Lightbreaker just thought he was living his normal life in Manehattan. There was nothing special about him. But little did he know, he was from a long line of Assassins. One that was part of a secret war, which Light thought he would never become a part of. But he has to live out the creed.....
You need a capital H here. Nice back story to the whole 'Pony Creed'. Can't wait to see the rest. And, just some advice, but don't put too much detail, such as:
That 'pause' wasn't necessary. Plus, don't rush things. It isn't bad to add a little filler here and there.
Hope this helps, good luck!
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Its not finished