Dillon Orlando awakens in the world of Equestria and he looks for a way home, however while doing this he gets stuck trying to help the changelings after finding out their past conflict with the ponies.
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Not really complaining just wondering why in every one of these situations does rainbow tackle the crap out of the human?
3566432 Because, secretly, she wants humanz snugglez?
More please!
I like
Haven't even opened the first chapter but...
This is the description as it is now. Are you sure that you didn't already tell me the story? What's the point of reading it? Why do I want to read the story now if I know what happens? I know that the changelings and ponies settle for peace at the end due to the help of "the main character". I mean.. it IS OK to use their name in the description you know.
Just an observation that as it is, it doesn't give the reader much incentive to actually read your story.
3566593 Agressive cuddling,Is the only cuddling she knows
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3567887I know I myself didn't open it, for that very reason.
Not bad, can't wait till the story gets good though.
keep it up!
Rushed.
Here's where you lost me.
Making him able to use magic is a bit over board. I was fine with how well he responded to those thieves. I was also ok with him being able to save Celestia, but effortlessly using magic to levitate a ball? I mean I know levitation is the easiest spell to use, but this was his first try. At least have him try and fail only to keep practicing and get better at it. It just seemed like it happened too quickly...
Other than that though I'm really liking this story. It might seem a little dull at times, like everyone is emotionless, but that happens so often on so many stories it's not really a bad thing. Just something you should remember to check from now on. Again, REALLY like this story, and i can't wait for more
3634990 sorry to reply so late, but lets just say he has a natural talent for magic because he needs it. If he had to learn it slowly over time he'd be dead within the next few chapters because of what I planned to put him through.
I though it was the horn he pick what did the trick, and with how diplomatic he is becoming I can see now possible out comes, changelings start to turn to him…they ask him to guide them, he move into the castle, he becomes their leader, in honor they change into a human changeling form,
chrysalis get tick with that,
He and one of the princess get a politic wedding.
There are a lot of possibilities
I really did, thanks please keep making more I want to see where this is going
So, Celestia forcefully prodded his memories without his permission and he's cool with that?
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The pacing if a little off and it pulls me out of the story, Maybe if you practice putting in more details about everything and overall, a little more wordy, it would be better.
It's a great story so far, but a bit fast to read. Try adding a bit more detail into everything to break the story into a slower pace. Great idea story wise though, keep up the good work.
I like it, I can't wait to see what happen next
Doing good on the story so far my friend.
Wow, I think Celestia was a bit noisy she should have wait a bit before doing…that now she ruins everyone celebration
Did you mean to put Nictis in this story just for fun? Or do you even know what I'm talking about? Moondancer is one of his persona's, and i think it's awesome you put him in this story, willingly or not. He's my favourite changeling OC.
3742961 I don't know who Nictis is. Also Moondancer is an OC my girlfriend made and let me use for my story.
3571037 that profile pic made my day
3667894 MIND FUCK
I do, you really catch very well why we humans are a force to be careful about we are resourceful, and clever we ALWAYS find a way to success and search ways to do so, and I love how he slowly its evolving and becoming more and more stronger.
I'm just curious about what the dragon said and how the fact that he just impale him will affect his relationship with Spike.
3777790 Spike knows it was not only self-defense, but it was to protect his friends as well. However he will probably be cautious of Dillon for awhile.
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Ah I see, and its still sad for him part of me wish that when he gets better they can celebrate his help on the changelings.
Also they mention he going into the history books, in the future its possible that they actually do that? I want to see how a scholar or a reporter make an interview of him
Red liquid? You mean like a potion? A red potion? Do you see where this is going?
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ja, re liquid that heal you instantly…that almost sound like Adam from Bio Shock, don't you think?
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I was thinking more along the lines of, Legend of Zelda's 'Red potion'
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That only fuel you like 4 hearts and some times you are still damage, Adam usually heal all in one hit, but yeah I see your point
Just caught up to the story and i can see how much you"ve improved while righting it. Really good read so far.
It does have a happy ending. I like to know, what next's? Are the dragons going to permit humans living in this world? One Dragon tried to kill him. It will be fun to see how you continue this story. Keep up the good work you are doing.
Dragonfox
I love it can't wait for the next chapter
Well it didn't go how I did expect, I'm sad Chrysalis its gone but happy he took what life give him and make the best of it, now he is a king he made a new kingdom and now that its ready he can bring Shade back to be his adviser, the only thing missing is how is going to be the relationship with the sisters. And also curious about what else is in that diary.
Je oh yeah he is going into the records books, as the king that fight his way to the crown and rescue his people even when he didn't know them, all its left its long live the king, may his fiancé said yes. Oh and since he can bring things to earth he can also present his people up to speed with technology, it will be awesome.
Oh I can't wait to see when Celestia and Luna invite him over on his first meeting with other kings, or when he meets the king and queen of the griffons or the king of the dragons!
P.S: Second decree idea - As king of the changelings, I will not let my people get bored! let the grand Changeling Gala be born! As King of the changelings I said…let my people PARTY!
I hope Chryssy will return
3816751 As far as we know Queen Chrysalis is dead. He broke her horn off as well. It is what he has for Magic now.
Dragonfox
Nice chapter, mate ! I think this story is really amazing, there's is both good comedy and good action, have a "pouce vert"
!
Now about Chrysalis's fate......
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I think Chryssie is still alive because :
1)The story is featured in the section "Human X Queen Chrysalis" of the group "Human On Royality" , so Dillon might be in a romantic relationship with Chrysalis.
2)
So, maybe ?
Well at least, that was my theory so it can be and will certainly be (I know that
) wrong .
As I said before, I really enjoyed your story and I can't wait for the next (and maybe last) chapter !
Greetings, Le Mage BC from France.
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I for one hope that she is truly gone for good, she was a tyrant(though I do like stories where she's misunderstood). I always thought the queen a coward, so why did she kill her self so quickly?
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Well you're right , Chrysalis was a tyrant (Queens are always like that in shows for "little girls") and I love that but I also love the misunderstood Chrysalis who only wanted to feed her subjects/children (oh BTW I've got a head-cannon about the love for a changeling: It's first (one of) the only thing(s) that they can feed off and when they ate enough love to survive , then the love they'll eat will became power. So in my opinion, my head-cannon have united both of the show and the fans head cannons).
As for her cowardly nature , in the show that's normal because she was on a "top secret mission". And in the fic I'll say : aren't the most coward vilians the smartest ones ? Because maybe she......faked her death.
DUN DUN DUN !!
Greetings, Le Mage BC from France.
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That may be true, but what of sombra? he was a tyrant, was no coward, and was smart enough to have traps in place a good 1,000 years in advance to stop(or slow) Twilight, the wild card he missed was spike. The elements were useless because thy failed to think them important enough to bring, so a pint-sized sweaty-clawed dragon is the only reason he was defeated. (I have no love for poor spike)
Me too I feel like the end was just to rush do you think it could be possible a sequel/prequel of this story on the future? Please I really want to see how he is do as a king and has more fights.
Like I want to see how he deal with the dragons or maybe changelings cells that like Chrysalis way of ruling and reject and attack his kingdom or hired assassins going for his head…anything I REALLY want to see more, can we have more?
I'm just glad she was NOT, Chrysalis after all.
I am disappointed.
I do like slice of life storys but I am disappointed. I was expecting so much more to the story. a lot has been left out during the 5 years that pass. I hope to see a sequel is in the making. Most of this chapter was as dry as history. Not the good story it started out to be. I like that he made a good life for himself, in Equestria but he is in charge of a large grupe of changelings and he is a human that Dragons fear from there legends. He wood need to work vary hard to bring pees to the different species. He can also bring technology from his world. there is so much that can be added to the story.
Dragonfox
ummmmmmmmmmmmmm no. In fact it is quite the opposite. I don't know where you live but in the stories of old the hero slays the dragon. Very few stories where it is the other way around. Here are a few reminders of this fact.
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3975902 it is true in many stories that a hero slays a dragon, but Spike doesn't know this. Dillon uses that fact to his advantage to calm Spike down and to quickly befriend him.