Wow, this is a pretty good opener to the fanfic. I would dare say it's heart wrenching. I'm a little worried though, as the story gives of the sense that it may just be a copy/paste of Dracula, but with ponies.
Rated, don't betray my expectations. Spike approves!
I quite enjoyed this! I hope to read more later on, perhaps artwork could be done for a "Mother's duty?" With certain events? I await the next chapter!
4219624 4219850 She would be in the morgue by the time she changed fully, so no. She would not attack the hospital. And not many ponies are 'alive' in thr morgue
As much as I'm worried I'll turn this story down as soon as it gets more descriptive in regards to my aversion to gore and horror, that opening was heart-wrenching. From the transfer all the way to the TOD in the hospital I was on the edge of my seat and probably lost a few tears at the statement of Fluttershy having past.
I can't even begin to imagine how well you describe the rest of their reactions to the news and I sincerely hope I can keep enjoying this story due to its fantastic beginning.
4221817 Well besides the horror part I am planing to aim emotional. After all, how can you not only deal with the fact that one of your best friends is dead, but also turns into a monster?
Well I've always had a fondness for vampires. The idea of Fluttershy of all ponies being one, the one who will willingly resist the desire to feed the longest, is an intriguing concept.
Its a good story. From what I've seen, Fluttershy's gonna be a "Dracula" type Vampire. I'm gonna be honest with you man, when I first saw this I was hoping that there'd be like "30 Days of Night" style Vampires. But, however you wanna do it, I'll be following it all the way!
But onto a different subject, has that style of Vampire been done here on Fimfiction?
I thought it was an alright premise; nice build-up etc. I did notice a few spelling mistakes and grammatical issues and one or two misplaced/misused words.
I shan't be favouriting or liking, but I will follow the story to see where it leads.
And then all of a sudden Fluttershy starts coughing again surprising the medical ponies. But as they turn on the pulse beater it still gives a flat tone. They then chalk it of as the beater being broken. This being confirmed when one of the nurses take out a stethoscope and confirm that there is a very faint heart beat.
What they don't know is that the heart beats, but pump no blood. Everyone knows vampires don't bleed, as they have no blood.
If you are going for an oxy-moron with the name of the story then you may want to look up the exact meaning of Sanguine. I believe that the word you are looking for is Sanguinary, as Sanguine is to be cheerful, optimistic or have blood as a predominating humor. While Sanguinary is to be full of or characterised by bloodshed, eager to shed blood, bloodthirsty.
Get your wonderful writing ass back to this fic. I need this... There are only a few fics and books that make me fear, smile, and feel to what is to come. Please for the love of God and all that is good come back to this please.
Yes it's here!
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This was a great start.
I'm looking forward to the rest
Wow, this is awesome. Seriously.
WE VANTS MORE um...that is if you want to make some more
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We'll there be other one today or tomorrow?
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As soon as I finish the next chapter and pay for the next arts. Yes
4219016 ok....
4219016 u don't need to put art we bronys have imaginations for quiet lots of things I rared not talk about mind
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Yeah, but it adds something to the story
4219075 hmm ok if say so :T
4219302 can u at least post it and later edited it with the pics??pweti pls :(
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I'll post it when it's ready
4219319 awwwwww I was looking forward to it :/
For your first time writing a horror story, you did a good job!
I love it!
Oh shit those doctors and nurses Bette Roget the hell out. She's gonna suck the whole hospitals blood out
4219624 eeyup FRIST time read and made me feel my inside and very nervous for flutters until I read the desc
Wow, this is a pretty good opener to the fanfic. I would dare say it's heart wrenching. I'm a little worried though, as the story gives of the sense that it may just be a copy/paste of Dracula, but with ponies.
Rated, don't betray my expectations. Spike approves!
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It's not, just inspired
I quite enjoyed this! I hope to read more later on, perhaps artwork could be done for a "Mother's duty?" With certain events?
I await the next chapter!
Oh damn.
This is gonna be... Damn man.
~Skeeter The Lurker
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She would be in the morgue by the time she changed fully, so no. She would not attack the hospital. And not many ponies are 'alive' in thr morgue
As much as I'm worried I'll turn this story down as soon as it gets more descriptive in regards to my aversion to gore and horror, that opening was heart-wrenching. From the transfer all the way to the TOD in the hospital I was on the edge of my seat and probably lost a few tears at the statement of Fluttershy having past.
I can't even begin to imagine how well you describe the rest of their reactions to the news and I sincerely hope I can keep enjoying this story due to its fantastic beginning.
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Well besides the horror part I am planing to aim emotional. After all, how can you not only deal with the fact that one of your best friends is dead, but also turns into a monster?
4221839 Well, all the power to you then. I hope I can stick around for the ride, because it looks to quite the roller coaster of events.
Wow. That was... brilliant. Looking forward to the next chapter.
4221642 we have to wait and see.........
Well I've always had a fondness for vampires. The idea of Fluttershy of all ponies being one, the one who will willingly resist the desire to feed the longest, is an intriguing concept.
Lucifer damn... This was excellent. Keep up the good work
RATED DONT STOEY MAKESING STORY PWETI PLS
Its a good story. From what I've seen, Fluttershy's gonna be a "Dracula" type Vampire. I'm gonna be honest with you man, when I first saw this I was hoping that there'd be like "30 Days of Night" style Vampires. But, however you wanna do it, I'll be following it all the way!
But onto a different subject, has that style of Vampire been done here on Fimfiction?
I thought it was an alright premise; nice build-up etc. I did notice a few spelling mistakes and grammatical issues and one or two misplaced/misused words.
I shan't be favouriting or liking, but I will follow the story to see where it leads.
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It's not gonna be Dracula but not 30 nights either. It's my own thing
hall ya!
Incredible drawings! Did you draw them?
Also, if I remember correctly, you wrote "A Mother's Duty".
It was a very good read, and I'm sure this one'll be just as great.
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No, this guy did jamescorck.deviantart.com
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Ah. Cool. As long as they don't sparkle. I would be sad if they did.
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Do I look like a Twilight book fan?
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This looks pretty intersting! I'll keep an eye out for this one. Nice job!
I am highly intrigued!
And then all of a sudden Fluttershy starts coughing again surprising the medical ponies. But as they turn on the pulse beater it still gives a flat tone. They then chalk it of as the beater being broken. This being confirmed when one of the nurses take out a stethoscope and confirm that there is a very faint heart beat.
What they don't know is that the heart beats, but pump no blood. Everyone knows vampires don't bleed, as they have no blood.
mmm sounds nice it could be a good tragic story.....
If you have her attack spike then you will have my deepest respect. (I don't have anything against spike, just so you know)
Well this was an awesome start to a story!
Hope to see more in the near future.
I really don't have much to say about this yet, since we only have a set up chapter, but so far it has potential. I look forward to more.
HO-LY SHIT!
MOAR .
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Hopefully by this weekend
If you are going for an oxy-moron with the name of the story then you may want to look up the exact meaning of Sanguine. I believe that the word you are looking for is Sanguinary, as Sanguine is to be cheerful, optimistic or have blood as a predominating humor. While Sanguinary is to be full of or characterised by bloodshed, eager to shed blood, bloodthirsty.
...*sniffle*
....this is amazing....
...*Sob*
Get your wonderful writing ass back to this fic. I need this... There are only a few fics and books that make me fear, smile, and feel to what is to come. Please for the love of God and all that is good come back to this please.