Violentine is a male pony that others find to be, umm a soon to be psychopath who you don't want to mess with. The sad thing is he just wants to know how its like to love somepony that cares the same for him.
Lithium is a changeling that has escaped her hive because she was to shy and empathetic to hurt others. Deep down she wants to know how its like to actually receive love instead of taking it away by force.
Could this two outcasts work something out together or will everything they worked so hard to achieve, come crashing down like a house of cards on a windy day.
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Ugh what I can say. It was much to fast, instantly they love selfs, what?
3952548 Yeah I know, I kinda of rushed it to post it out on valentine's day.
Decent, although there are spelling, grammar, and pacing issues.
3976913 I know but I am working on it, thanks though.
i don´t care for any grammar.
I like it but it is to soon to make it my favourite.
You don't have to curse in the context of a third-person narrative, it's not very inventive.
We've just established this one paragraph ago. you've just rendered this statement completely pointless.
This statement is also redundant because you've made it obvious as to why he's been given a lecture.
Character development needs to be deciphered by the reader - Not told to them; Back-stories, thoughts, and feelings need to be presented - not explained.
...... Do I need to say what hasn't already been said? The same can be said about the rest of this chapter, so I'm done complaining.
And don't address the audience!
See? This scene has potential for character development. But first: SHOW; Don't TELL!