look forward to reading further work by you.

#50 · 122w, 6d ago · · · Redemption ·

she got off the hook too easily. I mean, I know it wasn't her fault... but stiiilll...

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