awww sweet, but I kind of need an explanation to why the ponies wanted to attack him...
They are known to fear the different, but they rarely attack out of anger or something like that.
I hope he will not face racism

4044081 Probably out of fear. Seeing a scraggily looking, bipedal animal, who over towers you, inside your house and is eating your food. Then has attacked in defence before, so that might seem as a "danger" to the ponies.

And as for the racism?..... Maybe, by a little pink mare with a smug attitude. But she will get what she deserves.

4044134 BURN THAT SHE-DEMON! She made fun of a handicapped pony! D:<

Cute story. I couldn't find any glaringly wrong things about this story, so you've passed the test...
...FOR NOW ...
Naw, but seriously, good job

4044337 Thanks!

So beautiful

I'm scared to read it.
A 9 year old in a life/death situation?
...spooky!
I'll put it in my read later list; queued number 8.

So, he has no other choice, but to steal ponies houses.

I'm still not quite sure what you meant here. Are you implying that a nine year old child has the ability to carry the ponies themselves? Or do you mean their houses? Or even both?

In other news, I'll give this fic a shot once I have the time.

4047805 Hehe, oops There was supposed to be a "from" before that.

But, thanks for giving it a look!

Yes, this world seems to be filled with Technicoloured, sentient ponies.

Sapient

“YOU BUCKER!!”

Fucker, not bucker. That word doesn't exist in there

4048317 Thanks for pointing out those thing!

I'm still a little on the fence about using "Bucker" in there. But if a lot of people find it doesn't fit, I can change it. I just find it fits better, hearing Rainbow call him a bucker instead.

It's a rarity when I don't like a story, but sadly this be added to the list of those slim chances

4048317 And he/she strikes again against the usage of words

4057904 All in a day's work

4057966 Anyne is ze spy
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4058136 I have already breached your defences

4058213 Well buck, I am screwed cuz of Mountain Dew XD !!!
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4057966 Still find it funny though that there is still a debate whether or not to use actual curse words or replacements in their world

You probably want to fix that case of bipolar in your story, don't you? This happens a lot, recently.

More?

4072396 Indeed there will be. I have two more chapters planned for this story, and the next one is already in the works

Either the kid or this story is bipolar as all hell.

Either way, I don't understand any of this shit.

4066835 Yes, I have noticed that. I originally had another scene, placed right after Chris finds himself at Fluttershy's house, where he leaves, against her protests. She then manages to convince him that she means no harm, and he eventually agrees.

I actually am going to take this first chapter, and make it what I wanted it to be in the first place. Hopefully to fix any of those problems. Though, it seems to be a weakness of mine in my writing, something I have to work on.

4081890 Go to the Equestrian Critic's Society, it's a group here on Fimfiction, and they might be able to help you...or at least redirect you to someone who can.

4066835 indeed the characters apart from fluttershy are to quick to change one sec they are trying to kill him the next they are all laughing. there has to be suspicion or at the least a dislike.

4044081 xenophobia and speciesism is what you mean

Hello! Sorry about not posting anything for a while... I've been busy with work, and other things. But chapter 2 is nearing completion. It sits around 8000 words, and there is still more to go.

It's looking to be around 15,000 words when done. And has not been rushed or anything like that. It has been, and will be given the best I can do by myself, and I hope you guys like it when it's done!

HA GOD!!! TE FEELS

hits you right in the feels

*Manly let out a tear*

Shit my heart