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Twilight Sparkle always prided herself on how she is able to solve her friends' problems in a blink of an eye. What if the problem is more personal and more internal for her friend. What if a friend lost a job? The solution she gives her friend might not be a solution, but advice.

Sorry for the misleading picture. It is not TwiDash. Any errors found and pointed out would be appreciated.

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Diamond Sparkle

Diamond Sparkle #1 · Apr 15th, 2014 · · ·

Poor Rainbow.

Groovy Pasta

Groovy Pasta #2 · Apr 15th, 2014 · · ·

Now she found herself walking down her seeminglessly endless staircase

Seeminglessly is not a word, replace with seemingly.

CluelessDetective

CluelessDetective #3 · Apr 15th, 2014 · · ·

4235430 Done. Thank you.

epreeses1

epreeses1 #4 · Apr 16th, 2014 · · ·

Like most everything on this site the grammar was pretty bad, but that is really the only flaw I could really find (mind you it's a pretty big one, but that's besides the point)
If you hadn't had an exposition dump when Twilight found Rainbow crying I would have really gotten the feels going, but you didn't and that ruined the moment.
BUT, but just making me think about the feels is something to be proud of becouse nearly 90% of fimfic writers can't do.
Just fix up the grammar and this is a half way decent story, and that's a lot more than I can say for most of the stories on this site.

epreeses1

epreeses1 #5 · Apr 16th, 2014 · · ·

Okay, I can't stop.
When Twilight told Rainbow about making mistakes, it felt so natural, like she'd really say something like that.
I don't know if that was intentional, but kudos for exceeding my expectations!

CluelessDetective

CluelessDetective #6 · Apr 16th, 2014 · · ·

4240380 In all honesty, I didn't think I got that down. I wrote it not thinking that it was all too in character. I began working on this when something was going on with a friend and I messed up badly and couldn't apologize, so I knew I had to move on. And since there's no way any of these colorful characters would lose a friend, I thought a job was the next step down. Still, thanks for thinking I got a character in character. It means a lot.