The sequel to the first UNREAL story. UNREAL stands for United Nations REcon & AssaLt team. Jacob Maller, a member of UNREAL, is on a quest to find the Bearers of Harmony to help regain the freedom of ponykind...
The sequel to the first UNREAL story. UNREAL stands for United Nations REcon & AssaLt team. Jacob Maller, a member of UNREAL, is on a quest to find the Bearers of Harmony to help regain the freedom of ponykind...
A meteor impacts the nation of Equestria, Planet Equis. Tranquility is quickly snuffed out when a poison begins to spread violently. The Princesses cannot combat this unknown threat, as no knowledge of it exists. Help comes from an unexpected source.
A mass crossover of the League of Humans acting Villainous. Rather than being sent to separate Equestrias, the villains are sent to one. How will events play out with sixteen villains all in one place?
(A CoD: A.W. crossover) A year had passed after New Baghdad, a team of Sentinel Task Force operatives led by Gideon and Jack Mitchell are stranded in Equestria, where they must work alongside the Equestrians to prevent the birth of war.
I Went to Comic Con, and became a Zerg when I got those thrice cursed clawed gloves. But I did not have free will before I was turned to stone, so now I have to pay for things that where not my fault at all.
The sequel to the first UNREAL story. UNREAL stands for United Nations REcon & AssaLt team. Jacob Maller, a member of UNREAL, is on a quest to find the Bearers of Harmony to help regain the freedom of ponykind...
Lol, it's me again. I just read a good deal of your story. And all I got to say is not bad, not bad at all. Just don't let the dialogue seem to endless and bland. Try adding a bit more emotion or tone with how the characters communicate. It will really help the reader visualize the whole picture and play it in their own heads. Interpretation is a big part of writing and you got to make sure the reader can follow your idea while still forming their own opinions.
3805267 Well when you get stuck, you can just hop on the interwubs and google some tone and mood words for dialogue. You'll be surprised with what you find.
So, just curious. How closely is this supposed to resemble the actual United Nations? Based on what I've seen, it doesn't seem like it follows the procedures of the UN I know, but then again it is set in the future.
Lol, it's me again. I just read a good deal of your story. And all I got to say is not bad, not bad at all. Just don't let the dialogue seem to endless and bland. Try adding a bit more emotion or tone with how the characters communicate. It will really help the reader visualize the whole picture and play it in their own heads. Interpretation is a big part of writing and you got to make sure the reader can follow your idea while still forming their own opinions.
still your idea is pretty original and I want to see where this story goes.
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3805048 Yeah, I run out of verbs for what the people do, and end up using the same verbs over and over again.
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3805267 Well when you get stuck, you can just hop on the interwubs and google some tone and mood words for dialogue. You'll be surprised with what you find.
This story has been officially reviewed by the Blunt Reviews Group.
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So, just curious. How closely is this supposed to resemble the actual United Nations? Based on what I've seen, it doesn't seem like it follows the procedures of the UN I know, but then again it is set in the future.
Ok so, let me get this straight... He shot into a tanks barrel wile on a destabilized helicopter!? There is a 0.01% chance he could have hit
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Note that he landed off the helicopter. I'm pretty sure I wrote that he jumped off the helicopter.
Fucking misanthrope bullshit. I will keep reading though...
I am intrigued, I must read more.