Wait, we're continuing the griffon war saga? Hmmm interesting. I look forward to more of this.
Also, when I read the "power comes at a great price" line, for some reason I had one of those brain dead thoughts that said he would lose his dick as the price. don't judge, I am way too tired for logic.
Comment posted by lordofmyth deleted May 2nd, 2014
call me a plot Nazi if you have to. i'll tattoo a swastika to my chest if I must. but the concepts you are working with do not mesh well with at all with what is known and seen. sombra was overpowered by the regal sisters, likely much younger ones and by their own raw power than the elements since sombra did not lose his powers. thus what use would a fragment of sombra's power wielded by and inexperienced magic user, against the regal sisters? any one of them alone could eliminate him now, and would cause he has madeh imsefl a target.
and there are a lot of logical fallacies. discord not coming because the character chose? the characters lose influence the moment discord and the likelihood of him coming along came up. not to mention he stands as a completely impossible obstacle, especially for a user of a far lesser dark magic. so it basically makes rainbow and spitfire dying meaningless cause he has no chance.
there are a whole lot of toehrs but I do not want to rave and rant too long. just nothings fits. the moment this guy encoutners disord, a regal sister, likely even twilight, he loses. simple as that. story over.
story telling has certain rules to it. you have to work around what you want done with the capacity of the characters, as characters make the story. you need to know how your plans could be unraveled. basically if solution is so simple as the regal sisters and twilight teleporting and surrounding your oc and blasting him till only cinders remain, which is full in their aiblities and he lacks the ability to stop this, and their anger over his actions would allow them the twisted will to outright kill a hen, then there is a problem here.
......uugh, I feel like I have been nothing but critical with almost every story I have come across. I am story if I am being harsh but I feel flaws need to be addressed. just that I cannot think of anything that would be constructive here.
they did not use the elements to defeat sombra. we have seen what they do. they either purge darkness from a target, petrify one that is dangerous but not outright wicked, and possibly outright destroy someone who is purely wicked. sombra's fate was likely a working of their own magic and not the elements, else he would have no power. that means they kicked his ass personally.
it also means the horn is about as useful as the alicorn amulet on snips or snails. it is a crticism i had since the last story and i retain now. it makes no sense and the object is worthless agaisnt the enemy........ meaning dash and spitefire's death is moe idiotic because of it.
even more so Discord would have killed him already. no matter how you interpret his reform or not, he doubtlessly loves fluttershy. the opening has him hiding in her cottage watching her with a soft expression. dash's demise would leave fluttershy broken and grieving........... there is no stretches of the imaginiation that would either allow the gryphon to defeat discord or for discord not to rent a tiny piece off of the gryphon for every single tear from flutter's eyes.
4327892 basically it is a continuation of his last fic.............. it had a really forced ending.
biggest problem might be one we shared. how would sombra's horn actually be a weapon agains tthe regal sisters? all evidence points to them defeating him under their own powe, a thosuand years ago when they were younger. so what would that horn, probably not even containing all his power at all, would be against the beigns that overhwlmed the sisters?
not to mention we gots discord. discord, definitely not gonna be possible to defeat.
4327956 think the idea is that it etain sombra's power or something. and the gryphon somehow connected to it..............
as i said, i cannot see why that would give him any powe to fight the regal sisters. hell i would almsot say that the youngest alicorn, twilight, could either overpower or fight him evenly.
They contained the souls of Diablo, Baal and Mephisto, in Diablo 1, the protagonist gets the one with Diablo in it, stabs himself with it, and its corrupts him, and he will resurrect Diablo in Diablo 2, in short
4328703 I see. And I'm aware that King Sombra's horn has dark magic. That's a bad thing and it can be troubling. It can corrupt the user the more it is used.
I always hted ray the mother fucker. God damn it. If even a pony rescued from the caverns, yes, I bet you know who i'm talking about, were to have survived his suicide, he could use the crystal heart
I am happy Mr. Camel. Here is why: -Finals are done. -My favorite story is continuing. - This is a great present for making it through another semester. -You are amazing. -
I think Ray is going to find out about the phrase "With great power, comes great responsibility" the hard way...
Interesting start to this series... I'm out for blood... Ray's blood that is...
Interesting. I wonder how this will end.
Sombra's horn eh? We will see about at. This is getting interesting.
I'm still sad with the fate that the viewers gave the other, ponies (no spoilers)
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fuck it. THE ADVENTURE CONTINUES
Wait, we're continuing the griffon war saga? Hmmm interesting. I look forward to more of this.
Also, when I read the "power comes at a great price" line, for some reason I had one of those brain dead thoughts that said he would lose his dick as the price. don't judge, I am way too tired for logic.
call me a plot Nazi if you have to. i'll tattoo a swastika to my chest if I must. but the concepts you are working with do not mesh well with at all with what is known and seen. sombra was overpowered by the regal sisters, likely much younger ones and by their own raw power than the elements since sombra did not lose his powers. thus what use would a fragment of sombra's power wielded by and inexperienced magic user, against the regal sisters? any one of them alone could eliminate him now, and would cause he has madeh imsefl a target.
and there are a lot of logical fallacies. discord not coming because the character chose? the characters lose influence the moment discord and the likelihood of him coming along came up. not to mention he stands as a completely impossible obstacle, especially for a user of a far lesser dark magic. so it basically makes rainbow and spitfire dying meaningless cause he has no chance.
there are a whole lot of toehrs but I do not want to rave and rant too long. just nothings fits. the moment this guy encoutners disord, a regal sister, likely even twilight, he loses. simple as that. story over.
story telling has certain rules to it. you have to work around what you want done with the capacity of the characters, as characters make the story. you need to know how your plans could be unraveled. basically if solution is so simple as the regal sisters and twilight teleporting and surrounding your oc and blasting him till only cinders remain, which is full in their aiblities and he lacks the ability to stop this, and their anger over his actions would allow them the twisted will to outright kill a hen, then there is a problem here.
......uugh, I feel like I have been nothing but critical with almost every story I have come across. I am story if I am being harsh but I feel flaws need to be addressed. just that I cannot think of anything that would be constructive here.
Well, the elements are now useless, I'm cutious what comes next
4327780 When you say that. Something tells me that this is not going to end well is it?
4327780 celestia and luna killing his ass?
they did not use the elements to defeat sombra. we have seen what they do. they either purge darkness from a target, petrify one that is dangerous but not outright wicked, and possibly outright destroy someone who is purely wicked. sombra's fate was likely a working of their own magic and not the elements, else he would have no power.
that means they kicked his ass personally.
it also means the horn is about as useful as the alicorn amulet on snips or snails. it is a crticism i had since the last story and i retain now. it makes no sense and the object is worthless agaisnt the enemy........ meaning dash and spitefire's death is moe idiotic because of it.
even more so Discord would have killed him already. no matter how you interpret his reform or not, he doubtlessly loves fluttershy. the opening has him hiding in her cottage watching her with a soft expression. dash's demise would leave fluttershy broken and grieving...........
there is no stretches of the imaginiation that would either allow the gryphon to defeat discord or for discord not to rent a tiny piece off of the gryphon for every single tear from flutter's eyes.
Hmm. Something doesn't feel right or sense about this story. :/ Somepony enlighten me please?
4327892 basically it is a continuation of his last fic.............. it had a really forced ending.
biggest problem might be one we shared. how would sombra's horn actually be a weapon agains tthe regal sisters? all evidence points to them defeating him under their own powe, a thosuand years ago when they were younger. so what would that horn, probably not even containing all his power at all, would be against the beigns that overhwlmed the sisters?
not to mention we gots discord. discord, definitely not gonna be possible to defeat.
4327948 Hmm. True. But if King Sombra's horn is cut off. How is it still active?
4327956 think the idea is that it etain sombra's power or something. and the gryphon somehow connected to it..............
as i said, i cannot see why that would give him any powe to fight the regal sisters. hell i would almsot say that the youngest alicorn, twilight, could either overpower or fight him evenly.
4327962 Hmm. Now I'm confused.
4327971
It seems like the horn is like the soul stones from Diablo...
4328257 soul stones from Diablo? What's that?
4328283
They contained the souls of Diablo, Baal and Mephisto, in Diablo 1, the protagonist gets the one with Diablo in it, stabs himself with it, and its corrupts him, and he will resurrect Diablo in Diablo 2, in short
4328637 I see. Now before I can get confused. How in the hay did Ray the griffon found King Sombra's horn?
4328643
I don't really remember the details, but it was in a cave somewhere north. How did he learn the exact location is beyond me.
4328703 I see. And I'm aware that King Sombra's horn has dark magic. That's a bad thing and it can be troubling. It can corrupt the user the more it is used.
I always hted ray the mother fucker. God damn it. If even a pony rescued from the caverns, yes, I bet you know who i'm talking about, were to have survived his suicide, he could use the crystal heart
I am happy Mr. Camel. Here is why:
-Finals are done.
-My favorite story is continuing.
- This is a great present for making it through another semester.
-You are amazing.
-