August 17 2013
It's my birthday finally me and my friends are having a great time until a flash of light
and then BAM I am stuck between the ground and my friends in the middle of a meadow
that can give a gamer a seizure at least I have my 3DS then I would be in hell.....god
I looked at the flowers to long I think I see color coated horses this day is getting weird.
Please let there not be school where ever we are.
The story is taking place in the futer were everybody is a bit older the C.M.C are teenagers
that's actually it.
Chapters (1)
This could use a bit of work, grammatical correction, etc.
You should really get someone to pre-read and Proofread this bud. It looks like you made it in an hour. It is littered with imperfections and spelling mistakes.
Please consider it.
3570910
Thanks and I really will thank you its just my editor joined the core
3570921 No problem! If this were fixed up a bit it would be pretty decent.
3570931
Thanks
I'm not sure, but I do know who needs spell check.
Okay, this has to be a troll. It's impossible to write this poorly after three fics unless you're actively trying.
3571337 I just think he rushed. Not to mention, in the story it says hes in the ninth grade. I get the feeling he actually is....
3571337>>3571619
Actually I did rush this is actually me and my friends story and I will be fixing the small parts ive missed and I feall really bad about all the things i missed live spelling errors and grammer and I am I am working really hard because I am well still working on as much as I can and its really stress full
another good story i think.
i can't wait to read more.
3572966 thank but I don't think I'm going to continue this for a while I'm working on a mice of men kind of story
3573583 ok
I can read it and stand the grammar and spelling errors so a like and a fav
3574597
yea me to
Oh shut up red
Dont question it this is red star aka multie personality not fake real he sound like a brit in my life it suck
Oh and thanks
3571337 Whew, almost fell for another trollfic.
Glad I read the comments.
3575525
What do you mean troll fic
3575525 I dont think its a troll fic. Just an extremely rushed one that was written by a person with the faintest grasp of spelling and grammar. He really needs an editor and prereader
Lol. Where is the intro.
3577956well i don't have a intro I am very sad about it and I'm pissed this is why I need a editor I can't find nobody to help me and I am as pissed as my self in the story
yea
3578809 I will be happy to help. :-)
3579367
thank you. can you fix this chapter hehehe
3579514 I will see what I can.
3580775
Thanks
Yeeesh Brandon almost has as much bad luck as me ALMOST