Flutter Night was born with a demon, known as Seraphic Nightmare. Unlike most chaotic sides which appears rarely, Flutter Night's chaotic side appears every moon. But her chaotic side turns her into a merciless killer, known as Seraphic Night, which can only be defeated and calmed down by Flutter Night, herself. When she is Seraphic Night, her true self doesn't know, but memories start to appear in her mind. Seraphic Nightmare, afraid that once Flutter Night finds out about her chaotic side, there will be nopony to save her. To save Flutter Night before it happens, Princess El asks four ponies to help.
(Seraphic Night doesn't really look like Nightmare Moon, but she resembles it, I guess)
Chapters (9)
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Fine. I would be very mad at someone who kills Luna.
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...Okay I'll say it I'm a tad bit mad at a pony who kills Luna.
I give credits to three of my friends who helped me with three of the characters:
http://www.fimfiction.net/user/WhiteAngelic helped me with White Angelic
http://www.fimfiction.net/user/NightAngelic helped me with Silver Soul
http://www.fimfiction.net/user/Star+Sentinel helped me with the one and only Star Sentinel, which is her own OC
thank you for helping me with this story, you three ^^
:3
This does NOT count as any cannon to my OC. I'll make a story soon...maybe. Damn. Liked the story.
Ugh, my tummy. It turned.
The opening, the chopy feel of the story, FS giving un needed info to her killer?!?
Time skips, like a hack saw < confusion running ramped.
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Yeah everything there is too convenient.
Riddled grammer errors
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Hmm felt like reading a long, summary.
Hmm didn't know A-Star was that weak.
and that hide n seek? What game? It just told me results and never played the game.
Yep, let's drop that and go, no questions asked.
Scatter.
Plot meet bonfire.
Oh you 2 are well versed...
Anti climatic.
Paper plot.
Let's see.
Everything that chipped and cut and beat up the current score.
This gets a 1/5.
Keep working at it.
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Thanks for the critism lunar ^^ since this is actually the first story I ever finished :D
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And the only thing that is true about ur OC in this story is that Luna is his mom ^^
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Of course Angel anything I can do to help out great Fics to be created later.
Keep striving for improvement.
I'll be rooting for ya.
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I'm finally gonna start writing the sequel ^-^
the prologue will have Lulu and Tia, and little Starry :)
Quick question but if you submit could u still add more chapters?
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yep you can add chapters after it is submitted.
after that 1k chapter mark for submission.
your free to a more chapters later.
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Cool ^-^
Thanks again lunar~