you do realise that dash had never read daring doo until after she was put in hospital?

4146692 well remember history is altered in this story.Also good chapter

on slot

its spelled 'onslaught'

4146692 History of Equestria was changed. It says it in the description. Right there.

4146707 Thank you!

4146863 Oh crap...sorry.

Is this any way related to the Kirin spirits from the Kamigawa block of Magic the Gathering?

4147726 The what?

4147737 Yes. I didn't even know that Magic the gathering had Kirin's in it. would have made me look into it more.

4147741
yeah they're from the Kamigawa block. that one has a lot to do with spirits and samurai and stuff. it's all Japanese and Shinto themed.

4147741 the chapters feel a bit rushed, maybe slow down some, get a pre-reader and an editor it will definitly help.in the long run.

4147823 And like that. You have won me back over to Magic the gathering.

4147855 I like that idea, although I know it is slightly rushed, meant to feel that way from the situation of the story. However this new chapter is going to be...slower paced (still kinda rushed, but slower than I usually do with more details) and a bit more focused on the Lore and some of the fights.
I also decided to make the "Summer Sun Celebration" into a multi-chapter based part of the story, to sort of make it longer and less "Oh! We need to be friends to do this in about 5 seconds" like in the show. So, I'm making it longer and adding twists and turns, as is the master plan. To reach back home, from where the journey began.

4147864
it's the most fun game I've ever played.

4147925 We are talking about the cards, right?

4147928
yes

4147929 Oh thank gods. And good, I haven't played the video games yet though, they any good?

4147936
some are, some have annoying technical issues. I much prefer the paper card game.

4147937 Ah, I see, so it's like the Yu-Gi-Oh! video games, hm?

4147944
yeah, except people actually still care about the Magic video games.

4147945 HAH! Nice!

Not often do I see stories about a kirin other than my own. Not alot of people take the time to use different races besides ponies, the griffons and dragons like Spike. This'll be an interesting read

4148519 I see, the I hope you enjoy the story. I too, am a major fan of Kirin as well. I personally prefer them over many other races. I also plan on adding what I call 'Diamond Wolves' later on in the story. Anyone can use them if they want, I don't really care much, as I would like to see more races out there in the world of FimFiction Equestria. Sorry for the rant. Enjoy the story.

4148604 It's no problem at all. I actually like seeing other races be starred in stories besides the norm. It's always "ooh the mane 6. Gotta watch this story." or "ooh They're talking about the changelings. Gotta read that." It's all so boring now. Still likeable, but it gets old really fast

A bit of pacing issues combined with slight grammar problems,

but besides that it's cool

Nice Hellsing Abridged reference, many likes.

He says back to her. Twilight's and Rainbow's eyes widen.

Rainbow doesn't know about Daring Do yet.

he group blushes and Spike get's a nose-bleed.

No.No no no... Just... NO!

"We need to 'catch up' for lost time, Spirit. I miss yah, you know?" She tells him softly. Twilight and Rainbow become confused. In their books, Daring Doo is a mare who rarely cares about anypony, yet here she is, snuggling up against Spirit like he is the most amazing piece of treasure in the world.

Chronologically inaccurate. rainbow hasn't even heard of daring do yet.

"I was never a Human, before becoming a Kirin. But something else." He hisses at her. "I was known as a Dragon-son. Something you will NEVER know of after this event it THOUGH!!" He roars as he tackles Nightmare through the floor. The two fight claw and hoof.

Are you sure it's not Dovahkiin the dragonborn?