Follow my story as I go from a colt living on a volcanic island to a stallion traveling Equestria and vanquishing terrors with my talented friend Libri. This story is long, and I will try my best to update it somewhat frequently. My method will be in chunks that are a few thousand words each. Do enjoy reading about this life that I have created.
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Dude.... your summary is a piece of junk that will not get readers interested because it tells us nothing about the story... Fix it and you will get people who give it more than a passing glance.
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Do not call me "dude"
Do not blatantly insult my work
Come up with better phrasing for what I am to assume is constructive criticism
3956150 I apologize. I sometimes write things I do not mean when I am suffering from sleep deprivation. I like to give input but sometimes one should think before they talk.
What I meant was your description doesn't inform anyone about what it is about. It sounds boring, but that is just judging a book by its cover. The sad thing is that on fimfiction.net that is likely to happen. More often than not a good story is never read simply because it didn't look interesting.
What you've told me from your description is that I will tell you about my life. You do not tell anyone reading it why that life is interesting. It could be the life of a grocery store clerk for all one knows, mind you I have seen that pulled of brilliantly, but you do not tell me enough.
What I meant by that comment was that your story description is almost as important as the story itself. Without a good description nobody will care, I am speaking from experience. I hope this message helps you and I once again apologize, I did not mean to insult you but I still did. For that I am sorry.
I will hopefully give you a better comment when I have finished reading the first chapter.
THAT is a good hook. I have to ask, why didn't you add something like that into your description?
You have a great level of description and attention to detail and I like your overall presentation, unfortunately my sleep deprivation is catching up to me and I will be unable to produce more intelligent feedback. I had to spell check "my" back there. I am going to sleep.
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Your input is greatly appreciated. I understand the feeling of sleep deprivation. I do see your point in how the description is as important as the actual story. I'll admit that I don't really know how to make a good summary. Thank you for your advice, I shall edit it once i have the time.