The Child of Technology
By: White Dragon
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Chapter 3: Dinner with Blood
(3rd person POV)
In the evening, as the sky changed from blue to orange and pink, The Canterlot Castle was quiet, except for the sound of 24 hooves, 8 tings of metal and 2 slaps of feet against the floor. As we zoom in-
Caboose what are you doing? Umm, writing the story? I thought we agreed that I would write and you would read? We did. So why are you writing? Because I wanted too? *RIspy grabs Caboose and tosses him out a window* There now back to the story.
We rejoin our main character and the rest as they enter the Great Dining Hall, with it’s hanging golden chandeliers casting a soft glow around the room. The torches on the walls and the tapestries hanging from the ceiling only making the room feel more and more like a part of a giant castle. We hear more hoof and foot steps before they stop and sit down on the pillows next to the thick gold ornate carved table.
(Tech’s POV)
I sit down crossed legged, as the kitchen doors open and waiter’s walk out and go to each individual. Except for me, as expected. Le sigh… I sit there waiting for one of the waiter’s to come and take my order, but none of them do. As I sit there and scan the table and ponies with my eyes, I can see Luna’s eyes looking at me out of the corner of my eyes. Her eyes widen as she looks around me, and she calls a waiter over and whispers in his ear as she points to me. I raise my eyebrow, wondering what she is doing. The waiter goes back into the kitchen and comes back out with a menu. He is shaking in his vest as he comes near me, he sets the menu in front of me and runs back into the kitchen. I let out a small laugh at that.
I let out an even longer laugh as I look down at the menu, and the ridiculousness at some of the options. A Daffodil Sandwich, Daisy Soup, Hay Burger with Hay Fries, and even more pony food. Then I notice the last item on the menu that was stuck on with what seems as a post-it note. I raise my eyebrows in surprise. “Why do you have meat on the menu with a post-it note?” I ask Celestia and Luna.
“We have Foreign Diplomats from the Griffin Kingdom and other meat eating countries,” says Celestia, with a hint of disgust.
“Also… we don’t know what you eat,” Luna says with a shy smile. I let out a small laugh at that.
“We don’t know know much about you at all,” Celestia says her eyes wide in realization. I gulped as I saw the look in Celestia and Twilight’s eyes, they both wanted to know stuff, and I wanted food.
“No. No questions until we are done eating,” I say with a finalizing tone. They both give a quite awww, of sadness. Must resist, the adorableness, (Inside Tech’s mind, ‘IT’S TOO STRONG CAPTAIN, IT ILL PULL US DOWN’, Captain ‘HOLD ON LADS, WE GOT TO HOLD ON!’) I hold on just long enough for them to stop. The a single unicorn waiter comes back to take our orders and our menus. When he gets to me, i'm surprised that he is standing tall and not showing a sign of fear. “What’s your name?” I ask him.
“Um why might I ask? he asks confused.
“I should get to know more ponies and you can be my second friend,” I say as if it was a fact. Everyone looks at me,
“Who is your first friend? asks Luna.
“Why you of course, that is if you want too,” I say to her. Everyone turns to Luna.
“I would love to be your first friend,” Luna says with a slight blush.
“Well my name is Silver Platter,” he says with a small smile.
“Tech if you would order so we could get our food, please?” asks Celestia.
“Ah, of course, I will have a salad with some apple slices tossed in and a small steak,” I say as I hand the menu back to him. As I look back to the table I see all of them staring at me. “What?” I ask. Then I remember ponies are herbivores, and they don’t know that.. “Ok first off, I am an omnivore, which means I eat both greens and meat, and secondly I don't eat ponies.” I say with a ticked off tone. I move my lips out of the way to show them my teeth. We all sit there in a weird silence as we wait for our food to come, so we can eat. After about 24 minutes of waiting the kitchen doors open and nine servers come out with dome covered plates. Each one of the servers goes too each pony, when two come up to me and place the covered dishes on the table. All at once the covers are lifted and I see a VERY big salad, and small steak.
“Before we eat can you please remove your cloak, Tech?” asks Luna. I look up at Luna in surprise.
“Um, it’s not a nice sight and I don’t want to make anyone sick,” I say with a concerned look around.
“We'll be fine, Tech,” Luna says with a smile.
(Luna’s POV)
As I see Tech take off his cloak, my body heats up a tad. As he takes it off I can see a mess of black hair atop his head. As I follow it down I see light brown skin and then his eyes. By my sister’s beard. They are like the eyes of a hero and a devil, while most eyes are blue or green, his eyes… they are black and white, not like they are mixed, they are definitely contrasted. (Ok, so you guys know the Ying-Yang symbol, it looks like that, it might be cheesy but I don't care ). My eyes continue down as I get to his neck. That's were the burn marks begin, they cover his body, and not like, ‘oh a small burn here or there’ more like there was a small patch of not burnt skin here or there. It was everywhere on his neck, on his muscular chest, on his strong right arm, on his left ar-...
“What happened to your left arm?” I ask Tech trying to stop myself from drooling. He looks down to his left arm lets out a small sigh.
“Not everything escaped the fire,” he says with a small frown and a hint of sadness. I tilt my head in confusion, until my eyes widen in realization. I lift my hoof up to my mouth to try to cover my gasp.
“D-did you lose anything else?” I ask him hoping the answer is no.
“I lost my right leg also,” he says bringing up his leg to show them.
“What is it made out of?” asks Twilight.
“It’s made of a metal called Adamantium, it is stronger than diamonds,” he said with a matter of fact tone. Twilight looked at him in disbelief,
“That's impossible, nothing is stronger than diamonds!” Tech lifts his metal arm 2 hoofs above and lets it drop onto the gold table. We were all wondering what that was to prove, when he lifts his arm and we all see the huge dent that, that left in the table.
“Can we please eat now?” asks Tech.
“Yes! Let us eat,” I say my mouth slightly drooling. I have been wanting this sandwich all day. I notice Tech brings his robot hand up to his necklace and grabs the left hand thing from his necklace and crushes it. The glove then materializes on his arm first as metal then it shrinks down and looks like leather. I look at him in surprise.
“I can still use it as a weapon, but I just haven't gotten used to the whole arm being gone thing,” he says. I give a quiet ‘ah’ of understanding. They others had already started eating when me and Tech were talking. We both settled down and started eating our respected food.
“This is great, Discords back in stone, Tech’s not evil anymore, we have good food,and good friends. This day couldn't get better,” says Celestia with a smile. I see Tech put his head in hands and mutter something about Murphy. I don't understand what that's supposed to mean, but I know what the next thing does.
“AUNTIES!!!!” yells the most annoying voice in the universe.
“Guards! Quickly get the Extra Strength Advil!” yells Celestia. Tech starts laughing at that. I poke a hoof at him,
“Stop laughing, you would need it too, if you had to deal with him every day.” He holds up his gloved hand,
“You know I could always just…” He waves his hand around and makes a shooting motion with it.
“No you may not shoot him.” I say with a demanding tone. He gives a quiet ‘aw’ and crosses his arms. The Dining Room doors burst open.
“Aunties!!!” yells Blueblood. Everyone in the room groans.
“What is it Blueblood?” asks Celestia trying to be nice.
“A mare on the street bumped into me and pushed me into a puddle, a PUDDLE! When I asked the guards to put her in jail, they said it was probably an accident and left! I demand that you throw that mare and those guards in jail!” complained Blueblood. I see Tech raising his hand to shoot Blueblood. I quickly use my magic to push it down. Blueblood quickly looks around the room, “Aunties why are there commoners in the Dining Room, is it another one of those charities going around, I swear they are always wanting money.” My mouth hangs open in disbelief,
“Blueblood do you know what the Elements of Harmony are?”
“No, why should I there not as important as me,” Blueblood says with a smug smile. He stands there one second and then next second, he is thrown out a window with a blue ball of energy, the glass shatters. I look over at Tech and his left arm is steaming slightly and he is whistling, while eating his food.
“Tech…” I say facehoofing. He looks at me in surprise.
“What? I didn't do anything, my arm cannon just happened to go off while it was pointed at him,” he says still eating his food while whistling slightly. Celestia facehoofs and I giggle with the rest of the girls. We all finish eating soon after, that… event.
“So we still have to decide, where you will sleep Tech,” says Celestia. My eyes light up,
“He can sleep with me!” Everyone in the room stops and stares at me, I then realize what I said. Tech is slightly blushing, and has a sexy grin on his toned and- BAD Luna he might not even think of you that way. “What I meant to say was he can sleep in the room next to me.” I lightly cough.
“Sure…” I hear Tech mutter. I blush even harder at that, thank the maker that I have a dark blue coat. Tech is still smiling at me.
“So, now that we have that settled, I think we should retire for the night,” suggests Celestia with a small yawn.
“Well as Princess of the Night, I will watch over your dreams,” I say with a small laugh.
“You, guys go ahead, I have to do… something,” says Tech with a small frown. I levitate a small disc over to him that has the sun on one side and the moon on the other. He looks at me in confusion.
“This is a Royal Pass, when you wear this the guards won’t bother you,” I say giving him a small smile.
“Thanks,” he says heading for the main doors.
New Chapter, If some one guesses where he is going you will get a sneak peak.
I would like to point out that you should put the authors note at the end of the chapter, it makes it a bit easier to read. but other than that WRITE ON!
3996466 I have an idea, but I'm hoping to be surprised... He definitely gives off a Lucca vibe, I'll say that much.
Shooting blue balls out the window.... Hilarious!
3996502 Lucca?
3996679 Crono Trigger Character. Quirky, fun loving, and a scientist that you don't want to get into a prank war with.
I'm guessing the bathroom he's been holding it in for 1000+ years
He's gonna go take a walk outside in the gardens
Over a 1000 years must give him a ton of sexual tension.
talk to discord
Adamantium? Is this related to Marvel in some way?
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Looks interesting, continue.
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Adamantium or Adamant is a very commonly used magical metal in video games
And to the author:
MOAR!!!!
Bah, didn't show up in my favorites as another chapter... That's gonna bother me...
Ya fuck you blueblood
Excelletn
I was kinda bored about human became a villain series. Atleast now we have human that have bad past that seek forgiveness. And try to teach Celestia abit how to not antagonize weird looking creature at first look.
3996466 the bar or the forest is all I can think
(many a a couple more....)
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3999949 Don't tell me that you don't have those 'Urges'. While we are on that topic, think of what our protagonist could be doing with rainbow dash, with this picture .
XD these comments are the best part about my story.
guys It totally does not have to come to this but, the story is heading in the Mature Sex range
Will you still follow? ill leave up altered chapters with and with out clop.
Next Chapter is going through editing
Theres so many lols i had a hard time writing the chapter
love it
Out of all the things that could happen, this is the best possible thing.
Great chapter, I love it, keep them coming.
Looking forward to more.
Keep up the good work. Deus tecum.
Alright, you keep breaking up the flow of the story with the author's notes and random humor.
The 'bit' in the beginning is a cliche, and if I'm honest, it's not the only one in just this one chapter. Not even by a little.
There were grammatical mistakes, and the sentence structure irked me a few times. I would suggest getting an editor.
I will keep this on my read list, but I can't give it a thumbs-up until it improves.
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I'm not denying anything but I still feel the need to face hoof.
ok new 'tech'nique ill put up the chapter then when it edited ill put that up
And this is when I stopped reading.
Since this is your first story I'm actually going to explain why I'm going to stop reading this story.
1- The story is moving WAY to fast, you need to slow down and put some substance into the story.
2- The relationship between Luna and Tech are moving way to fast... extremely to fast really. I know you probably have some back story for them planed later on (it would be smart to do this if you weren't), but if the first sign we see of their relationship is Luna getting hot and bothered by him taking off his clothes and her DROOLING AT HIS BURN MARKS!!! Then I'm just gonna file it under Tech being a Mary Sue and move on.
3- I saw in the comments you saying the story is about to have a sex scene, Just solidifying my 2nd point.
Don't get me wrong either, I like romance and a bit of sex in my stories, but there NEEDS to be real romance to warrant the sex or else it's just... clop
Anyway I'm done, with both my explanation and this story, wish you luck for the rest of it.
......Is it a trope at this point to lose an arm and a leg,And have them both be on the opposite sides of the body?.........If not,You watch too much Full Metal Alchemist or other series
Just a fact: while arguable your made up substance could in fact be harder that diamond, diamonds "hardness" is its ability to resist scratching. But how do we cut it then? The only thing that can cut diamond is itself so we crush it and coat a saw blade tip if it giving us a way to cut diamond and a diamond tooth saw. Back to my original point, I'm not saying that the substance is not harder than diamond but his method of proving it was less that useful and Twilight might have said something. Sorry if this sound rude, good story by the way but any good author need a editor so get that asap.
4008487 Not to mention that gold, while heavy, is also one of the softest metals out there. And Adamantium is what makes up Wolverine's skeletal structure. It's a Marvel thing.
Please write more this is a wonderfully interesting storey
i realize this may be a bit late but i want to point out a few things that I found myself confused over throughout the chapter as well as things that I find, for the lack of a better word, wrong, and it is my hope that these points can be solved, these include the castle staff, the main six and princesses reactions, the demonstration of the strength of Adamantium and the romance that seems to be happening between Luna(best pone) and Tech.
First the staff, as was mentioned in the chapter the princesses receive delegates from the gryphon kingdom, who are arguably more intimidating than Tech, as such it would be expected for the staff to have experience with dealing with such beings that are 'different', so why is it that a boy in a cloak would scare the staff at such a level that they would refuse to service him in-front of their employers, the princesses, until one of them had to ask Tech to be serviced, even when he got the service the waiter was shaking even when Luna(still best pone) vouched for Tech.
Secondly the reactions, First Celestia and Luna, in the chapter it was claimed that the castle receives delegates from species that have meat in their diet, so why is it the the princesses would have such an adverse reaction to the thought of meat, even when they have been dealing with species that eat meat for supposedly thousands of years.
Another reaction of the princesses that was confusing was their blatant disregard for Blueblood safety, yes, he is portrayed as being a bad person/pony and was only included in the chapter for comedic relief, but he is still under the protection of the princesses no matter how much of a ass he seems to be, for them to just laugh off what happened doesn't make them any better than Blueblood, then there is the fact there was no consequences for Tech who used a weapon against royalty, it doesn't matter if it was Blueblood it is the guards job to prevent anything like that from happening, be it royalty or civilians, and that's forgetting that Tech should still be under the wary eye of the princesses to prevent that from happening to them or anyone else.
As to the reactions of the main six, in regards to meat, every single one of them has a pet that requires meat in their diet to remain healthy, yes tortoises eat meat, that and Fluttershy lives with various carnivores as well as Rainbowdash being friends with a griffon, Gilda from flight school, for years, so each of them should be desensitized to the thought of meat.
For the last point that's just something I find a bit anticlimactic, and also rude, Tech used gold to demonstrate the strength of Adamantium, the reason why I find this to be anticlimactic is that gold is extremely malleable, it can be shaped using plain steal, maybe even iron, so the fact he can make a large dent in gold doesn't really leave the effect i think you where going for, at least for me, on to why i found it rude to do such is the fact the table doesn't belong to Tech and he damaged it to prove a point, something that could have been done at a later time or with a spell to stress test the metal.
The romance is feeling rushed, Luna, who is a ruler of a kingdom and as such must put her kingdoms needs before her own, is almost immediately wanting to get into Tech's pants, who was until recently an enemy, it seems strange that Luna would so quickly be enthralled with Tech.
These points don't really take away from the story but it is my hope that the reasons for these points can be explained so I can further immerse myself into the story as well helping with your future in writing.
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Im gonna put under bad wording