IMO, going into a multi-way straight off the bat with Applejack is a bit fast for a clop story - that said, what was there was still pretty hot. So kudos on that end.
One night got her a third of what she needed, but she didn't have enough come when the others showed up. This brings me to conclude that she could have easily been there for another night, if not two. Meaning there was at least one night where she was on shift with Golden Dawn.
Edit: Although I now suddenly have a mental image of another bonus chapter being "Last Round Up: Alternate Ending", where when AJ says she'll tell them over breakfast, one or more of them is suspicious and follows her out to that empty barn for her last night on shift and they all end up pitching in to help her earn the money.
4966414 Mane 6 plus a bunch of stallions? I don't think that's practical, just on account of the sheer number of participants. As fun as gangbangs and orgies are to watch, I've found they're not exactly easy to pull off in writing while giving everyone enough 'screen time.'
I'm gonna have a hard enough time to somehow fit in the seven OCs for the extra chapter without things getting confusing.
5078900 It was labeled as complete, and a sequel is in the works. I've decided to release that as a "bonus chapter" rather than a completely new story. That's why the status is marked as incomplete at the moment.
4966454 5105055 Hey, now that sounds like a really good idea. If you want, I can help you write it out? I don't mind helping, and I've always wanted to do a coop story with a fellow writer. If you are interested, just PM me the details.
Moar Like this plz:)
That was pretty damn hot
.... Well, against my better judgement I read this..... Nope.
Funnily enough, that does explain everything. And damn was it hot!
Ok, that was... strange. Not bad, just... strange.
WOW, DAMN!!! I LOVE THIS STORY!!! I GOT EXCITED!!!
SEQUEL PLEASE!!!!
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Maybe... I mean I already see two Opportunities for a Sequel
4704130 Yeah. This story gives that a whole new meaning!
IMO, going into a multi-way straight off the bat with Applejack is a bit fast for a clop story - that said, what was there was still pretty hot. So kudos on that end.
More please.
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I already talked to Ranko about a Sequel feat. a completly new Character, a very special new Character
4744172 *gasp* Is it Little Strongheart?
4744203
No, sorry if you wanted her in a Clop (maybe you could ask Ranko for a Commission )
Looking back at this a thought occurs to me.
One night got her a third of what she needed, but she didn't have enough come when the others showed up. This brings me to conclude that she could have easily been there for another night, if not two. Meaning there was at least one night where she was on shift with Golden Dawn.
Any chance that will ever get written?
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We'll see. All I'm gonna say for now is, we're gonna see Dawn make another appearance in the upcoming extra chapter.
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Sweet.
Edit: Although I now suddenly have a mental image of another bonus chapter being "Last Round Up: Alternate Ending", where when AJ says she'll tell them over breakfast, one or more of them is suspicious and follows her out to that empty barn for her last night on shift and they all end up pitching in to help her earn the money.
...or would that take more than one chapter?
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Mane 6 plus a bunch of stallions? I don't think that's practical, just on account of the sheer number of participants. As fun as gangbangs and orgies are to watch, I've found they're not exactly easy to pull off in writing while giving everyone enough 'screen time.'
I'm gonna have a hard enough time to somehow fit in the seven OCs for the extra chapter without things getting confusing.
4966454
Yeah...doing that would probably have to be six chapters, one for each mare.
Still, would be so hot to picture.
Unless it turned into "one customer pays big to have all six at once".
...is it weird I'm picturing that customer to be Blueblood?
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Blueblood? Yeah, this is gonna end well.
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Far more likely that Rarity would beat the money out of him.
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That could also be fun...
I like the way you think! Great story!
I like it, but shouldn't this story be labled as complete? Also, could you make a sequal or something?
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It was labeled as complete, and a sequel is in the works. I've decided to release that as a "bonus chapter" rather than a completely new story. That's why the status is marked as incomplete at the moment.
5079195
So there will a sequal as well as a bonus chapter? AWESOME!
5079407
No, the bonus chapter will be the sequel.
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oh, ok
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4966414
Don't give me Ideas for another Chapter
4966454
Yeah, that much OCs is a literal Overkill . So the next Commissions will have less Ponies
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5105055
Hey, now that sounds like a really good idea. If you want, I can help you write it out? I don't mind helping, and I've always wanted to do a coop story with a fellow writer. If you are interested, just PM me the details.
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hahahaha great fic man
I LOST it there, flat mates came to my room wondering what it was.
Then they saw the words and slowly backed away.