This story is based off of the Fatal Frame/Project Zero series.
After hearing that Twilight Sparkle was commissioned to repair a Camera Obscura by Photo Finish, Rarity volunteers to take Camera Obscura to Photo Finish’s home located near a town called Laurenville at the base of Mount Faust. Once she arrives, Rarity finds Photo Finish’s home abandoned and full of ghosts and demons. As she explores the manner the white unicorn finds that she has a mysterious connection to the haunted home.
Notes: If like this story I’d suggest checking out Fallout: Equestria-Silent Ponyville. It’s like reading 12 Picture Perfect Pony Zeros back to back.
I actually started writing Mothering Bell before Fo:E-Silent Ponyville. But well reading Fallout: Equestria Littlepip reminded of James form Silent Hill and I came up with a cool concept to go with that so I halted Mothering Bell to work on Fo:E-Silent Ponyville. But Didn’t want to leave Mothering Bell unfinished. I also have plans for another Picture Perfect Pony Zero story.
you spelt manor wrong in the descriptions
you are definitely going to want someone to point out spelling errors before you post chapters. There are quite a few. Also slow down. With the right wording and a lot slower pace this could have been pretty creepy
3448167 I'd like to know what kind of spelling errors you're talking about. I wrote a story thats almost 100,000 words over a four month period plus some shorter storied and this was the first time I hearing about this. (Although this section of my story is six months old, I'd just put through final corrections.) I usually listen to my work through text-to-speach several times to make sure I have the right words or not forgeting any words. But I allways notice things I can improve with over time.
"Twilight Sparker"?
Did we teleport from the back to the kitchen?
3448334 yea no offence but this isn't really scaring mewe aren't ready yet it gets more creepy right?
Anypony feel like we shoulda had a boss fight by now?
Now that's more like it also alluding to a future hazard like that perfect i'd say this chapter got the "fatal frame"(...you know.....it is unwise...too agitate ghost....is professor takamina here?) SHUT UP MIFUYU!
Now we have entered fatal frame 2 territory.
Great fight but this seems more silent hill than fatal frame to me.
May i make a suggestion SEQUAL TIME!!!
As 3448167 pointed out, you really need someone to give this a going over, case in point:
Antics are things people get up to that might be childish, strange, grotesque or bizarre
Antiques are objects older than 50 years (last I checked, it might be down given the turn around on electronics), for example things like family heirlooms, medals from the World Wars or coins issued before a change over in currency such as the one the UK had in the 50s-70s era.