www.equestria.com.eq

by Swiftbullet

Chapter 2 - The first blood.

“This day has been just perfect. The kind of day which I dream since I was small. Everypony I…” Chrystalis stopped singing when she felt a strange energy coming from Ponyvielle direction.

Suddenly on the horizon appeared a blinding white flash. Nopony can now thwart her plans, no when she was so close. She immediately, using her hive mind, send three hundred of troops to check what was that.

-#-

I slowly regained consciousness, but when I tried to stand up, my body went on strike, like writers in 2008. I feel like my head was break apart. I tried open my eyes but only result was more painful headache.

“Jesus Christ… I feel like I was kick by a horse.” I slowly regained feel in my body and eyesight.

Around me many soldiers had the same problem like I. Few of them was already on their feet, but most was still unconsciousness.

“Jureczku stand up, it isn’t time for a nap” tease me Kurcewicz, while helping me stand on my own feet “ You shouldn’t drank so much yesterday.

“ What the fuck, just happened?” I asked forgetting about this clear sign of lack of discipline.

“ I have no idea. I woke up two minutes ago” – Wojtek said with serious ton.

I looked in the sky, it was clear, even one cloud on the horizon. I looked on watch, according to it we was unconsciousness maximum twenty minutes. So How The Fuck The Sky Is Crystal Clear Now! But It wasn’t end, because why should be. Twenty minutes earlier we were on clearing, now we were on the edge of some forest in one side and endless meadows in three others. Finally my eyes turned in the direction of MDS.

“MDS…Nancy! With small problems I moved in the direction of huge body of this “technology miracle”. As I entered MDS I looked around. Nancy stood behind Holden who worked on the computer right know.

“ Are you alright?” I asked her.

“Yeah I am.”
I smiled hearing this, but I settled down immediately.

“What happened? Is MDS operational?” Looking in her face I now that is something serious.

“No, but we have more problems. GPS is dead, we have no connection with satellites. Communication is down.”

“Communication system is broken? What is about IVIS?” I asked

“IVIS, radars, all computers are fully operational. I don’t understand this. It looks like satellites didn’t exist anymore. In all VHF dead silence. Nothing, just nothing. And how I said before the MDS is not working, something blocking barrier emitter system. ”
I this moment I simply feel like a fool. If the computers working so why we haven’t communication with satellites and why there is nothing on VHF? But I have to calm down, I was a boss here, everyone expected a brilliant decision from me.

“Cupryś!” I called our signalmen “Are you alive?”

“Yes Sir!” Said Corporal form looking outside from command vehicle.

“Call a central command!”

“Yes Sir” moment later I heard as our radio squeaking.

“Ok Nancy, now tell me everything you know.” I backed to previous conversation.

“ Same kind of lightning hit a antenna. Computers registered powerful power stroke. System security had been overloaded and system initiated emergency shutdown. Holden already reset the system, so everything should be ok. Anyway systems are in working order, communication between battalion units working without any problems, but outside – deaf silence. We are like this deaf and blind, why I have no idea, but we have it all recorded on hard drives, so we will find reason soon.”

“It’s awfully suspicious” Said Kurcewicz, who few seconds ago approached us. “ Communication was and now isn’t. Clearing was here and now is not. Strom was here and now is not. What the fuck is going on? Did General decided to give us a fucking theme park experience in no fun edition?”

“Mr Colonel” This time men who interrupt our little conversation to add new realize DLC, for our current situation, was Galaś, who appear in front of me, I even don’t know from. “ I report, that our radar detected an unknown flying objects, and they are moving in our direction.”

“WHAT THE FUCKING HELL IS GOING ON!” I had enough of this. No communication, everyone act as if they were suffering from the Saint Vitus Dance, change of scenery, and know military zone are changed into a fucking fly free zone. I didn’t imagined that anything could surprise me now. I couldn’t been more wrong.

“Mr Colonel” Cupryś lean on command vehicle door. “We find same signal but it isn’t central command.”

“What do you mean Corporal?” I asked.

“You have to listen it yourself Sir”
I quickly ran inside with Galaś, Kurcewicz and Nancy. We stood in front of radio. Corporal activate a speakers and we heard very clear women voice.

“My Changlings, today we took Canterlot, tomorrow we will take all of Equestria. Celesta is in our hoofs, just like elements of harmony. Victory is within our hoofs, all we need to do is take it.”
Same male voice respond.

“Your Highness, we approaching a place where the white flash appear. Orders…”

“Destroy every resistance, nothing can stop us now.” Said a Queen.

“So be it, for the glory of the swarm.” Transmission ended, and we only heard a statics. We stood like idiots with open mouths, all the time looked on radio. Cupryś turned off a speakers.

“It is not like I complaining Jureczku, but what the fuck we just heard? Ask confused Kurcewicz.

“I have no idea” I said, but seriously Canterlot, Equestria, Celestia. I never heard this names. And this sentence “in our hoofs” who using such idiotic figure of speech. To this moment I still thought that this is some advanced training to check our psychological strength. Just jump into the deep end.
In this moment I should give series of commands to secure camp from danger. Then one of Borek’s men stand at attention in front of me.

“Mr Colonel” he saluted “ From north, approaching something what looks like same kind of swarm of insects, they hum and etc.”
Then I understood… white light… last thing I remember before losing my consciousness was white light… WE ARE A WHITE LIGHT!

Kucewicz had to faster put two and two together because right after what we heard he vanished among his man. I was about to give the order of full combat readiness, when I heard buzz, and swarm hit a camp. The sky was dark, overshadowed by hundreds of black bodies. Few of them began to nosedive, created green flames around themselves. Moment later they started hitting a ground.

“What the hell” just in front of my face crashed one of this Things and began to hiss. He reached up to my waist, he had a dark black body and fly kind type of wings on his back. His wings as legs (ending with… hoofs!) has many holes but I didn’t see blood.

I backed up falling back to the ground. Strange creature, began to approach me still hissing. I pulled out my USP Expert caliber 9 millimeters and fired at this Thing. The bullet passed through scull of the creature. I was complete paralyzed by fear, we were attack by horse-kind insects. I looked as green blood melts around this thing.

“ Well at least it's not damn acid” I said, pulling myself together, looked around. There was chaos, most of soldiers barely woke up after the accident, and no one had weapon with him right now. I was sure that this is end and this monsters will kill us. But next song was sang by maestro Kurcewicz. When I lost my head, he quickly backed to his man. The battle spotted him while he stood in front of his tank arguing with the driver about smuggle vodka. It was probably about the unequal distribution between the commander and crew.

When enemy attacked he forgot about arguing, and quickly jumped into his tank and right now engine started run of this machine of doom. I felt like ground started shaking, when dozens of tons moved. Kurcewicz stood in the middle of the camp and suddenly deaf silence fell over the camp. These creatures looked like they never seem tank before, and began to gather in one larger group – big mistake. I heard the sound of an electric motor rotating tower of the tank, exactly in the direction of clusters of these, for lack of a better word, insects. A second later huge explosion torn apart these monsters. Bullet caliber 125 millimeters, complete destroy half the swarm. The rest fly above us complete surprised by the turn of events.

The Explosion was heard even in Canterlot, Chrystalis felt like many of changlings die in matter of second.
Twilight heard a explosion too. She wasn’t sure what it was, but certainly distracted a Queen. There was her chance. She quietly walked to the Cadence. Her horn started to glow, as she realize her old foalsitter.

“Quick, go to him while you still have a chance.” She said.

Next explosion hit the air, Chrystalis felt like rest of the changlings she send was killed.

-#-

When Kurcewicz, signaled that we still in fight, I immediately reached for the radio.

“Borek give me two heavy machine guns on the left flank ASAP!”

“Lieutenant Grabowski move two of your “Szykła” next to Kurcewicz tank and start firing those enemies who are still in the air.”

Two antiaircraft units lined up on both sides of the Kurcewicz tank. Two earth-air missiles hit rest of the swarm. Only few was still alive and started run into the forest. But that was another bad idea.
When chaos regain Commandos from “GROM” unit, pride of the Polish Army, quickly returned for the guns. And using forest like cover they began to flank the enemy. When the remains of enemy tried hide in the woods. Wojtyński and his men opened fire. SMG MP-5 caliber 9 millimeter is one of the world's best weapons to fight for a short distance. Customs, light, practically devoid of recoil. In skilled hands is a real killing machine. Several precise, short series of shots finally ended the existence of this beings.

-#-

Chrystalis couldn’t believe somepony just massacre so many of her subjects. But she still had Canterlot.

Then she saw some light behind her. When she turned princess Cadence and Shining Armor floated in the air surrounded by a very strong magic.

“NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!” She yield when magic energy hit her and her changlings throwing them far beyond the borders of Equestria.

Twilight breathed a sigh of relief, it was finally over. But something did not allow her to calm down. These explosions were not accidental. Something or somepony must caused them. And she knew she would not be herself if she has not found out who it was.

Comments

[Spike the Scribe]

You know, at some point I had a similar idea for a Marcin Ciszewski-styled fic, and even started writing it down, but I've gotten lazy and didn't continue. So seeing something like this is quite refreshing. I'm curious how you're gonna portray "Johnny" Wieteska and his reaction to RD. No, scratch that, I'm curious how you're going to get the whole team's reaction to Technicolor Magical Ponies, especially considering their... laid back attitude (NOTE: as of the moment of this comment I didn't read the fic due to the ungodly hour where I'm right now; gonna comment on the actual story on a later date, for now to the Read Later list).

One thing about the tags though: if it's a crossover you don't have to add the "Human" tag. Just saying.

[Spike the Scribe]

Ok, now that I'm through with this here story I can safely say one thing: you seriously need a corrector. I mean good God that was painful to read. Not the story itself, the story's fine, it's just your grammar that kills it. I would even go as far as to say that most of the dislikes you got are just because of that. Seriously, find someone to read this through and correct it.

Now to the story proper: it's not half bad. Of course I could complain about all the exposition that you had in the first chapter, but seeing as you started from about one-third of the original book it's to be expected; you had to compensate for the lack of buildup and organic exposition. It would probably work out better if you had started from a bit earlier in the original and presented everything up to the pony-related stuff upon submission (dunno, parts of the first chapter and this but without the bar fight scene and the briefing). What I did like was that you picked the changeling invasion as the point in time when the team appears in Equestria. As I stated before, I had an idea for a similar story way back and this was the same place I wanted them to appear (though not as their first destination [aka by the end of the book]). I guess great minds think alike

Oh, and the links to pictures was a nice touch. Just wanted you to know that.

Now I want to give you some advice concerning some aspects of the story, mainly the way you write surnames. Normally I would fully fully support the use of the original way to write them, but bear in mind that most people on this site don't use Polish, and as such have no idea how to pronounce them. Try to write them down in the following way: all Polish signs should be changed to standard Latin ones (ś to s, ć to c etc.), things like -ski, -cki should be written in a more phonetic way (-sky, -cky), and if it's not a problem then try to write the characters' names in their English equivalent. No need to make this more difficult on the readers than it already is.

Lastly, as a fellow member of a group we're both a part of I am willing to offer my humble help with this fic.

"Dude, shouldn't you be like working on your own story? You didn't post anything in over half a yea-"

"Shut up Rainbow, I don't need you to remind me!"

Eh, yeah, well the thing is I may be willing to help out with this as an editor (better grasp of the language and whatnot, just saying). But treat this as a last resort kind of thing, ok? I'm kinda working on my own thing and it's taking me way too long as it is. Nonetheless, if you can't find anyone else willing to help out with this than holler at me, I'll see what I can do.

[Cakebomb]

It's a great idea. I can proof read for you.