She flew across an expanse of emptiness. It was rock and rock as far as the eye could see. She glanced down. Lakes and rivers had been created aplenty: Brooks and canals, lagoons and streams. There was a lot of water on the planet, but not yet enough. She thought back to the size of the oceans of Equestria, trying to calculate the time it would take to create an ocean. The answer she came up with was, ‘a long time’.
Must’ve been some asteroids among the rocks that shaped the planet, she thought. Already her awareness stretched itself into the crust of the planet, digging ever deeper in search of something. Moments passed and finally she found what she was looking for. A mountainous block of rock with moisture seeping from every crack in it. It was far underground, but it was there;. the remnants of an asteroid coated in kilometer thick ice.
Grasping the moisture deep in the earth, she condensed it and pulled it upwards. The ground cracked, splitting apart as the earth beneath it was pushed upwards as well. Like giant molerats the water pushed up earth into small hills, the hills spanning farther than she could see. More and more hills rose from the ground until, finally, the first one erupted and water spilled from the maw of the earth with an ear-splitting roar, soon followed by many until a cacophony of rushing water, breaking rock and earth vibrated through the air.
More, she thought and started powering a spell. A purple beam shot from her horn, hitting the slowly-growing amount of water. The speed at which the water levels rose increased. Going back to drawing up water from underground, she witnessed more hills and holes appearing in the ground. The ground’s becoming unstable. Hardly had the thought been finished before the earth shook and the air vibrated with the sound of rock and dirt collapsing in on itself, leaving behind a sinkhole of massive proportions. Surprised, she let go of her spells and just watched.
The collapse continued for about an hour. The ground had caved in, leading to the water collecting in a more central area rather than spreading too far. It wasn’t just a hole that went straight down, either. Unlike how it was with the place where she had created the first waterfall, the collapse made it seem more like a gigantic bowl. And sparkling blue water filled it, waves already being stirred by the winds. It wasn’t quite an ocean, but it was a lake the size of which she had never seen.
She flew off again.
How long had passed? How many times had the sun passed over the horizon, with the moon following close behind? How many times had the constellations shifted? How many times had they disappeared and returned?
Water and air, soil and stone, wind and rain. The seasons were passing like the ticks of a clock, passing by so quickly that she hardly registered them at all. How many weeks, months and years had passed? One, two, maybe ten? She had spent the time creating, shaping the world. Canyons and ravines scarred the earth. Hills rolled in the horizon and gave form to the bleak sandstone that otherwise could be seen over to majority of the planet. There was much to be done, and she was far from done. She had made brief visits to Equestria, a single day here and there to catch up on events with her fellow immortals. She may have been engrossed in her work, but even she was prone to loneliness.
In the time that had passed, she had wanted to create three additional wonders. Each of them a homage to her friends. Much like the first four mountain ranges were created in the name of Equestria’s other immortals, these were special things or places that could not be found elsewhere, and were unique in their own way. Or would be. She had small plans for what she would make for Fluttershy, Pinkie and Applejack, but she couldn’t yet. She wanted to finish shaping the world before bringing more life onto the planet than the small errant patches of red and green grass. Making anymore would be redundant should she decide to level an area, killing the life immediately; whether it be trees or small animals.
While she couldn’t quite do what she had planned yet, she did have one thing she could, and would do. It was a gift, not only to her long lost friends, but also to future explorers. It would be a wonder without equal, one that only the most foolhardy and adventurous would find.
She stood on the side of a mountain to the north. It was one of the lesser ones, not yet named. But she was sure it would be named something grandiose once it was discovered. In front of her was a steep incline, nothing interesting unless one counted several centimetres of snow as interesting. It wasn’t so far north that the snow in the lower side of the mountain was more than half a meter deep at most.
She took a breath of frigid air and watched the steam rise as she breathed out. Drawing from her wellspring, she channeled magic into her horn and sent it forward, her magic eating away at the stone almost as quick as a parasprite ate. She trotted forward, eroding more and more stone as she pressed on, soon creating a small hollow that became longer and formed a tunnel.
Several long minutes later and she stopped. She was far enough in that she could no longer feel the chill wind’s bite, nor hear the crunch of snow beneath her hooves. While it was still cold, it was not so much as outside.
“To the adventurous and daring, I give you this,” she said, and her magic spread.
The spell she had used to create the tunnel now formed a perfect half-sphere around her. At her beckon, it spread and shaped the place into a small dome that quickly grew. Stone was reduced to dust and small particles. Gems were shattered and reduced to mere sprinkles on the grey stone floor. The room had grown to a size that would be able to accommodate twenty ponies easily.
She conjured a small orb of light and glanced around, the floor and domed roof of the small room was still rough. Given what she wanted this to be, that was not good enough. Her eyes closed and her horn flared to life. An ethereal wind blew through her mane and tail, softly first then with more force. It wasn’t long before arcane winds and raw magic flew around her in a small tornado filling the entire room, with Twilight being the only thing untouched.
The wind cut at the domed roof, at the rough floor, and smoothed out any uneven part of the surfaces. Some time later and the wind died down, Twilight stood in the middle and gazed around, smiling at the mirror polished room. But it was not yet done.
Reaching out with her magic, she grasped six small areas on the four with her magic. As she did so, six circles of purple appeared in line at the far end of the room, each on wide enough for a pony to stand on and half a pony’s width between them. With a flex of her will, she yanked at those six areas, creating six stone platforms risen directly from the stone floor. Each one as polished and perfect as the walls.
A breath escaped her lips. Years of constantly pouring magic into the world was starting to tear at her wellspring. She may be immortal, a pony possessing cosmic powers, but she wasn’t omnipotent. She trotted over to the six platforms, nearing the one on the left first. She smiled and touched a hoof to the wall behind it. Magic poured from it and shaped the stone, drawing a little of it out and remaking it. When she removed her hoof, a blue balloon shaped gemstone half the size of a pony’s head sat embedded in the wall behind the dais.
She walked to the next one in line, this one was an orange apple-shaped gem with a green gem on top, mirroring a pair of tiny leaves. For the third time she put her hoof to the wall behind the third dais. A pink butterfly sprouted from the wall, the same size as both the apple and the balloon.
She continued like this, making a gemstone replica of the elements of harmony: A pink butterfly, a deep pink, six pointed star, a red lightning and a light purple gem, shaped exactly like one of the gems on Rarity’s cutie mark. Satisfied, she stepped back to the middle of the room and just looked. She was close to done, only a few things remained before this place was done.
Digging deep into her memory, she called forth some of her oldest and most precious memories. They were memories so precious, that she would never want to forget, no matter how much they would hurt. She smiled and let her magic take hold, bringing forth the memories into the real world. Where the daises had been empty before, now stood ethereal versions of each of the her old friends and herself. Way back when she was still only a unicorn.
Pinkie Pie stood with a large smile on her face, eyes sparkling, and just looking happy. She also looked like she was mid-jump, hovering just a few inches above the dais, her legs bent in such a way that it also looked like she had just jumped. Applejack stood with her two right legs crossing the left ones, a proud smile on her lips. Next was Fluttershy. She stood with her wings spread and a small smile on her lips that so looked like Celestia’s serene smile. Or was nothing short of peaceful. Fitting for the pegasus, really.
She had made her own apparition stand normally, head tilted a little to one side and with a friendly expression on her face. Smiling like the rest. Rainbow stood on her hind legs, wings flared wide and turned sideways, head turned just enough to face the entrance. Twilight chuckled. It was just like she had posed back when she had tied to bridge up for them in the Everfree, just hours after they had met. She looked so proud back then, just like her image did now. Last was Rarity. She, too, was standing side ways, her head turned to look at the entrance as well. Her eyes were half-lidded and one front leg was raised, her chest pushed forward in the most fabulous pose she could do. Always a beautiful pony, right to the last second, Twilight mused. Smiling.
Each of the apparitions were transparent enough that one could see through them, but still corporeal enough that they almost looked solid.
There were only a few things left to do before this place was finished. Her horn lit once again, and spells poured out as magic was drawn into it and pushed outwards. Layers upon layers of protective spells were cast in the tunnel and small dome shaped room. No one would be able to take anything, but anyone would be able to enter. Furthermore, the place would be warm and with enough light to see effortlessly. No chill would be able to make its way into here, warmed and lit by the gems behind each dais.
And lastly, if anypony ever entered the memorial room itself, she would know. She smiled and turned around, chuckling, and headed down the tunnel towards the outside again. She looked forward to teleporting back here and tell them about why it was there when somepony found it. Finally reaching the exit, she sighed and took flight. She was not yet done with her world.
Heh...
All for a Daring Do type of pony.
Nice touch.
~Skeeter The Lurker
all I can find the words for, is that I'm SO glad I decided to follow this story!
I enjoyed writing this
I hope you guys enjoyed reading it
I really enjoy the last Chapter! What comes next? Plant life? Animals?
How will Twilight create life? Can't wait to find out!
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Oh. That explains the shitty quality...
I kid, you know I love your works.
~Skeeter The Lurker
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And I'm glad you decided to follow it It's one of my better ideas and I'm happy someone chose to adopt it
This is great. I hope this is a long story. This has the potential to be so, so entertaining.
I'm interested to see how Twilight will go about making her own life.
I hope you delve into the adventures of the inhabitants, from Twilights perspective.
Also I wonder if there will be any malevelant entities similar to Discord on equestria?
This is very good. keep it up.
Manly tears were shed...
She keeps on talking about the future "ponies", but does she really want to make a mere replica of Equestria? I'm sure she can do better than copying Celestia and Luna work :P
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Maybe. WAIT! This explains Earth perfectly!!!
… if only it were true
-Lightning
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or maybe... Twilight actually creates Gen 3 ponies!
My only question being that twilight seems so focused on making memorials for her friends/element bearers (applejack, rainbow, fluttershy, rarity, pinkie), that I feel its as if she forgot about everyone else in her life, like her parents, brother, or anyone else who seemed to be even remotely close to her
Fitting tribute. I wonder what she'll do next? Plants?
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You have to remember that her friends were the ones who made her what she is.
If Jumpity will allow it, I could re-write the memorial hall to have her parents and Shining in it, too. Would make sense now that I think about it.
3921989 Dunno, if I were to make my own planet (Some day), then it would most likely be populated by mythical creatures and the like, with impressive natural architectural wonders and massive underground caverns and caves, with my own little location that would contain my Citadel, and it would be GLORIOUS!
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I actually think it's fine having the "elements of harmony" memorial, I would just let Twilight name the tallest mountain in Cadence Amorous mountain range "Mt. Shining" or the likes, that would be the best place for him anyways
3924645 You could indeed, if you so desired.
Beautiful. Ihavenowords
Please please please continue!!!!!!
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Hmm... Well, that's up to Jumpity. I only wrote these two chapters (or one chapter, as it was supposed to be)
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Then we need a gun… you take out any one of those newborn cuties… but save Scootaloo for me
But dose this mean that Equestria is… Mars
-Lightning
3922368 She's prepping for Gen 5.
It should be interesting watching Twilight create life, have a plan, and then watch it do the one thing life does. Stomp all over that plan.
3921150 Malevolent? Discord? bah. that ol bag of Chaos is just a ruddy trickst....er?
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3924962 I forget that Shining isn't immortal
She had made brief visits to Equestria, a single day here and there to catch up on events with her fellow immortals.
-This lays some of the worried that the preceding paragraph(s) regarding time-scales had brought to the surface* for me.
*Irony with the water...
but even she was prone to loneliness.
-Well, she IS the Princess of Friendship, not just of Magic (which she is using in abundance here).
The spell she had used to create the tunnel now formed a perfect half-sphere around her.
-Sounds a bit like the place of the Tree of Harmony, Provided one assumes that the Everfree forest pre-dated the rise of the Sisters (to add the element of danger to the search)... although in this case that doesn't exactly work out unless the Sisters invested so much of their power into the tree that they had to borrow it back to defeat Discord... nah, probably not. For one thing Celestia says they 'discovered' the elements, and unless they forgot or wiped their memories so they couldn't spoil the surprise... actually, how do you work Discord's reign into all of this? Maybe The Sisters' incarnations from being The Sun and The Moon only happened just before/during his arrival? Did he travel through space, or apotheosize like Twilight did, but without anyone to guide him to and after that event (which might explain how he turned out)?
Reaching out with her magic, she grasped six small areas on the four with her magic.
-I believe you might mean "floor" instead of "four".
Years of constantly pouring magic into the world was starting to tear at her wellspring.
-Ah, I thought she seemed to be slowing down. I hope Celestia's melancholy wasn't because she knew that this procerss would kill (or at least temporarily discorporate) Twilight... maybe THAT is what happened to The Sisters that allowed Discord's rise to power.
She walked to the next one in line, this one was an orange apple-shaped gem with a green gem on top, mirroring a pair of tiny leaves. For the third time she put her hoof to the wall behind the third dais. A pink butterfly sprouted from the wall, the same size as both the apple and the balloon.
-Yet more arguments theory I dislike which is based on the first chapter... then again, most artists are influenced by their teachers, so maybe is as far as it goes, without some sort of deep fated meaning...
She also looked like she was mid-jump, hovering just a few inches above the dais, her legs bent in such a way that it also looked like she had just jumped.
-The portions of this sentence I have underlined seem to me to be redundant with eachother. The first one is shorter, but the second one is more informative. If I were writing this I might choose the second to keep. but I do tend towards a very verbose style.
Or was nothing short of peaceful.
-This seems like an odd sentence. Is "peaceful" far beyond "serene"? I suspect this may be a typo or other species of writer-derp.
Fitting for the pegasus, really.
-Well, when she wasn't terrified or in a righteous wrath... But, of course, this makes sense as the best way to portray her. That wrath was ever the result of her desire for peace.
Rainbow stood on her hind legs, wings flared wide and turned sideways, head turned just enough to face the entrance.
-Meh, unless you are re-creating the poses from the photograph in the early season opening credits I would have had her airborne... not like illusionary 'holograms' need to be structurally supported the way physical sculptures do.
It was just like she had posed back when she had tied to bridge up for them in the Everfree, just hours after they had met.
-Eh... Hmm... nah, I don't think recalling that moment is worth memorializing, although if Twilight thought that Rainbow was just a jerk before that moment, then that turning point might have helped... then maybe? Nah, Rainbow had already helped with the rescue of Twilight herself, not to mention solo saving either Rarity or Pinkie Pie (can't be bothered to re-watch the scene to pick out which). Granted that wasn't an act of self-sacrifice like tying off the bridge was but... actually, I guess that being partially on the ground could be because she is celebrating Rainbow as a "Friend" and "Exemplar of Loyality", not as "the fastest Pegasus of her generation, and quite possibly of all time"?
I just had a mental image of somepony finding the room and being rewarded by Twilight (their literal God) showing up and explaining the room to them. It is oddly cute.
This chapter brings one video to mind.
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