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4417279 I fell behind a bit last week, so hopefully this week I can get past my little block so I can get two out to keep up with the schedule that I impressed upon myself
Um... The hell? One moment they're in the barracks, then Nick is in a war room after an unknown amount of time... You should probably include some kind of time jump sequence like " THREE DAYS LATER " or something.
5335579 That's what the page break was supposed to be for, The war room itself is still located in the castle, but the -{DW}- page break is where the location shifted.
I certainly can go back in and put a [later that day] transition though.
Woah woah woah! What is going on! Too much is going on in too little time!
First a car, flat tyre, bright light. Turning into anthropomorphic pony marines, killing a squad, bowing to the princesses, briefing in the war room, talking with Luna.
It's all just a blur!
Fix the pacing of the story, please!
You need a Crimson Fist Breacher Marine.