Midnight Twinkle is Princess Luna's daughter. Her life suddenly changes when she meets Dusk Shine, the top student in her Aunt Celestia's school. Read on to know more!
Midnight Twinkle is Princess Luna's daughter. Her life suddenly changes when she meets Dusk Shine, the top student in her Aunt Celestia's school. Read on to know more!
inHmm the grammer and spelling are tolerable but here are two things that can't be ignored:
Pacing and detail: every things happening way too fast with little to no detail in-between events. It felt rushed, first this happened then that happened then then happened which caused this to happen. Then you look over and see that only 10 sec had passed.
WoT: wall of text. This means that you had no space or indentation between paragraphs and there should be at least 1here
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Ok. I am so sorry!!!!
i like this chapter and i hope there is going to be more chapters come out for this story and that ok
I like this story so far hope to read more soon