When an aircraft mysteriously crashes in a jungle, stewardess Air Fair is found unconscious by the Doctor, who's TARDIS has malfunctioned.
Finding little to no survivors they are on their own to survive against animals, poisonous plants, heatstroke, parasites and other hazards living in less than harmony.
With only a small ration of food from the crash, what managed to survive, they then have to venture away from the safety of the crash site, to find fresh food and water.
Living in harmony, is proving to be harder than finding supplies.
Chapters (5)
I have to admit that the story is going off a great start
, I can't wait for the upcoming chapters, But It does take time to be a great writer, you're doing very well In this one, Don't worry, very soon you'll do great on more stories you are thinking to create.
Goodluck on this one!!
This is pretty good for a start. I was surprised by the sudden crash. I did have to look up a few terms to understand from airplane perspective. All in all, keep writing, the more you do it the better you get at. It a lot easier than art.
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I've been actually writing since I was about... Oh geez, I was 11? I used to write really crappy stories, but. You know.
I am self taught, and everything I use as writing is everything I learned myself.
So, I'm very proud, but also shy, because I know it's not the best.
Who is the best though. LOL
Anyways thanks for the support!
4103768 Really what did you have to look up? D: I tried to make it all easy! I swear!~
I like where you're going with this. The plot is pretty well defined and you're characterization is spot on.
I do have a couple of suggestions though.
1. Double space between dialogue.
2. Avoid capslock when your characters shout. Instead, use italics or simply describe it. All caps tends to be distracting.
Good luck on the rest of the piece.
i liked it. sure it could use a bit of spacing here and there but overall i loved reading it and i cant wait for the next chapter!
but please dont tell me it was his fault what happened to the plane! D:
4111887 Thank you so much!
I'm giving nothing away!
The next chapter should be done either tonight, or tomorrow. :)
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take your time with it better it be done well than it being rushed XD
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I used to when I was young too! I'm still not as good today, but since you've been writing since you were young, you're really good!
Again, goodluck with your story, I'll read every update you make with it! :D
Wow!
+1 Like!
see! much better! with spaces! :D
though it does seem you rushed though it a bit nothing major just a missing word here and there but im starting to hate these cliff hangers! not to mention what happened to poor chocolate D:
i hope she has a happy ending then again i did see the tragedy tag so im expecting everyone to die horribly lol
This is gettin' gooood!
Looking forward to more.
hmmm so chacolate is a phycopath or did i miss read that? XD
at anyway rate the imagne is doctor climbing up a tree with a flailing filly is making me laugh really hard XD
Airports on solid clouds? Jet planes? Is this some sort of futuristic scenario? I thought that they were still using steam locomotives and stage coaches. Perhaps it's just me.
But other than that little confusion, I did like your style of writing. Please continue.
Out of curiosity, are you familiar with Tegan Jovanka?
4233092 I can't say I have... Please tell me more.
4235525 She was a companion in the early to mid 1980's, and she was in all but two serials with the Fifth Doctor. I mainly asked since she worked as a flight attendant, like the companion in this.
4236233 Oh, very nice! Sadly I've not had much chance to watch older Who. Though, because of my interest in aviation, I wanted her to be an stewardess. Plus, this. In our time, would have been late 60's early 70's. In time period for air travel.
Notable by the fact she's refereed to, as stewardess/steward.
Now it's politically correct to call them flight attendance. Rather than a gender specific version.
:)
That's awesome, and I'll be checking that out, since I'm a big wing head. (Aviation nut) :
Thanks for reading too! I appreciate that people are enjoying the story <3
4237264 Although when I say all but two, that's not necessarily true, because if you count this weird hallucination the Fifth Doctor had while regenerating into the Sixth, it's all but one. It's kind of like Amy's appearance in The Time of the Doctor, except with all of his companions. The Fourth Doctor had a scene like that as well.
lol
sadly the rock is not derpy butt.
but still a FUN chapter XD
Well, I finally got around to reading this! So far, I find it intriguing... I must investigate further...
Not like the rock is really going to have any effect on the TARDIS doors...
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It might make her madder than she already is...
I love this story,
Fantastic chapter, once I get back to the computer (rather than my phone) I'll be editing it right away! Aside from the story I hope you get everything figured out.
Ooooh I wonder what the tardis said
Dun dun duuuun!
*insert Frozen joke here*
This looks like it's going to be very interesting.