This new year, each pony in town is determined to make their resolutions come true. The good news is that Discord is willing to give them exactly what they asked for. The bad news is, he's still sore over a thousand years in stone.
................ discord, you do realize you are gonna be killed for thsi, no matter what natural disaster the pricneses msut cause, right?
also the pricnesses can easily revert any legal contract cause, well, princesses................ i know these are fanfics but just because they are does not excuse forgetting these six are very closely connected to the fucking demigoddess that rule equistria.
3741041 ...........well she would probably keep twilight, but she would sitll help her friends out. look at what happened to poor rainbow. intolerable. not to mention rainbow dash is very important to equistria as a whole. she is not exactly gonna tolerate what happened to her considering rainbow's sonic rainboom and courage has helped equistria more than once, including sealing discord away when he broke loose.
besides, luna does not benefit from any of this. more than likely we would have ony heavily bloodied and bruised wodnerbolts team as she sends rainbow dash to get physical therapy the moment she realizes something is up............. not to mention she has a powerful leverage against celestia. "Oh okay, dear sister, allow those that saved me from my torment to suffer. Allow the six mares who tore the wickedness that infected my soul away, risking life and limb, to be molested and abused by discord's mischief. Allow poor rainbow dash, pinkie pie, and even twilight to be imprisoned by the curse for the rest of their lives, just as i was imprisoned to the moon for a millenium......... A fate you yourself bestowed upon me, if i may add."
I don't get it. Rainbow Dash completely degrades herself completely for something that only fulfilled her life-goal in the most technical of senses, despite apparently being under no compulsions at all. Apparently she isn't interested in flying at all, and has no ego?
Hmmmm, if you read the fine print of the contract it states that the contract may be repealed by any being older than 437 billion years. I'm 21 trillion, so I guess that applies to me. Buuuuut, traveling between the universes is such a hassle... *starts playing minecraft*
3741115 Oh god, shut the fuck up! Its a fucking clop fic, we don't expect a shakespearian masterpiece with less holes than a 10 year old boy, so get the fuck out with your holier-than-thou pretentious bullshit! Goddamn.
GODDAMNIT Kaidan!!! I love you as an author! Lordofshit is being a bitch, yes story hole there rd is not going to just disappear without consequences but whoooooooooo cares? Also lordofpiss: before you criticize, try editing some of the many typos you have to be taken seriously. Kaidan love you bro, not my favorite story, but I respect it for what it is. P.s lordsabitch stop fluttering your pissflaps at errors in a clopfic. P.s.s lordofmantits it is indeed a fanfic, it is a clopfic, it is a fictional story, he can literally do whatever he wants Kaidan is god of this realm
Also lordofpiss: before you criticize, try editing some of the many typos you have to be taken seriously.
lol what? s2.quickmeme.com/img/ba/ba7ba20059b4e30ad79d34d731977843e91cc8a92b94cf5c3bf649a95440e333.jpg Get good. Then criticize someones grammar, you plebeian. I find it amusing that you altered his name, adding vulgarity, all because you don't agree with him. How childish. Now, you must know, I haven't read his comments, nor do I care about his opinion. So please, don't take this as an act of defense. I'm merely calling you out on being hypocritical.
I'm sorry but this is totally unrealistic. After six months her friends would have gotten her out of there and into some sort of therapy because clearly she isn't herself. At least the Pinkie Pie chapter made sense, although in a few days at most one of her friends would have figured it out and then Discord would be in deep shit.
3742837 ..........really, you are going to troll for some criticism? ............ good to know such maturity exists as someone who is capaboe of such CLEVER wording as lordofpiss............. seriously dude, that is just plain pathetic an insult.
I agree. This chapter was unrealistic, and blew. Quite literally. That's not even counting that Dash is needed for her Element of Harmony. After what they did to her for the first few months. At the very least the Princesses Protege' would step in to get her out of there if for the very least the safety of Equestria.
And she frowned with her mouth. And she smelled with her nose. And she tasted with her tongue. Those last two are probably spoilers.
What if she doesn’t get this position! She has to get it! She’s so close, she can’t lose now!
So. Much. Innuendo. Or, I am a dirty pervert.
“We’re taking care of that, Spitfire is had our chef mix up some special feed..."
"Is" is superfluous.
“Yes sir, right away sir!”. Rainbow gulped as she headed over to him out out of the field.
The period before "Rainbow," and one of the "outs" are superfluous.
She’s heard of the phrase “It’s not what you know, it’s who you blow”, but she thought that only applied in the Canterlot business world!
The comma should be inside the close quote.
Quicksilver starting thrusting himself down her throat, further cutting off the mare’s ability to speak.
"Starting" should be "started."
Rainbow Dash felt the third cock ram into her and she tried to just focus on his goals.
"His" should be "her."
Or maybe it all went in her mouth, truth be told, no one was really paying it any attention to those details.
"It" is superfluous.
Wow, there is a lot of controversy among the comments. Fortunately, I do not get emotional. Staying clinical and detached helps me find the errors. For example, everything above this, save for the first two.
You fucking bastard. I'd be fine with this if she was able to keep her figure, but nooo, you had to make her fat. I expected better of you, Spectrum. (Don't mind that, I needed to rant about something. )
This made me want to vomit, I'm deadly serious. The first story was well written and within character, sort of. But this is so OOC that it's downright disgusting. I'm just done, this horrid to sit through
3747025 I admit, it isn't my best work, and she may have gone a bit too much OOC as I turned the "dark factor" up to 11.
That being said, I did feel pretty clever when I thought of the "Oh, and how about she ends up a fat slob and will never fly fast again" It was so over the top and depressing that I had to add it in.
You sir sicken me i don't mind reading a rd clopflick but this is degrading to rd not to mention the wonderbolts it makes me want to find you and slap you as hard as i can
No... Just. Fucking. No. I've seen a lot of dark porn before, but this just disgusts me. This is a horrible thing, and I will enjoy murdering you repeatedly in my mind... *sigh* Don't worry, I'll weld their doors closed...
And I also need to strikeout "Dash the cum-dumpster" on the list of things the rest of the site enjoys.
I don't know why this chapter gets so much hate. Granted, it could've been executed better. I didn't care for the portrayal of Rainbow Dash; mainly because she seemed too quick to resign to her fate. Other than that though, this was quite an engaging chapter!
3755284 When I first wrote the chapter I was assuming Discord has hypnotized Dash a bit. Hence, when she was starting at the contract her mind was going placid and she could only think "must become Wonderbolt... must do it..."
But then in post editing Kaidan and I thought it would be a sick twist if Discord wasn't even involved and she did that to herself. On reflection, once we decided that was the case, I should have gone back in and added a few paragraphs to Dash's mental battle over whether or not she would sign the contract.
Oh well, what's done is done. Lesson learned for next time I guess
This is the first chapter of anything on this site i have read that i hated. And iv read a lot! But i guess i did do this to myself... And you did say sorry... Oh well. ON TO THE NEXT!
I'm with the majority opinion here. Dash, the Wonderbolts, and anypony who knows and cares about Dash are all completely out of character.
Nice twist on Discord, though. It was completely unexpected. However, the twist just exacerbates the aforementioned problem by eliminating the possibility of magical manipulation.
(What does it say about me that I found Discord's idea for Dash appealing?)
... Wasn't aware the Wonderbolts were primarily a rape gang. By the way, if they actually worked like that, they'd be too internally-nasty and demoralized to function well as an athletic or military team.
This one is absolutely evil. I guess that’s probably the point, though. If they were actually in character, even disregarding the team’s actions, Dash would never have signed off on this. She was willing to up and leave the academy when her teammate was being reckless, I doubt she’d put up with sex slavery.
dis gon b gud
(Of course it will, its written by kaiden!)
I'm a Wonderbolt!
Don't talk with your mouth full. Good idea on those goggles to protect your eyes though!
................ discord, you do realize you are gonna be killed for thsi, no matter what natural disaster the pricneses msut cause, right?
also the pricnesses can easily revert any legal contract cause, well, princesses................
i know these are fanfics but just because they are does not excuse forgetting these six are very closely connected to the fucking demigoddess that rule equistria.
Oh my, kaidan... that first one already... darnit, you just KNOW how to keep me awake against my will! Can't wait to go on reading.
I'm just missing all the fun, eh?
Still... Should be a fun one, I think...
~Skeeter The Lurker
um... i take back what i said...
Wait, this chapter wasn't written by kaiden
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Well, that was different. Poor Dashie.
Poor Discord, deprived of his fun. (Or is he? )
3740804 it is isnt it?img-cache.cdn.gaiaonline.com/ef2eadb1fdde0e63f31ca9830d7c7785/http://fc04.deviantart.net/fs31/f/2008/200/a/c/Lelouch_vi_Britannia_by_Elocinaqui.jpg
This has chapters by most of my favorite authors so awesome!
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Depends on Discord's gift to Celestia. Maybe she won't want to change the ponies back. It's all about the dl.dropbox.com/u/21167245/FiMFiction/Emoticons/misc_Octy_plot.png
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Poor Derpy. She's gonna be next :o
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Yay! Now, to get the rest of them to contribute...
Make discord fix this. NOW!!!
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I... I'm scared.
3741041 ...........well she would probably keep twilight, but she would sitll help her friends out. look at what happened to poor rainbow. intolerable. not to mention rainbow dash is very important to equistria as a whole. she is not exactly gonna tolerate what happened to her considering rainbow's sonic rainboom and courage has helped equistria more than once, including sealing discord away when he broke loose.
besides, luna does not benefit from any of this. more than likely we would have ony heavily bloodied and bruised wodnerbolts team as she sends rainbow dash to get physical therapy the moment she realizes something is up............. not to mention she has a powerful leverage against celestia.
"Oh okay, dear sister, allow those that saved me from my torment to suffer. Allow the six mares who tore the wickedness that infected my soul away, risking life and limb, to be molested and abused by discord's mischief. Allow poor rainbow dash, pinkie pie, and even twilight to be imprisoned by the curse for the rest of their lives, just as i was imprisoned to the moon for a millenium......... A fate you yourself bestowed upon me, if i may add."
her ultimate weapon, oh yes; guilt tripping.
I don't get it. Rainbow Dash completely degrades herself completely for something that only fulfilled her life-goal in the most technical of senses, despite apparently being under no compulsions at all. Apparently she isn't interested in flying at all, and has no ego?
Huh.... Oh god... I think I have an idea I what Twilight's is going to be... D:
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Remember when Genie saved Aladdin from drowning? This would be the bad side of that.
Hmmmm, if you read the fine print of the contract it states that the contract may be repealed by any being older than 437 billion years.
I'm 21 trillion, so I guess that applies to me.
Buuuuut, traveling between the universes is such a hassle... *starts playing minecraft*
3741115
Oh god, shut the fuck up! Its a fucking clop fic, we don't expect a shakespearian masterpiece with less holes than a 10 year old boy, so get the fuck out with your holier-than-thou pretentious bullshit! Goddamn.
sees pic of discord and foal mane 6.
sees sex tag
...
...i'll put this one on the read later list...
I have to say that this chapter made me want to puke. I mean I know it's just a story but still ewwwwwwww.
GODDAMNIT Kaidan!!! I love you as an author! Lordofshit is being a bitch, yes story hole there rd is not going to just disappear without consequences but whoooooooooo cares? Also lordofpiss: before you criticize, try editing some of the many typos you have to be taken seriously. Kaidan love you bro, not my favorite story, but I respect it for what it is.
P.s lordsabitch stop fluttering your pissflaps at errors in a clopfic.
P.s.s lordofmantits it is indeed a fanfic, it is a clopfic, it is a fictional story, he can literally do whatever he wants Kaidan is god of this realm
3742837
lol what?
s2.quickmeme.com/img/ba/ba7ba20059b4e30ad79d34d731977843e91cc8a92b94cf5c3bf649a95440e333.jpg
Get good. Then criticize someones grammar, you plebeian.
I find it amusing that you altered his name, adding vulgarity, all because you don't agree with him. How childish. Now, you must know, I haven't read his comments, nor do I care about his opinion. So please, don't take this as an act of defense. I'm merely calling you out on being hypocritical.
3742837
I wanna fuck with lordofmyth some more, so here are some more poorly thought out insults
Lordofmisfits
Lordofbitchfits
lordofmeth
Lordofmasturbatinglepers
Lordofcrotchtits
Lordyimonmyfith
Lordofnothing
Lordofcrickets
Lordofshitsticks
Lordofnoneofthesenamesareevenclosetofunny
Lordofits2amsogivemeabreak
Lordofbloodsvscrips
Lordofwhogivesashit
Thelordisabitch
Lordofwhogivesashit
I'm sorry but this is totally unrealistic. After six months her friends would have gotten her out of there and into some sort of therapy because clearly she isn't herself. At least the Pinkie Pie chapter made sense, although in a few days at most one of her friends would have figured it out and then Discord would be in deep shit.
Um... no.
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Nope.
Non.
Nyet.
Nein.
3742837 ..........really, you are going to troll for some criticism? ............ good to know such maturity exists as someone who is capaboe of such CLEVER wording as lordofpiss.............
seriously dude, that is just plain pathetic an insult.
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I agree. This chapter was unrealistic, and blew. Quite literally. That's not even counting that Dash is needed for her Element of Harmony. After what they did to her for the first few months. At the very least the Princesses Protege' would step in to get her out of there if for the very least the safety of Equestria.
Poor dash and pinkie... I was slightly beginning to like it but then... I want a happy ending!
And she frowned with her mouth. And she smelled with her nose. And she tasted with her tongue. Those last two are probably spoilers.
So. Much. Innuendo. Or, I am a dirty pervert.
"Is" is superfluous.
The period before "Rainbow," and one of the "outs" are superfluous.
The comma should be inside the close quote.
"Starting" should be "started."
"His" should be "her."
"It" is superfluous.
Wow, there is a lot of controversy among the comments. Fortunately, I do not get emotional. Staying clinical and detached helps me find the errors. For example, everything above this, save for the first two.
The only thing I have learned from this story so far : Fuck Everypony
No
No
No
No
Just stahp
I said stahp!
STAHP!
You fucking bastard. I'd be fine with this if she was able to keep her figure, but nooo, you had to make her fat. I expected better of you, Spectrum. (Don't mind that, I needed to rant about something. )
This made me want to vomit, I'm deadly serious. The first story was well written and within character, sort of. But this is so OOC that it's downright disgusting. I'm just done, this horrid to sit through
She said on the Wonderbolts, not underneath the Wonderbolts.
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I admit, it isn't my best work, and she may have gone a bit too much OOC as I turned the "dark factor" up to 11.
That being said, I did feel pretty clever when I thought of the "Oh, and how about she ends up a fat slob and will never fly fast again"
It was so over the top and depressing that I had to add it in.
3747025 fat dash bad
You sir sicken me i don't mind reading a rd clopflick but this is degrading to rd not to mention the wonderbolts it makes me want to find you and slap you as hard as i can
If I where to meet you IRL id probably give you a high five and slap your face at the same time for making this.
No... Just. Fucking. No.
I've seen a lot of dark porn before, but this just disgusts me.
This is a horrible thing, and I will enjoy murdering you repeatedly in my mind...
*sigh* Don't worry, I'll weld their doors closed...
I don't know why this chapter gets so much hate. Granted, it could've been executed better. I didn't care for the portrayal of Rainbow Dash; mainly because she seemed too quick to resign to her fate. Other than that though, this was quite an engaging chapter!
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When I first wrote the chapter I was assuming Discord has hypnotized Dash a bit. Hence, when she was starting at the contract her mind was going placid and she could only think "must become Wonderbolt... must do it..."
But then in post editing Kaidan and I thought it would be a sick twist if Discord wasn't even involved and she did that to herself. On reflection, once we decided that was the case, I should have gone back in and added a few paragraphs to Dash's mental battle over whether or not she would sign the contract.
Oh well, what's done is done. Lesson learned for next time I guess
This is the first chapter of anything on this site i have read that i hated. And iv read a lot!
But i guess i did do this to myself...
And you did say sorry...
Oh well.
ON TO THE NEXT!
Congratulations Twisted!
You have reached a new low!
At least you said sorry...
3742686 Just because it is meant for one purpose does not mean it cannot spark an intellectual debate on ethics and legal systems.
and this Twisted, is why i freaking read your stories. I love them all! along with Kaidan and Scrub! You guys are like my favorite authors!
I'm with the majority opinion here. Dash, the Wonderbolts, and anypony who knows and cares about Dash are all completely out of character.
Nice twist on Discord, though. It was completely unexpected. However, the twist just exacerbates the aforementioned problem by eliminating the possibility of magical manipulation.
(What does it say about me that I found Discord's idea for Dash appealing?)
what the hell did I just read?
brain, f-f-fried.
Too, much
what the fuck did i just read
... Wasn't aware the Wonderbolts were primarily a rape gang. By the way, if they actually worked like that, they'd be too internally-nasty and demoralized to function well as an athletic or military team.
This one is absolutely evil. I guess that’s probably the point, though. If they were actually in character, even disregarding the team’s actions, Dash would never have signed off on this. She was willing to up and leave the academy when her teammate was being reckless, I doubt she’d put up with sex slavery.