My Little Pony: Family is Magic

by MLfan

The conclusion

"Huh? Why me?" Sparky said nervously.

"Well, let's recap." Lawn answered. "Writehoof, Daredriver and I all ended up in a secret room no one else knew about. Daredriver and I have been sleeping there for the past few months, which I will come back to later. Wrighthoof is with us on this night. Sparky, however, is not. How did he avoid them? Why did he not hear screaming? Because he was in cahoots with them.

"Bu-But that's only speculation" He stammered.

Okay, let's then (ahem) "speculate" that you are in cahoots. With this information, let us continue. Now, he claims that he was looking for mom and dad, but I think he was looking for Writehoof.

Writehoof is shocked! "Why me!? Why not you two?

"I'll get to that later. Next, we found out about the footprints and mysterious magicIn all kinds of places, but that in itself doesn't give too many clues. Something that does give clues is that all footprints are different, meaning more than one pony did this. The evil magic is also similar, but not the same. This means that we have an evil army on our hands!

All three of the others were scared now, but for different reasons.

"Now, I can think of only one army with evil magic, but I'll continue anyways. The final nail in the coffin is the fact that the mysterious hoofprints' source can be traced back to the seemingly normal ponies' room. Finnally, the thing that confirmed my suspicions that Sparky is in cahoots... is the hoofprints."

"What do you mean?" asked Wrighthoof.

"I don't understand..." said Sparky.

Lawn turned to sparky: You didn't know that I had your hoofprints. Think back to what I said: "Basically, we looked for hoofprints and only found dad's, with another unrecognizable set. We also found traces of dark magic!" I didn't mention how I got them: from a mystery. Because of this, You were unalarmed. But I have you old hoofprints... and I compared them to the ones in your room. Would you like them to be compared to your own?

Not sparky stayed silent.

"You're a changling, aren't you?"

He remained silent.

"It's your choice. Should I tell them, or will you?

"... fine." the changeling said "You've caught me. I'll tell you, not that you don't already know. We have slowly been replacing ponies. Each changeling studied movements for months, then, in the middle of the night, replaced them. when half the population became changelings, in the middle of the night, all at once, the changelings brought the victims back to the hive to feed on them.

"But there was a problem," Lawn interrupted "Me or daredriver, I don't know which yet, were in our top secret hideaway, and couldn't be found. When the time came, you couldn't find who you needed... Writehoof. So we made it through the night, while no one else did."

"You got it" said the changeling, now... amused? "You stand no chance! Our queen has sent messages! She successfully posed as cadence. She took down even Celestia! You don't stand a chance..."

With that, the changeling tranformed into it's original form, and Teleported away.

Lawn was stunned. Wrighthoof noticed and yelled: "Quick! Follow the teleport!"

When Writehoof said it, he snapped out of it. "Okay!" He leaned over to Wrighthoof. "Thanks, sis." He said in complete earnest.

They followed the trace to Canterlot: their new hive. They just arrived at the gate, and they stood there, not wanting to face this impossible challenge.

"How do we get in?" asked Writehoof

"Hmmm... let me think, Okay?" said Lawn.

Daredriver had an idea: What if we... nah..."

"What is it?" the other two said simultaneously.

Daredriver said "Well... what if we rescue everyone that was kidnapped? If they're on our side, we have a fair chance..."

Lawn order said "You know... that just might work! Okay, Writehoof and I will confront the queen while Daredriver rescues...

"No." said Wrighthoof.

"What do you mean?" asked Lawn.

"I mean that I shouldn't confront the queen.Daredriver came up with this, and has helped you this whole time. Without you, we would never know that Sparky was a changeling. You two... Take down the queen!"

Daredriver and Lawn were stunned for a few seconds, and nodded, proud of their sister for the self sacrifice.

There weren't any changelings out and about, probably because they were too busy feasting on the love of the captured ones, so the two of them ran straight to the throne room, where the queen changeling, Queen Chrysalis. "What-... how-... What are you doing here!?"

"One of your changelings was unable to find me," Daredriver answered, "and then revealed your plan and led us right to you!"

"That imbicile..." she started angrily, then regained her composure "Oh, well. There is no way you can defeat me. I can just call my changelings to me-"

"Um... no you can't" said Draedriver

"And why not?"

"We have an operative on standby, ready to release everyone from prison. She is doing it as we speak. I think your operatives are a bit... preoccupied."

"You're bluffing."

"Am I?" He raised an eyebrow.

"Fine then, I can defeat you on my own!

Christallis fired a bolt of dark magic right at them! they each rolled in different directions. she charged up a bolt at Law Order

"Keep dodging until backup arrives!" yelled Lawn.

Queen Christalis realized that this wasn't working, so she changed tactics. She flew at daredriver at top speeds! Daredriver had no time to react, and was tackled to the floor! Lawn Order saw that they were losing, and sent a magical SOS to Writehoof

Meanwhile, Writehoof's job was going smoothly, ands he started a rebellion. soon, everypony was chaseing the changeelings away! The changlings never stood a chance! Then she got the SOS! She started to lead the rebellion to he castle, she hoped she would make it in time...

Meanwhile, Lawn and Daredriver were losing. She was just too fast. Eventually, Lawn said: "I give up."

Daredriver whispered: "Are you crazy?

"Just trust me, Okay?"

Daredriverr looked at him long and hard, and finally nodded.

Lawn turned to look at queen Christalis and said "Do what you want. We give up."

Then... she started boasting! It was like a gift from heaven. She boasted for so long, that the rebellion came! She knew she had no chance, so she flew away. Fortunately, canterlot is so high up, there were clouds nearby! So, with everyone else stunned, Lawn cast a cloud walking spell and gave chase!

He ran across the clouds, bounding across the clouds, Free... alive! he was getting closer and closer, and Queen Christalis knew she wasn't fast enough! So, she kicked the cloud behind her! Lawn fell right through and started to plummet. Then... he had a magic surge. His eyes glowed white, and clouds started being shot from his horn! Through all of this, he managed to focus his energy into a cloud under him, and he landed. He used all of his might and shot a cage of clouds straight at the ex-queen. She was caught! When the rest of them caught up, he explained what had happened so far. Then Daredriver pointed at lawn's flank. "Look, your cutie mark!" He looked down. It was a magnifying glass and hammer crossing a cloud. "What does it mean?" Daredriver asked.

"Well, I'm a detective, I can make clouds, and with this, I can build pegasus cities! Although, I've never read about this ability. I'm going to read up on this magic when I get back."

So, they all went back home. The end... of this story. they have many mare adventures to come!

Author's Note:

I will continue posting on this story. Consider this book one, If you will. I have much more planned for these four... check in soon! By the way, this takes place during "A Canterlot Wedding", but the changelings have a new plan.

Comments

[JustAnotherOutcast]

The story is really nice! It has quite a few grammar and spelling mistakes, but they're easily fixable. Not much to worry about!

The story itself is short and sweet, though sometimes it gets a little confusing. Just going through it and making sure that the words are actually saying what you want them to would be helpful.

Just a little worry of mine concerning this story. You seem to completely overlook the Maine Six and their quest in this story. Even if it was intentional, replacing cannon characters (characters from the show) with OCs (characters you made up) isn't viewed very positively in most circles. Of course, that doesn't mean that the story isn't worth reading, but it does leave some readers a little annoyed and could dissuade them from reading your story entirely. Just a little warning.

One last thing. As addressed by Jomintine in a comment previous to mine, your description could use a bit of work. I'm not sure how long descriptions are supposed to be on this site as I just got here, but descriptions that are shorter usually attract more crowds. You want to try to avoid describing things like cities and characters. (Leave that for the story itself.) Focus more on the plot. Try to be mysterious though; you don't want to spoil the plot to the reader, you just want to get them interested.

All in all, I really like this story, and I'm excited to see more of your work! If you want any advice, feel free to ask! :D