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There is a haevy amount of sex in the current arc I mean I like sex and girl on girl is great to read or watch.... but the whole bdsm thing was a turn off... I'm not dising the fetish but you and the co writer got carried away... mind I have read fetish stories and done rps but this feels like you are just trying to see how much you can play up the mistress Twilight thing. And went too far that is really a one chapter thing not 5 or more.
I'm not jodgueing I'm a vorephilla and a furry so I understand out there fetish, but the bit and bridle arc is well it feels like your throwing out story for pointless sex.
it seems that twilight is finally learning to embrace the role i feel she is most suited for. the Alpha! although she still has to deal with the others.
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To be fair, Twi is learning to fight.. in that ONE chapter...
4873342 true but still over board on the sex... And with her learning you think dash would take her to a range and put her through the basics on common weapons, repeater rifles, assault rifles, snipers, shotguns, pistols, smgs, grenades and grenade launchers. You know so she doesn't kill her self loading a weapon.
Uh.. yeah, this can be a part of SR and GTA, but more of SR with how there is some degree of latex in the game.
Can we get back to the immense world of a GTA/SR hybrid gang war?
This is a great story so far, and I dont mind the whole sex thing, but 5 chapters of it? It would get more publicity, and this story less dislikes from other people, if it was put in a separate story on its own. A side-story for instance. I am saying this to try and help you, not make you mad. You have a great thing going with this story, dont sacrifice the plotline for more sex scenes. Try and moderate them for the best results.
yeah but then again she barely knows how to shoot a gun so shes no expert now id say shes barely a noob killing some guy after he was done with his speech skeptic unicorn is skeptic
welll that and i can under stand your concern for twiightbut it would'nt be dramatic build up but seriosly where would u use a freakin sniper in a god damned city effictivly with out it endin ing in wanton death and destruction
but yeah your technically right twi just barely learned how to use a pistol which could mean the difference between life and death but still give some credit to the writer its only the 21 chapter he ll do some fleshing out to let her learn hopefully
GOD DAMMIT TWI
Y U SO SEXY?!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Best smut I've ever read XD