Okay, so I've decided to have this story cut down into separate arcs. This will allow me to put a pretty noticeable gap between chapters and have a good reason.
Thus why the end of this chappy takes place a little over four weeks after the last one. Stuff will be explained and you'll be up to date with Oliver's activities, so don't worry about that.
There is one thing that's going to change though, and that's the fact that although I will NOT make Oliver an overpowered Gary-Stu, he will still gain some abilities. Not general magic, but something a little different. Remember, every Alicorn embodies a certain element. Sun, moon, love and friendship.
So it stands to reason that Oliver will represent something too. It's just a bit of a shame that it'll…well, you'll see XD
Begin!
Here We Go Again
Oliver
It's been a little over four weeks…
Four weeks since Luna went to town on Zythonous and buried her in the ground, permanently. No seriously, Change Mc Rapey is pretty much dead. A broken neck I think…and foreleg…and back…and, well.
You get the picture.
Nopony seemed too bothered by her brutality, me included mind you. But from I'd gathered, these ponies all seemed to more or less represent peace and harmony. So the mere idea of one being violent against another seems to be all but abhorrent.
I guess lecherous Changelings are exempt to that rule…
Unfortunately however, Luna saving me from Cheeselegs only seemed to make my eventual situation worse.
Let me recap this in simple terms.
Luna had lost all rights to both look after me and call me her son. Her actions before Cadance took me away were…a bit enthusiastic to say the least.
However.
Cadance officially became my new caretaker when Celestia chucked me over to her. Unfortunately for her, Cadance not only managed to lose me within the first twenty four hours, but in doing so also caused me to get ponynapped and nearly molested.
Needless to say, Luna wasn't impressed.
I'd say Sunny Butt wasn't impressed as well, but she really doesn't seem to give a straw about much…at all.
Ahem, well anyway.
When Luna took both Fleur and I back to the Empire, myself being held back in that maliciously comfy foal pouch, she pretty much tore Cadance a new one. Oh Cadance shouted right back, declaring that she was caring for her husband and hadn't even realized that I was gone until it was too late.
Which Luna took to mean that she cared more about the Shiny Spunkstain than me.
I really don't know why I dislike him…but by all that is holy I bucking do!
Oh yeah, the no swearing barrier was back on. I figured Luna had something to do with it. Anyway, Luna and Cadance were about to rip each other's hair out, which I took as my cue to intervene.
I don't really mind Cadance, she's just a little incompetent and doesn't seem to have her priorities straight. And yes I'm still pretty wary of Luna, but to my dismay it's an irrelevant feeling, seeing how a certain part of my psyche has yet to stop demanding that I let her mother me to death.
But anyway. The two were, like I said, about to rip the others' metaphorical nuts off before I promptly decided to burst into tears and cry-
"Stop fighting! You're scaring me!"
-like a little beach.
Can anyone see my man card? I believe I just dropped it.
In any case it seemed to work like a charm. Cadance's murderous expression quickly became quite stunned, if not ashamed. Luna's on the other hand switched from homicidal to, ugh, motherly so quickly I had to blink thrice to make sure she was the same mare.
"Oh, we are sorry Arcturus," she cooed, her wings quickly blocking out all but her face as she nuzzled me frantically. "Shhh, Mommy did not mean to scare thee, forgive us mine son."
I didn't mean to squeal, honestly I didn't. But when that dreaded tongue snaked out and tickled under my muzzle…well, it was a battle that I lost instantly, whether I wanted too or not.
The sudden clopping of nearby hooves and…growling I think, caused me to quickly snap out of my childish trance and onto the little snippets of pink I could just about glimpse between Luna's wings.
"He is not your son Luna," Cadance snapped tartly.
Cue more growling.
"Oh really niece?!" Luna barked harshly. "Well he most certainly does not belong to thee!"
Luna twirled her head around in a clockwise motion, forcing her mysterious mane around to the left side of her neck. This kinda forewarned me of an incoming straw storm, don't ask how I knew, I just did.
"We may have been over exuberant in our brief role as his mother, but we at least cared for him! We laid his head atop our belly and slept alongside him! We found him held tightly within a sickly grasp, and yet we nursed him back to health with naught but love and nurture."
Luna closed her eyes for a brief moment, shaking slightly. But just as quickly her eyes opened and she regarded Cadance with a startlingly venomous gaze.
"Yes…we know he ran away, just as he did with thee. But he did so within our slumber! What is your excuse? He ran from thee and thou decided thine husband was more deserving of thy gaze than he who TORN from our hooves and placed INTO THY CARE!"
Ouch…anyone got some ice for that burn?
Luna looked down at me quickly and smiled a…surprisingly not so creepy smile.
"Arcturus…Oliver, whatever thy name may be, we must ask thee this question," she said, shocking me somewhat with the use of my actual name, as opposed to her preferred one. "We failed to truly take care of thee before. We claimed thee without asking, knowledge of present law does not excuse our ignorance…our arrogance. We frightened thee into running away, into slipping within the hold of illness and bad omen."
She sniffled as she mentioned my sick days, her normally intimidating stare now quite humbled and…ashamed.
"But we must know if…if thou wishes to stay with us once more," she continued, her lips trembling ever so slightly. "We would n-not blame thee if thou wanted to decline our offer. We would not even stop thee from staying with our niece if that is what thou wishes…but…but we beg of thee, give us another chance to prove our worth as thy mother. Thou…thou art a once in a lifetime chance for us, and we do not want to give thee up to another but…but we will, if that is what thee wants."
Well…buck, thanks for dropping that all on me Lummmm…buck.
The entire world seemed to hold its breath as I pondered my options. L-mo-na was simply staring at me unblinkingly, her eyes shiny and wide. I still couldn't see Cadance, but giving that she wasn't arguing with You-Know-Who, I gathered that she was waiting for my answer as well.
Fleur was a mystery, I couldn't see her expression but I could hear her breath. Nevertheless I had no idea what she was thinking, though from what I'd recently leaned I figured that she'd most likely go where I went.
My future…lover, yeah we really need to talk about that later on.
The question was tough, the answer tougher. And yet when I got right down to it…it was actually quite simple.
I opened my muzzle to speak and said-
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"I am not going into that Faust damned baby pouch!"
I turned my head away from Mom's open hooves and began to crawl back under the covers, ignoring the surprising lack of sound coming from her general direction.
It was silly, but given all that had happened in the last few weeks, I honestly thought that she'd accept my decision.
But then came the blue menace, her incredibly dexterous wings pulling me out from under the covers and placing me atop in but a second.
The smile came next, the wide, sly, gleeful smile as her muzzle pressed down against my stomach and-
"Pfffffffffffffft!"
-blew against it without mercy.
The sound, the nigh unbearable ticklish sensation was too much for me to handle. And so, even with all the maturity and intelligence my mind truly had, it sadly lacked any resistance to such a malicious act.
Thus I laughed my metaphorical tits off.
"Nooo! Mommy s-stop, h-ha ha!"
Mom's eyes narrowed mischievously, her ears splayed back in sheer joy as she denied my request and continued to lovingly torture me.
"Dost thou wish to obey Mommy now?" she asked, her tone full of mirth. "Or dost thou wish for more? We would be more than happy to bow to thy wishes..."
My eyes widened in slight nervousness as she wiggled her eyebrows playfully.
"You wouldn't?" I breathed.
She grinned.
I should have stayed in Cadance's chambers, Faust damnit!
So long as there's no brainwashing, I will continue to laugh.
... *realizes just tempted the author*
... F-Buck.
So... Our little guy already has his eyes on Fleur, eh?
Yay new chappy Still want Oliver to buck the kid version of himself right in the face.
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Horny little f-bucker, m'right?
LUNA!
Oh gods the misused words, they burn.
Caretaker, not carer.
Cue, not que.
You have no idea when or where to put commas, and exclude them as often as you use them.
Your Early Modern English is terrible.
Lastly, WHAT THE BLOODY HELL TOOK YOU SO LONG? I've been waiting for this for ages! You don't determine where the acts go based on when you release the chapter, you do it by the content of the chapters! There is no noticeable break between last chapter and this except for what you said in your little should-have-been-author's-notes bold bit, and that explanation was bullshit -- "I'm dividing it into acts because that way I have a reason to release late" is not why you break it into acts! Bloody hell. I was kinda shocked at the sudden end of one arc but then realized it didn't bloody end!
You've lost a favorite with this. The errors, the shitty EModE -- fine. There isn't a single person on this site who's perfect, myself included. But this? Coming from someone I respected? Curse your sudden and completely evitable betrayal.
Hmmmm... Oliver and Arcturus still residing inside of the same body. Oliver realizing that Arcturus isn't going to give up his mother without a fight, and more over Oliver has to agree with him. Candace, for all of her wonderfulness, isn't really ready for children.
Hmmmmm... I enjoyed the chapter, I await the chapter dealing with Fleur, Michael (sp?), and the stalker mare. Good times my friends.
LF
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Well...blah!
I don't care, and I am most certainly not going to cry in this corner!
Love the chapter. I find it hilarious how he has to deal with himself.
4608214 Good. My objective wasn't to make you cry, it was to make you realize why I disliked this story. Crying is detrimental to writing quality, and if I happen to come across this again I might start reading it again if it's improved.
Right about here is where I would offer my assistance if it weren't for the fact that there is far more than I'm willing to take on. I'm sure you've seen it before, but reread Ezn's Writing Guide. It will help immeasurably.
Also, rule of thumb for the acts: if you can remove the break and just pick up, it's not a new act. It's the same one. Maybe a new arc, but not a new act.
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But Mommy told me never to talk to strangers
Hmm...I'll consider it. The whole Oliver running away arc is over. This arc is about him trying to figure out a way to get home, rather than simply away from Crazy Moonmare
4608237 So a new arc, not a new act. Glad we agree. Doesn't change my opinion, but that tends to be about as difficult to change as the Earth's orbit, from the Sun's point of view.
Ooh, and look at the downvotes on my first comment. The red like blood accumulateth as people get pissy and feel like a big boy author needs anonymous defense. Heh.
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It's like having a load of overprotective sisters'...Oh wait, I do have that.
But yeah, I'll keep them as 'Arcs' for now. The first arc shall be Running, and this one shall be Planning.
Sorted!
Cya, stay snuggly
4608292 Au revoir.
Edit: You know, there really isn't that much wrong with the story from a syntax perspective. Mostly terrible commas and misused words. I have attempted to fix far worse and succeeded, so if you end up wanting my help, feel free to ask.
The dreaded tummy tickles, that poor colt >_<
Makes no sense eh? Just my kind of story
Oh that was funny, and nice to see you're still at it.
Oh my god, this is still so creepy.
I'm sorry, I just really find the thought of someone being trapped in the mind and body of a child, and being treated like one, including this kind of affection, incredibly creepy. I'm still gonna read, but man that made me uncomfortable.
Zam, I have been waiting for this chapter for sooo long. Make more or I will find you. I love the chapter! :D
I feel sorry for Cadances foal... if she ever has one. I think that Luna is the better choice here, as Celestia will also be around, and I'm sure Fleur will want to go back to Canterlot.
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Cadence the real only reason she lost Oliver was that he kneed Shining Armor in the balls
MORE, MORE... MORE!
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I like this idea
One answer for all the actions of Luna. She have a severe case of lacking contact for 1000 years on the moon so she desperately need to snuggle, cuddle and all that stuff
4609062 and let her book him to death? In my opinion, I'd rather go to school
4609881 Is it weird that I think the only one that can probably take care of a foal would be either AJ, Celestia herself, or Rarity? (AJ due to the whole 'family comes together thing' and Rarity due to having to take care of her sister.... uh. eventually. And Celestia ... well, I dunno. She seems kind aloof but it seems like she's more BUSY than incapable.)
I'm happy that Oliver chose Luna. plus I'm pretty sure things would have gotten stale and boring(Cadance's words) if he had stay in the Crystal Empire with Cadance.
Also, what's with the new cover? I'm trying to figure what the whole photograph thing is suppose to mean.
After reading this and some of Bump in the Night, I had a nice dream. It only ended nice honestly, but it was worth it, Imma reread this story before the others lol. Struggling against cuteness is far healthier of a concept than struggling against your inner demons or something lol
(a la major payne) Bubba it's 'cause it ain't there.
4609062 Well Twilight managed to take care of Spike all of these years, so she is a good option, AJ would probably be the best, that or Fluttershy.
Jesus christ man lol.
Am I the only one pooling for Twilight here? She seems to be the most stable alicorn, and that's saying something. She's the one who found him in the first place, and she also has experience raising a dragon. If Luna won't let up on the identity erasure thing (if she's really the one doing it), then perhaps he'd have better luck in Ponyville where things are weird as a norm.
Am i the only one that wants to see what would happen if Oliver were to meet blueblood???
Where'd I put my "Trunks Big No" video?
Whew, found it.
Alternatively, replace the name "Goku" with "Oliver" for this video:
4616413 I agree
>Ecocat<
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Jesus? Don't you mean Celestia
Hate to see Luna have a drunken mishap like Lois
I saw your card flying out the window.;
4610627 bah he's an alicorn, he's got that cool awesome regenerative- no wait I've been playing too much deadpool…
Still, youd be surprised what you can live through.
4616251 Still It's a great deal.
4608214 Which story is the stalker in? I think I might read that.
I still want him to be Oliver Leaf because that is technically an Equestrian name because it has 2 words in it.
Celestia mad Luna are exceptions, they are named after their stuff.
When does he learn how to use his magic?
*Stumbling Zombie Pony wants* Muurrrreeee........
there is only one who can take care of him now and it is not old sun butt
Oh god you play MW2? My second least favorite COD next to Ghosts.
4628842 HOLY FUCK AN INFECTED!! -pulls out a shotgun and blows your head iff-
4639469 *Johnny gets splattered by blood and gets infected.*