• Member Since 26th Nov, 2013
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LunarLife


Wazzup guys. I'm just a brony who loves to read and write. Its Lunar!

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Lightbreaker just thought he was living his normal life in Manehattan. There was nothing special about him. But little did he know, he was from a long line of Assassins. One that was part of a secret war, which Light thought he would never become a part of. But he has to live out the creed.....

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You need a capital H here. Nice back story to the whole 'Pony Creed'. Can't wait to see the rest. And, just some advice, but don't put too much detail, such as:

"I am happy to announce that after quite some waiting," pause, "I have finally decided that we are ready to prepare our next attack!"

That 'pause' wasn't necessary. Plus, don't rush things. It isn't bad to add a little filler here and there.:twilightsmile:
Hope this helps, good luck!

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Its not finished :applejackunsure:

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