Diana Carnation had a good life. She was born into a wealthy family as an only child who had no worries. She graduated college and worked as a well-known chef for two years, and all was good and right in the world. Then it happened. Her father's habit of gambling had finally caught up with him, and all of the family money was gone. After that, misfortune seemed to follow her and her family like a loyal dog. In the end, there was a… casualty.
Now in Equestria, Diana struggles to adjust to the changes. But there is one thing she will not- can not adjust to. Her defiance leaves all inhabitants of Equestria and beyond baffled. She will always remain… an omnivore! : O
Chapters (2)
Decent beginning so far. Only problem really is the size of the chapters. Less than a thousand words doesn't really cut it. Oh wait...
Boy I hope so! Mebbe around 2000 words or so would be nice...
Break up dat big ole block of text, if you will...
Using your when you mean you're... y wud u do dat?
........just go visit a gryphon girl. they eat meat.
3851747 Thanks for the comments and for notifying me of that. I'll make sure to fix any "your"s in there and break up the paragraphs a little bit. And sorry for how short the first two chapters were. The first one was actually from an assignment in English class, and I didn't really wasn't to mess with it too much. My second chapter was a big misunderstanding with the Publish button. I didn't know that what I had published was being seen; I thought that submitting it allowed others to see it.
I felt bad for editing the chapter over and over again, so I ended it. That was a bit of a let down for myself as well, so I hope I can successfully do a chapter with 1500+ words without school getting in the way.
Thanks again! ~Honey Glen
First fic? Pretty decent for a first go. Work on the length of your chapters and you should be fine.
3851974 Thankyou!
I like it so far, you don't find that many women in equestria fan fics these days
Word of advice: add in some more detail. Some people consider 1000 word chapters to be the bare minimum of quality writing. If these two chapters were each twice as long, the story would probably have five times as many likes, just because more people would give it a chance.