Freshman year. A year for changes. Follow the main character as he get the first tastes of manhood
Hmmmmmmm okay.Good chapter.
Pacing is still fast, there's still a lot of grammatical errors, and it's shorter than spike.
You had my attention, but you've lost it.
4380943 what do you mean 'shorter that spike'?
Also, I posted this in between coming home from school and going to work. Edits will be made, possibly tomorrow
Pacing should show down in Chapter 5. I am thing a max of 10 chapters
I have to say it is okay but it's just to short for the first time ever I hadn't cared about grammar errors
Who would've ever thought being caught in a life-and-death situation be made so kinky?
Your getting better, it's mostly grammar errors now, and try stretching it out a little more.
4393019 could you point out some of the problems please? If you do, pm them to me. Please?;)
4390305 *you're
4397062 I should have seen that mistake.
4389240 Bow chicka bow wow
4389240You said it, buddy XD
Gah! That's the punishment for rocket-skis. (I should know. Been there, done that, got the scars). Sexing with a compound fracture though...
Hmmmmmmm okay.Good chapter.
Pacing is still fast, there's still a lot of grammatical errors, and it's shorter than spike.
You had my attention, but you've lost it.
4380943 what do you mean 'shorter that spike'?
Also, I posted this in between coming home from school and going to work. Edits will be made, possibly tomorrow
Pacing should show down in Chapter 5. I am thing a max of 10 chapters
I have to say it is okay but it's just to short for the first time ever I hadn't cared about grammar errors
Who would've ever thought being caught in a life-and-death situation be made so kinky?
Your getting better, it's mostly grammar errors now, and try stretching it out a little more.
4393019 could you point out some of the problems please? If you do, pm them to me. Please?;)
4390305
*you're
4397062 I should have seen that mistake.
4389240 Bow chicka bow wow
4389240
You said it, buddy XD
Gah! That's the punishment for rocket-skis. (I should know. Been there, done that, got the scars). Sexing with a compound fracture though...