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Thank you, and I'm glad you liked it.

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Nicely constructed opinion... you don't see that around here often. Also,

when they end all dark and fuckered up

fuckered up

fuckered

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3749946 I bet it is, and yes your statement is true. I have read plenty of clopfics that actually held good stories within them.

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Well, There is also some decently written clop out there without stories backing them. If it's written well enough, clop by itself can still be decent.

Ooh kinky I'll enjoy this.

Ummmm. Sorry, I had to stop reading when Fluttershy got a Penis somehow <_< Jokes about 'Hanging' out with bats aside, aren't bats mammals?.. lizard tongues?

Damn this was Sweet,
However.....now that you've left it open ended...SEQUEL....PLEASE!!!!
You know...when you feel up to it...no rush

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Bats are indeed mammals. I don't believe I said her tongue was like that of a lizard, but I'll look it over, and see if I can clear that up through edits.
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Well, I don't know. A sequel might be possible, but if it does happen, it will probably take a good while, and would take some consideration. If it was just Flutterbat or Applebat raping another pony, the revelations would have already been made, and probably be less effective. More likely, it would involve Applebat and Flutterbat doing shipping stuff, and trying to find a place to live together in ponyville. No matter what, though, it'd take planning, and a decent amount of writing time.

Though I won't be reading it, I have to congratulate you on that title pun

dunno y, but I kind of hoped for a Joffrey Baratheon ending

would totally have fit with Flutterbat's personality

Wow. That was hot.

Also keep in mind that Twi won't likely let them get away without hitting them with the reversal, so if you go slice-of-life style for a sequel, don't forget to keep that in mind. Could be various ways to interpret that, as it wasn't entirely effective on Flutterbat. Now that she's turned a fledgeling, it might have even less effect... but it might satisfy Twi that it's turned her moral compass back around and cut the urges down to something that won't have her depopulating the orchard, at least. Would you go with the old vampire tales, and have Applebat entirely subject to Flutterbat's will, or something similar?

And then there's the other path, where Flutterbat and Applebat rape and turn the rest of their friends. They were in on Applejack's mob mentality too. That'd be the pure clopfic path, of course. Hm, probably go after Rainbow together, then let her take Pinkie while they get Rarity. Want all five to deal with Ms. Magic. And she'd need to learn a Blood Replenishment spell of some sort so they don't almost-kill a pony every time they wanna fuck. Likely the Princesses would get involved at that point though.

Would really love to see either of these sequels

... Woah.I...I genuinely have nothing to say.

I freaked when I realized she had a phallus...but then I remembered the warning...

Very well made, a few typos I guess...but still, awesome job dude

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Well, I haven't exactly thought either of the options out at this point, but considering it seems the more logical option, and the one that seems the closest to the plotline of this fic, the second option is probably more likely.

Can't say if it'll happen at the moment, but it might. I'll talk to my co-author about it.

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it's an army thing, just the longer serving guys tend to care less about who they tell

I don't much like the ending at all. I don't find the complete 180 in emotion to be anywhere near realistic.

There was too much hurt and too much betrayal for it to turn into anything resembling love.

you relly screw my mind with this it has all my fetishes in one

Normally I wouldn't be interested in some story created by a human, based off a childish TV show. But this caught my attention and I'm amused by it's darkness, minus the last part were the one known as "Flutterbat" showed kindness to the one called "Applejack". Still I liked it so, I DEMAND A SEQUEL!!!!!!!!!! If you don't comply then prepare to feel the wrath of Megatron!!!!!!!!

I felt violated just reading because I was getting a very unwelcome erection. If you guys liked this check out Hypnotic Adventures of Blank Sheet. Good writing, I'll read you around!

I'm not entirely into the hole futa thing... But this one was good... It was intersting and kinda hot lol...

The ending was not at all what I had expected. While it still remained a pretty dark ending it felt kind of warm and fuzzy which was weird when paired with all the craziness that led up to it. Overall the whole thing was terrible but in the good way. I feel kind of ashamed to admit it but it was crazy hot good. Nice job you freak you

I found many errors. I'll tell you what they are when I remember to

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3810812 Okay, here's one thing:
>Applejack pulled her head back from it’s relaxed position on her friend’s side
You used "it's" instead of "its" several times

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Ok, should be fixed now, thanks.

3813538 I found one more occurrence of that error:
>as the blood loss began to take it’s toll

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Curses, foiled again!

3813663 Now that you've fixed that, I have some more:
>who was now hers to deal with a she pleased
>growing closer and closer to climax, She knew it wouldn’t be long
>What in equestria could she mean by

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3813764 Don't worry, it's just my way of saying I love you

I fucking loved it...

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Because magic.

I loved it all it was awesome

Fun fact. Ponies don't naturally have Canines, so they would have to grow completely new teeth instead of making existing ones bigger.

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You underestimate the power of Friendship.
err... I mean magic.

>Tenderrape

Awesome, one of my new favorites

Woah, that was brutal!

Instant fave.

Fanfuckingtastic! I came so hard, I gave my bedroom wall a new coat of paint. God it's everywhere, my chest, my face, and hair. Damn it has been ages since I've done this.

Thumbs up!

Rhetorical Plot Holes
1. equines are obligate nasal breathers, so they breath through their noses under normal condition, thus applejack shouldn't have choked.
2. bats are warm-blooded mammals, (not amphibians, heh), so they should be able to have a boner through normal metabolism.
Of course, the above are politely disregarded for literary devices to enhance the story.

I JUST REALIZED ONE MORE THING
After fluttershy remarked about "if I don't cum in you, you will die", and the whole "Applejack begs for it" thing begins, there's an allusion I'd like to share with you..

Water striders (Gerridae) skate along the water's surface like magical little insect messiahs. Little did you know they were busy perfecting insane new lows in the art of extortion.
Skipping any kind of courtship process, a male strider will just skate over to the nearest female and climb on top of her. If she's not in the mood, she can simply block him off with her "genital shield," a natural insect chastity belt. Many males just get discouraged and find some sluttier thorax to chase after, but desperate, possibly sociopathic males will talk her into it with a unique type of extortion.

See, a natural enemy of the water strider is its own close cousin the backswimmer, an insect that spends all of its time hanging upside-down from the other side of the water's surface tension. If a female strider won't open the back door, a persistent male will strum the water in just the right way to grab the attention of backswimmers, basically splashing around like an idiot until she has to choose between shutting him up with sex or getting eaten by her mirror-world doppelganger.

Keep in mind, the male is on top, so he'd be protected from the predator approaching from below. He can basically wait there all day, with the female's choice to either let him have his way or get eaten. Though it'd have to be a pretty big ego bruise for the males every time a female chooses the latter.

So I wonder, how would Fluttershy feel if Applejack chose the latter - to die honorably? In that scenario, who is more evil: Applejack calling fruitbats a vermin, or Fluttershy basically commiting murder?
Wow. That is deep.

huh weird MY LITTLE DASHY WANTS ME TO COME INSIDE

Well that was rather dark.:
But a-okay.