Red Bolt has a pretty bad life. His dad left his mom. His mom passed away and his marefriend cheated on him. A mishap with his only friend Wind Breaker gets them kicked out of their apartment in Manehattan. Wind Breaker sees it as a fresh start for Red and him. I wonder what's going to happen to them.
Welp, since what I read most are HiE, that's a change, but a good one. So far, I've got nothing to say (didn't pay attention to grammar and stuff though), interesting story, chapter about the right size (a tiny little bit longer perhaps). Now I'll be waiting for the following chapters.
Glad to know he's got his priorities straight. Oh how he must suffer; being cheated on is so much worse than having a family member die.
Ugh...
Ugh maby make the holl alicorn and elements of hsrmony thing bigger
4006916 learn to spell
4008714 hey my brother is using a half broken nook to read and type and he still learning english give him a break gerk. -tank
4009640 still can't spell. It's jerk. Not gerk.
I've just found something the story is writen is in the past and present tense AT THE SAME TIME even I don't get that error
4890966 Yeah sorry about the mess ups. I'm still not that good of a writer but I've thinking about a do over or something later. We'll see.