Bicken' back and bein' bool 24 hours a day, 7 days a week. I'm Jack: writer/editor/stoner.
Lyra's brand new PC displays Fan Art of her and Bon Bon together. She takes it as an embarrassment, but Bon Bon has other plans.
Had a lot of fun writing this, and thanks to my editor, Noah
Art done by Atry and raikoh 14
Edited by Noah B
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first?
gonna start reading now
mmk loved it~
is this technically 4th wall breaking?
something to think about
Awww cute
This song just popped into my head while reading. I don't know why, but whatever, nice fic btw.
Awe, the ending picture was so cute!
I'd complain about you using the word "arms", but it was Lyra.
Thanks, It's a nice and short story.
He's a good editor then, except for like, five mistakes.
Btw.
Come at me bruh.
now time to explain to lyra why there is so much monkey porn on the internet.
Aw, cute. : )
And to think in most of the fanon Lyra's the on whose antics throw Bon Bon for a loop. Nice reversal there.
Epic D'aww wouldn't you agree sir?
At least Lyra and Bon Bon are aware what we want them to do right?
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Thanks all, I enjoyed reading the last 12 comments, I can take any criticism, and I enjoyed your thoughts. I don't write to entertain myself, but I do it to entertain you.
Great story, man. Incredibly D'AWWWWWWW-ish.
The whole PC thing with fan art is trippy though 
350402 That, mah bro, is the art of breaking the 4th wall
Great story, BUT, I'm pretty sure that ponies don't have nozzles. (I think you ment muzzles) Other then that fantasic!
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D'awww this was so adorable!
It's rather sweet. I like stories that don't try to be epics. (much like my own old work)
It's short, and you know just when to stop. I'd still never show this to anyone outside the bubble of the fandom, but it is still good. So your delivery was good, but I don't actually like the premise. I don't generally like stories where ponies say, "Look how gross shipping is! Oh well. Let's f***!". (to exaggerate it) I don't know how you managed it, but that didn't hurt my experience with this story. You tread well in this category while not changing the formula. Yes, that does mean that it's not terribly original. But I consider that criticism basically null on this site. It was a good story to welcome me back to FiMFiction, a nice example of how things work around here. I'll remember this one, and give it a like as well.
P.S. I would have actually switched the roles of these two, but that's not a criticism, just a preference.
I'm impressed!
Not much of a LyraBon fan, but this definitely gets a fav and an upvote from me. Even after all this time, it's refreshing to see something new that triggers the relationship. Pacing was a little wonky, but still decent for such a short story.
It's really odd to see something this old being called 'refreshing', but it was.
Also,
too
them
you're
~Twi
This was pretty cute.
It definitely needs another editing pass, and the pacing is inconsistent. However, it was still enjoyable, especially considering the introduction of modern technology into Equestria. So have my upvote and fave for that!
The picture was bad...