The perfect day

TThe Adventure of Galloping Waves
MLP: FiM
Romance
Adventure
Comedy
This is the serious sequel to my first fanfic, The Perfect Day, about Luna and Snowcap's child and the unfortunate adventure he is forced onto. There will be trials of hardship and ponies will be pushed to the brink of what they will do for fami
Sex
Celestia
Luna
OC
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Evilhumour · 31k words · 485 views

Celestia and Luna have a bit a rocky history with their parents. As such, they wish to make amends by having one simple day. But with alicorns of course, nothing is simple. First fanfic here, so be kind please.

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nodamnbrakes

nodamnbrakes #1 · Apr 26th, 2014 · 2 · ·

First fanfic

only seen the information on TV Tropes and fanfics

Be kind please

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Let me be the first to welcome you to FIMFiction, sweetheart.

Also, you spelled alicorns wrong in the summary.

MidnightDancer

MidnightDancer #2 · Apr 26th, 2014 · 1 · ·

You might want to watch the episodes. Your characterization is flat and stunningly boring. There's more to them than that. Relying on fanfics to do the work for you is a really bad idea since the vast majority of fanfic writers are not very good at it.

Peppy Greyskull

Peppy Greyskull #3 · Apr 26th, 2014 · 2 · ·

>writes fanfiction about ponies
>has no fucking clue what the ponies really are
>using tvtropes as a reference
>don't hate me 'cause i don't know what I'm doing

Sometimes, I like to murder children and mail their body parts to their parents.

Evilhumour

Evilhumour #4 · Apr 26th, 2014 · · ·

4294085 Ah thanks.

Evilhumour

Evilhumour #5 · Apr 26th, 2014 · · ·

4294110 True.

Evilhumour

Evilhumour #6 · Apr 26th, 2014 · · ·

4294183 And thank you for being what I feared when I showed how little I knew about the show.

Evilhumour

Evilhumour #7 · Apr 26th, 2014 · · ·

4294303 Thanks for the kind words, but I really should get to watching the show as it would help build my knowledge and thus my work.

Peppy Greyskull

Peppy Greyskull #8 · Apr 26th, 2014 · 1 · ·

4294322 You know what, say what you will about your terrible first attempt, but at least you recognize that you were wrong in doing so and wish to improve. You have earned a little respect from me, which is rare.

You're still writing a terrible OC x Canon story, but at least you're willing to become better.

Evilhumour

Evilhumour #9 · Apr 26th, 2014 · 1 · ·

4294335 yeah, we all screw up in our first attempts, but thank you none the less.

nodamnbrakes

nodamnbrakes #10 · Apr 26th, 2014 · · ·

4294303

I find him sexually arousing.

Peppy Greyskull

Peppy Greyskull #11 · Apr 26th, 2014 · · ·

4294340 Not all of us, but we aren't perfect for sure.

4294343 Obby.

nodamnbrakes

nodamnbrakes #12 · Apr 26th, 2014 · · ·

4294340

It's more that nobody can figure out why you would write fanfiction of a show you've never seen.

You're not bad technically, but you definitely need to watch an episode or two xD Your characterization is awful.

Evilhumour

Evilhumour #13 · Apr 26th, 2014 · · ·

4294350 This I can explain. I, for the most part, was uniterested in the series, keeping my distance. However, as I discovered and learned to love Adventure Time by first watching the episodes to first show the Liech King, I too learned to get into this fandom by first reading the darkest one, regarded by many that is, Cupcakes. My interest was peaked, and I started to read more and more fanfictions as I started to enjoy the fandom, reading TV tropes to get better understanding of the characters and setting. I do know that to get the real and best understanding is to actually watch the show, but I am dragging my feet into doing so. I hope this explained your question.

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