Arthur, a Pony who lost his wife in a raid between Legionaries of both Eartborn and Stormwing. After that, retreated to New Ponyville to try and recollect what's left of his life. Upon being conscripted in the Earthborn forces, he lost everything in a failed repel against the enemy. All hope was lost…until he found a mask: made of steel, eyeless and had a horn. Then, a burning desire ignited in his heart. He took the mask, and fled. Months after, he's started a series of raids among the caravans of the different houses. Now there's a side to help those caught in the middle. There's now a side that has a blank banner up high. They are Legion. They are Faceless. Or No Face.
WARNING: Contains violence, blood, gore, sexual themes and adult-like situations and activities. Readers advised.
I enjoy reading the story so far but you forgotten to make a new paragraph if the dialogue has a new speaker. It gets confusing if the dialogue is scrunched up together.
3731697 So...should I put each statement on a new line then?
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Well, everytime there's a new speaker, make a new paragraph. Dialogue is considered to be a new statement or subject.
Ex.
"Like this," Meow said, pointing at a green board. Wearing smart-looking robes as he continues his lecture.
"I get it now!" Madness whines. "You already told me that a hundred times!" It was getting extremely annoying when his partner lectures him about grammar.
3734477 Thanks! That actually makes more sense. I kinda started doing something like that. Thanks for the suggestion, much appreciation.
I take it this story is dead?
Shame if so. I don't really like Equestria divided stories, but I think this one has potential.
You probably won’t see this, but I would like to see a continuation of this story
Oh fuck it’s the cult of laughter. Agents burn’em down
I don’t like where this is going.
My shipping senses are tiggiljng
And his daughter has a mother again.
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Actually do you mind if you check out my story?
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Hey it’s you.
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It is me