Twilight gets a letter in her mail stating that she won free magic lessons. Of course, Twilight's first assumption is that she did something wrong that the Princess saw. How will Twilight handle this, calm and collected? Or will she start worrying too much, again.
This is my first attempt making a one-shot in as little time as possible.
Total Time Taken: 1.5 hours
Covert art was a vector done by 1APEEPA. All credit for it goes to him.
Feedback and criticism on the story is welcome and encouraged.
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I liked it. I also like being the first like and getting to see the green go "Schwoop" across the bar, consuming the red and absorbing the darkness of Viewership into the vast, gaping hole of apprecia-er, ahem.
Nice little joke there, I didn't even question the long space, thinking that a fresh fic may have just had a formatting issue of some sort.
Really? Twilight didn't grammar nazi the letter? I mean a year of magic lesson? There would be an S at the end of it. Twilight would pick up on that, and the space to the exclamation point. I claim Shenanigans on this story, still pretty funny though...
3968765 I was thinking about adding something like that in, but since I've never wrote anything from Twilight's perspective before, I didn't want to risk butchering it or spending too much time on it and making the speed-write not so fast.
3968733 I had the thought about doing that joke towards the end of writing the story and I just couldn't resist.
Really short but I could see the humor within.
One issue I have is that you have foreshadowed Pinkie thinking Twilight not liking the prank and while that did happen the payoff was just not as big as the build up was leading us to believe.
Short, but it didn't need much, and actually managed to be pretty clever for its length.
Not funny enough. I agree with
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And also it would have been funnier if Twilight had blown up or been more frantic or done something more extreme or whatever. Hyperbole is important in comedy!
Wasn't terrible, but didn't really go anywhere interesting.
3968917 I kind of also agree with him, this feels like its missing something. The humour didnt really seem funny.
Wow but the prank should of been about 29% cooler and 47% funnier
Thanks for the feedback everyone! Now looking back, I realize I probably should have added a bit more more to it and gone for a lot more humor. With this being my first fic ever, I kind of just winged it without giving myself enough time to develop it as well as I could have. With the next story I write, I'll definitely keep in mind all of your feedback. Thanks again to all you readers!
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