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Awww shiiit it just got real up in here
7101678 OK, let me just say that not all people act the same in certain situations. Some people can be calm and some people can flip their shit. The romance with Applejack was actually slow compared to some stories I have read. I will probably go back and revise some chapters but as it stands the story has gotten too long for me to simply stop writing new chapters and go back to the old one's. I am in the process of rewriting my first stories and maybe after that I will improve this one but not yet.
I think some information is missing from this chapter.
when did they meet the guards and talk about what trixi wanted help with!.
if that i revealed in later chapter,you need to think about your writing style, because this is very "jumpy"(fast unexplained scene change) writing.(it's like floating downstream on a river and suddenly the river missing ten meter of water, it's a hell of a sudden stop.)
8203660 Thanks for that. I never noticed I didn't write in her telling the group what help she wanted. I will have to come back and fix that when I'm done with the latest chapter. I guess when your thinking too hard some things slip by.