For seven years Diamond Mist as been in a coma. For seven years her sister, Nurse Redheart, her husband Filthy Rich, and daughter Diamond Tiara have waited for any sign of life from her. When she wakes up, she isn't the same. The lights are on but their loved one isn't at home. Michael Carter, an Economics grad student from Birmingham, Alabama, find himself marooned inside a body that isn't his. He has to cope with the struggle of living a different life.
First person fiction.
Looking for cover art if anyone is interested.
Special thanks goes out to my Prereaders EclipterROME and Hotshot.
Chapters (3)
please continue.
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Don't worry I will. Should have the next chapter finished by Saturday night.
Y'know, this sorta thing happening is legitimately one of my biggest fears. I'm putting this on read later due to curiosity. There were a few present-past tense mix ups that I noticed but overall not bad.
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The coma thing scares the living hay out of me. In that situation I would feel robbed. Losing years of life and all.
Past tense and present tense mix-ups. Argh... curse my bad grammar! Lol. Now, I will have to find the mistakes.
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It's the reason I'm an insomniac, I hate losing time sleeping when I could be awake doing stuff.
Also, waking up in someone else's body is another I couldn't stand.
Finding them is half of the fun! I always poke fun at a buddy over those tense mix ups.
I like the idea and the other person owns a pony body know thing.
I thought i would have more confusing things with Diamond Mist but i think she is just she or (He) is just a little bit weak at the moment. I somehow wish for that conflict if he would said, that he is someone else or i only think he would say i don´t know you or something like that.
Well i would love to read more soon.
sorry but do anyone know a adopt /slice of life story ?
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In this chapter I did have him have a minor freak out, but he is under the impression that it was just a dream. Next chapter will have a major freak out. And he will continue to freak out in small spurts for chapters to come.
not sure what to think it's kinda like lost where the story line could mean one thing or another
did she have a major dream during the coma that makes her think she has a different life?
or is he having a dream during his coma?
it confusingly good!
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Trippy, lol!
Do not let the memories of "Dia" take over this man's mind. Have him fight tooth and nail all the way. This will be glorious!
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At this point the only thing he has is his memories to fall back on when it comes to him still being him. So, he will fight like hell to keep his own personality and memories.
I don´t know how filty rich is used to be but i think i just think of him as a greedy pony because of his name. I do not know why but i do not like him that much. well he can´t be that bad, just a lillte bit like a snob maybe i think. Diamond Tiara as her daughter hmm? I would like to read something with him/her and Diamond Tiara next time
PS: I would like him to keep his Human mind, but maybe somehow they could understand what happens with his and her memories. You don´t have to of course, but i would like to see him with his daughter. Somehow i would wished for him to divorce with filty rich, somehow i don´t like this guy. It´s just an idea but maybe he could be the not most understanding part in his/her family and get angry with her later.
I like youre story very much, maybe because of this i try to give you some of my spontaneous vagaries
I had take a look on Filty Rich to remember how he was and maybe he is not that bad, i just thought he would be smug but i think i mistaken him.
Well good story i like readding every chapter. I hope for a long story or a second one.
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My story board for this story will put it at around thirty two chapters so it will be a longish tale.
I can't imagine the Tiara family is exactly used to not getting their way. Diamike might be very smart for pushing them away so vehemently, because it's perfectly reasonable to assume that as nice as they may be, they're still willing to murder some uplifted ape in cold blood if it gets them their Diamond back.
I would like to read another chapter, i know it maybe not get that fast finished, i just want to ask at least after a month and no offense
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Sorry, I know its been a while. I've just been so busy with work I haven't really got a chance to write much. I started writing a little on one of my earlier tails "Unexpected Family". And even it hasn't been updated in two weeks. I've got a three day weekend coming up and I'll do my best to bring the next installment of Industrial Diamond.
Thanks for being patient with me.
4427407 don´t worry, i understand now that it needs a lot of time if you want to do other thing as well or just being busy. I try to write a bit myself and see if i get something done what i would like to show maybe and it needs time i think.
Prereading this story was hella fun. I hope I can do it again for you sometime