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Fluttershy has a problem: she keeps waking up with strange dreams. What has been going on? And what is that delicious metallic taste upon her tongue?
Warning: Contains Flutterbat and Silliness. Consult a Doctor if pain persists.
Supporting Cast: Rarity, Twilight, Rainbow Dash, Pinkie Pie, Celestia and Luna.
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Camareilla.
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I’mma deck you in the schnoz for that one.
Well, that was... interesting.
While an entertaining one-shot on it's own, this story is undying for a more detailed treatment. Clan Fluttershy has to grow, after all.
Wait, which clan is that? If you mentioned, I didn't catch it.
Also,
Yes, yes it is, and you should feel ashamed.
Oh, and minor grammar issue:
I'm not sure what to replace it with. I think the correct oblique/accusative form should be thee, yet it may take a nominative here, which would turn it into thou.
Whatever. It's Luna-speak, so a little accuracy can be sacrificed for style. "Thou dost not sully thy tea with sugar, dost thou?" should work, even if it's not grammatically accurate. The one thing I think I'm sure of is that it shouldn't be "do they?"
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That was a complete cockup. I think I was writing something else and swapped it around. HUZZAH, IT HAS BEEN REMOVED!
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I had thought she fit Malkavian better (hinted at with a little Auspex and Obfuscation); but let's be honest, blowing shit up as a solution is probably a little Brujah'ish.
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My schnoz!
Can we expect a sequel for this? Because this was AMAZING!!!
This should be a series.
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Nah, unlikely to be a sequel. There was a little more I had planned to write, but it ended up being cut out and the better parts moved in to the story as is.
Huzzah!! Thou has made my day!! Still i want to know what happened after this ended.
Might want to tag Luna and Celestia, and likely Rarity, at least.
Also, hilarious. Somebody's been reading the comics...
Oh my god! My sides! Hilarious!
Luna is wonderful and Celestia is stuck in the straight-man role.
This was a lot of fun to read. Very nicely done.
MOAR!
Firstly, Sassaflash is a fantastic name to say while drunk.
Secondly, I dearly hope you continue this in some way. There's a great wealth of potential here. (Still, I can't blame you if you choose not to. Continuing at the same rate of comedy would be tricky.)
Thirdly, I can only imagine Luna's reaction when she learns how Fluttershy's transformation took place.
Fourthly, what happens if you try to use Dementation on Discord?
WHOOP WHOOP!
I have liked your story simply because vampire Fluttershy.
That was my tribal war-cry.
I've been smoking too much cheese lately.
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Good catch, I will have to fix that.
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I... I don't even... noooooooooooooooo!
Ah, Luna the Warrior Princess, it does my heart good to see her so tactless and borderline evil...
Le gasp
Are we in the future!?
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Yes, I am speaking to you from the future.
We have jet packs and shit.
FINALLY!
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You can't trust these newspapers, can you?
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And that's how Equestria was Unmade.
3912071 Da hell? How'd/Where'd I miss that?
It's these damn 3am editing sessions, I swear...
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Hey! It was 3am here this time! If I recall it was morning for you, and there was a squirrel on your terrace or something.
I was a little out of it by then, so I might have imagined the squirrel.
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SSSSSHHHHH!! They don't need to know WHO it was 3am for!
It was 3am somewhere.
Besides, it usually IS 3am for ME. That's why I get so delirious.
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Well I enjoyed that... but I have one petty, asinine, completely arbitrary and totally pretentious grievance:
Should be either ‘It is magnifique, is it not?’ or ‘C’est magnifique, is it not?’
Your repeating yourself, it is and c’est mean the same thing.
To be honest this is possibly the stupidest thing I have ever taken issue with but for some reason it bothered the hell out of me.
3913971 3913773 Not gonna lie, I noticed this, too, but I didn't want to say anything. It bugged me a lot less.
And don't worry about the editing thing. It's a quarter to midnight where I am as I write this and I can barely think coherently despite writing out this comment.
I don't know shit about vampire stuff.
This was still pretty funny.
Hmm... I dunno how to feel about all this. The ending felt a little weak. Maybe the story could have a continuation.
3913971 As a pretentious Frenchie (no joke, I am French Canadian) I took notice to this as well.
Well, that was... interesting. I don't quite understand the ending, though.
The newspaper gags were funny. Camareilla, though... *grooooaaaannnnn*
Uhh, "Fluttershy, this is so good to see (Yours, your, you, whatevs.) again!" Btw, should've used "Thou" instead of thee, after all.
Does thou taketh us for a fool, author?
Wait, there's only one chapter? NOOOOOOO! CONTINUE D:
3913971 It should be tres magnifique.
I think that's the little...uhm... what's that word for little common sayings... not maxims... colloquialisms? No, that's a term for little sayings local to ones' region...
Damn all these literary terms! I CAN'T REMEMBER THEM ALL!!
*Alondro blows up the Earth in rage... he tends to overreact.*
No dislikes?? Nice
also good fic 
I'm not usually a fan of vampony Fluttershy (I knew that episode would bring it back from the depths of obscurity), but this story was wonderful, mostly for Luna & Celestia, but still wonderful.
The only issue I have with it is that the ending just doesn't feel like one. The story keeps building and building, but then just leaves off without any closure. This might explain why so many of your commenters are clamoring for a continuation, well that and the fact that every good story causes some level of outcry for it to continue
. Personally, I'd like to see this get something to give us a bit more closure whether that be a small epilogue or just an edit giving the ending that needed bit of finish.
lol. Luna
This was nuts.
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You had to say something.
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I actually used c'est magnifique because I was informed tres is not used with magnifique. Normally I would have used that.
Let's just pretend that Rarity's grip on french is as solid as the author's, and was merely using it to sound fancy. (which is true, I kind of see Rarity as using words she is not wholy familiar with just to sound fancy)
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My petty grievance was not with the sentence it was with the repetition therein. It is and c’est are the same thing, meaning that for a bi-lingual reader the sentence literally reads ‘it is it is magnifique, ...’.
Also on the note of using très, you could use it in this sentence but to be honest it is not necessary, and makes the sentence feel awkward. Très is an adverb that when placed in front of an adjective, like magnifique, indicates ‘to a high degree’ it is most commonly translated to very. Which would make the sentence ‘It is very magnificent, ...’ which while not inherently wrong, it just does not feel organic. Magnificent and likewise magnifique, both already have a high degree of positive connotation so adding an adverb that indicates ‘to a high degree’ is a little redundant and in this case makes the sentence overly cluttered. In addition it is or c’est would still be necessary as without them the sentence has neither subject nor verb.
On a side note the expression your probably thinking of is très bien or very good.
Please tell me you misspelled "edited" as a joke.
You have to continen this. It begs to be done. Do it.
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Nope. Just written at 3:00am.
So... is Rarity infected?
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Nah, I very much used the Masquerade vampire here, at least in my mind. The whole one feed and you become a vampire thing is kind of fucking stupid, IMO. Just imagine for every burger you ate that same cow turned into a human and desired delicious delicious burgers.
Masquerade, along with a fair few other vampire stories tend to be "drink them to death then give them a little bit of your blood."
(Shit! 3913781 I knew there was something I forgot! And you asked me this very thing!)
3918083 Ah. Did Fluttershy infect anyone else when she was on those hunts that she wasn't aware of?
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No: because it wouldn't be an infection.
It would have had to be a conscious act on Fluttershy's part (and prior to that, she was effectively in a feeding frenzy fugue state). She would have had to have selected her victim, killed said victim, then feed the victim some of Fluttershy's own blood. It's not something that really could be done by accident.