Not bad but I have never played the game

4265033 You won't need to know the game in order to understand the story, if that is what you are asking.

Just so you know your story was added to the Fallout Equestria Group by G-man64. Feel free to PM me if you have any questions!

4265238 I watched a video of gameplay and it is interesting.

4265390 the main reason? Organization, this story is, and will continue to involve a lot of characters, so I decided for something more clear to avoid confusion.

4265390 It's the Brazilian way of writing spoken dialogue. In it, double quotes are used to denote internal monologue lines. I know I got confused as all hell when I read my first English narrative, thinking "why the hell is everybody thinking instead of saying?"

4265566 Melhor usar travessões (Alt+0151) em vez de meias-riscas (Alt+0150) ou hífens (sinais de menos) e fazer marcas de parágrafo quando começar uma linha falada. Você anda misturando esses sinais.

4270933 Obrigado, de fato tenho tido certos problemas com os sinais. Afinal, esta é minha primeira história.

4272392 Isso significa uma coisa: escreva mais!

You said you needed some feedback? Here it is!

First off, it's been a while since 2142 has been brought up in my life so that peaked my interest. I do enjoy what you've done overall so far, but it felt like certain things took a while to get to. "Where do the ponies show up?" Is something I asked myself kinda frequently. While I'm not the biggest fan of FO:E (in fact I flat out hate it), I don't rate stories without reading them at least a little bit. The characters, I had a little trouble keeping track of, but that's mostly me just not being very attentive. Those are my thoughts on your story. I hope this helps you and motivates you to continue writing. Also, I can't stress enough how important it is to expect and ignore hater downvotes, especially if you put the FO:E stamp on your story.

4280732 thank you, I cannot express how good it is to have actual feedback.

You are right about the characters and the ponies, I'll see if I can add a few more lines so people can know when they show up and why, and maybe a small list of characters on the end of each chapter so everyone can keep track.

Thank you again, I shall continue to improve my writing.

-50% movement speed? jesus fuck thats a heavy penalty