Shining can deal with griffons, mobsters, and the possible end of the world no problem. Dealing with his wife and her girlfriend crowding his bed is a different matter...
Okay, I find this Shining to have more bite and backbone, but if, a big IF, you plan on using this material , it would be best added that Sunshine would try to join in on the messed up family of Shining Armor, trying to save his marriage the only way possible, be the stallion of the family.
WOW, Shining want the divorce from Cadance. It's the best, Cadance only have eyes for Chrysalis and Lovebug, and she hasn't give any atention to Shining Armor, and he was her husband, and Cadance pissed off when she found Truth and Shining in bed, she has nothing to reclaim, seeing that Cadance has a relationship with Chrysalis. SEQUEL!!!
3806961 I know right? Cadance actually had the gall to be pissed at Shining when she thought he had sex with Truth. Uh, Cadance not only has had an affair behind her husbands back but she got pregnant by Chrysalis as well?
3807830 Who do you think Lovebug is daughter of? Lovebug is the daughter of Cadance and Chrysalis. If you don't believe me read "If you have sex with a changeling that looks like your beloved and you didn't know and you end up having a child together, does it count as cheating?"
3807952 That was a rhetorical question. I meant she's had an ongoing affair with Chrysalis and got pregnant with Lovebug by her and had the gall to get upset when she thought Shining had sex with Truth.
3808309 I know right? She had no right to reclaim nothing. I guess it's the best if Shining divorces from Cadance BUT seeing that is Shining the one who wants the divorce from Cadance, Cadance must pay Shining for all the troubles she has caused to Shining.
Did you guys read the story? It wasn't Cadence's fault she was mad at Shining. It was the anti-magic poisoning screwing with her. Yeah, she totally fucked up by cheating on him - everyone understands this, but Shining put that aside and basically took Cadence and Chrysalis to be his. He's being pretty damn manly about this and ends up with two royal bitches. Hopefully also Truth because that shit will be my fetish.
Now he's got women all over him and corndogs. Don't diss on the family he's holding together, you're insulting his man-pride.
Shining fell asleep to literally the Bennet line of dialogue. This entire adventure has been a dream, and he's gonna kiss the mares, the sun will rise, and it will all end in the wonderfully ambiguous "it was all a dream" hints of the original Total Recall.
so there I was browsing the depths of my favorite stories to see what had updated in my drought of internet and low and behold my eyes caught this gem once more, but alas I lack internet at my dwelling so I must download this intriguing story so that I can read it in my free time. Then suddenly a error arose informing me that this story's title was far too long for a file name, I franticly look for a way to fix this error to ensure my free time to be filled with tales of adventure and love polygons of innumerable sides when finally I realized I was using internet explorer and not my normal browser for internet adventures and thus my day and story for reading was saved!
3797734 And so, after a couple of weeks of hell at work I gathered my remaining will and finally finished reading this story. Anyhow I stand my ground. Especially about it not worth my time. And I add, that most of the sequels are not worth the original. You can do better! Better than jamming together some classic action movies (that is meant to be watched, not read) and replacing people with ponies. I hope this little slap will bring you back to senses, so you forget all the the glory and fame and start training for gold again, as you did at your great start.
And a new story? I'll read it... but some time later, than it has some more chapters and I can allot more time.
3950229 Silly little Molestia, I don`t want you to change your ways. It would be like agtitating against Derpy As for specifics, I like diversity and reading Die Hard clone (yes, you keep saying it has many other best sellers embedded into it, but all I can see is Die Hard story's core) is ... dissapointing. Making Die Hard a small part of bigger story or a Die Hard reference ark is ok thou. Be original and creative, create your own universe, never repeat! Repetitiveness becomes routine, routine begets sadness, sadness leads to loneliness. Also you do not grab all the loot and run away, you listen to what reader says, try to improve, staying yourself, and MAKE THEM LOVE YOU AND COME BACK FOR MORE . Sam says so freefall.purrsia.com/ff2500/fc02413.png (c) http://freefall.purrsia.com
Pfft, haha
Will you hate me if i tell you, that i like this ending more?
At least here shining grew a goddamn spine
Snrk... Bwahaha! Brilliant. Slightly messed up, but nonetheless brilliant.
Best ending so far.
That ending was great... But the song made it just that much better.
Okay, I find this Shining to have more bite and backbone, but if, a big IF, you plan on using this material , it would be best added that Sunshine would try to join in on the messed up family of Shining Armor, trying to save his marriage the only way possible, be the stallion of the family.
WOW, Shining want the divorce from Cadance. It's the best, Cadance only have eyes for Chrysalis and Lovebug, and she hasn't give any atention to Shining Armor, and he was her husband, and Cadance pissed off when she found Truth and Shining in bed, she has nothing to reclaim, seeing that Cadance has a relationship with Chrysalis.
SEQUEL!!!
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True Final Ending to follow.
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Alrightey, I'm looking forward to it.
3806961 I know right? Cadance actually had the gall to be pissed at Shining when she thought he had sex with Truth. Uh, Cadance not only has had an affair behind her husbands back but she got pregnant by Chrysalis as well?
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Who do you think Lovebug is daughter of?
Lovebug is the daughter of Cadance and Chrysalis. If you don't believe me read "If you have sex with a changeling that looks like your beloved and you didn't know and you end up having a child together, does it count as cheating?"
3807952 That was a rhetorical question. I meant she's had an ongoing affair with Chrysalis and got pregnant with Lovebug by her and had the gall to get upset when she thought Shining had sex with Truth.
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I know right? She had no right to reclaim nothing.
I guess it's the best if Shining divorces from Cadance BUT seeing that is Shining the one who wants the divorce from Cadance, Cadance must pay Shining for all the troubles she has caused to Shining.
I swear to Celestia, Luna, and Chrysallis's flawless flank, if you short me on the total recall ending...
...I will be DEEPLY CONTRITE with you.
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Did you guys read the story? It wasn't Cadence's fault she was mad at Shining. It was the anti-magic poisoning screwing with her.
Yeah, she totally fucked up by cheating on him - everyone understands this, but Shining put that aside and basically took Cadence and Chrysalis to be his. He's being pretty damn manly about this and ends up with two royal bitches. Hopefully also Truth because that shit will be my fetish.
Now he's got women all over him and corndogs. Don't diss on the family he's holding together, you're insulting his man-pride.
3810924 Which one liner? There were a few.
3810953 What do you mean Total Recall ending. I've seen both movies, (Old one was way better) and are not quite sure what you mean.
3810958 Ah, someone gets it. You did a better job of explaining it than I probably could have. Good show!
Also:
O...okay then...
Also, I think I actually got an argument started because of this story. Do I get a gif of the Joker clapping?
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Shining fell asleep to literally the Bennet line of dialogue. This entire adventure has been a dream, and he's gonna kiss the mares, the sun will rise, and it will all end in the wonderfully ambiguous "it was all a dream" hints of the original Total Recall.
There better be a lot of damn corndogs in that ending.
3816335 Commando, easily one of the greatest 80's action movies ever.
so there I was browsing the depths of my favorite stories to see what had updated in my drought of internet and low and behold my eyes caught this gem once more, but alas I lack internet at my dwelling so I must download this intriguing story so that I can read it in my free time. Then suddenly a error arose informing me that this story's title was far too long for a file name, I franticly look for a way to fix this error to ensure my free time to be filled with tales of adventure and love polygons of innumerable sides when finally I realized I was using internet explorer and not my normal browser for internet adventures and thus my day and story for reading was saved!
3830397 Who the hell uses Internet Explorer?
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me when I'm not paying attention evidently.
3830867 *raises hoof* I do. Exclusively for this site.
3848721 Whoo?
I got bored and came back to read this and I made sure to turn on the song before reading through it again and it was totally worth it...
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3862881 Awww! I love you too.
(Platonically)
kinda prefer the threeway ending, but then again i always prefer multi endings so im kinda biased. also are you making the sequal you hinted?
3870979 Why yes. Yes I am.
3880554 Juno is a pegasus!
3811610 gifrific.com/wp-content/uploads/2012/04/joker-clap-hq.gif
There you go. Awesome story by the way. Loved the action, the romance, and the betral. It all played out nicely.
3881278 Ah. The way it was set up I was totally thinking changeling.
I regret nothing!!
3885812 Wait for it...
*Sits upside down* Are we gonna have a sequel to the sequel??? :3
3944956 iambrony.dget.cc/mlp/gif/10690__safe_princess-celestia_animated_molestia_dance_grin_headbob_headbang.gif
3884384 Thanks.
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*Claps hands* YAY!
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And so, after a couple of weeks of hell at work I gathered my remaining will and finally finished reading this story. Anyhow I stand my ground. Especially about it not worth my time. And I add, that most of the sequels are not worth the original.
You can do better! Better than jamming together some classic action movies (that is meant to be watched, not read) and replacing people with ponies.
I hope this little slap will bring you back to senses, so you forget all the the glory and fame and start training for gold again, as you did at your great start.
And a new story? I'll read it... but some time later, than it has some more chapters and I can allot more time.
3950193 I'm going to need more than that to convince me to change my ways.
(Be specific on what's wrong.)
Also, it matters little if you leave the theater now. I still have your money.
Let the neck snapping and death by cameos begin!
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Silly little Molestia, I don`t want you to change your ways. It would be like agtitating against Derpy
As for specifics, I like diversity and reading Die Hard clone (yes, you keep saying it has many other best sellers embedded into it, but all I can see is Die Hard story's core) is ... dissapointing. Making Die Hard a small part of bigger story or a Die Hard reference ark is ok thou. Be original and creative, create your own universe, never repeat! Repetitiveness becomes routine, routine begets sadness, sadness leads to loneliness.
Also you do not grab all the loot and run away, you listen to what reader says, try to improve, staying yourself, and MAKE THEM LOVE YOU AND COME BACK FOR MORE . Sam says so
freefall.purrsia.com/ff2500/fc02413.png
(c) http://freefall.purrsia.com
3964778 Fors! Ro! !
3954453 Okay Yoda, I see your point.
(Sorry the reply took so long, I hadn't thought of a good joke yet.)
I was hoping for this final, and i stay with this one!
3990335 This one is unfamiliar with the term 'tge'. Please elaborate.
~Am_Z
3990413 This one has been told TheWraithWriter appreciates this.
~Am_Z
It was ok but I liked the other one better.
4031602 For The Evulz
4031752 The Worf Effect
4032058 ........Shit, they cracked the system.