This is an experiment I decided to release for the Halloween Season. I'm going to ask that you don't give away any potential spoilers in the comments, but inevitably somebody will, so for those of you actually reading this, be careful when looking through the comment section.
"When invited to a Nightmare Night ball, Twilight Sparkle is told that not everything is as it seems and that something is going on behind the scenes. It falls to her and Luna to investigate the matter further before things get out of hoof."
Anyways, I hope you enjoy this Halloween story I've brewed up for you all, about the ponies we all love, getting into trouble at a royal Nightmare Night Ball.
Chapters (1)
I do love Nightmare Night party stories.
I...am....wee bit freaked out about this story... it was... differnet... I want to hide
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And That has made writing this thing worth it.
Have yet to read. I wanted to point out the spelling mistake in the title, then I decided to look up "Scotophobia" before making an ass out of myself. Apparently it means afraid of the dark.
I'll try to read it before the 31st.
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Or on the 31st if you wish.
Did not like. Admittedly, that's at least partly my fault - I'm not fond of horror, and I should have known better than to read something like this, but given the light-hearted beginning, I was hoping I was mistaken in that.
That said, congratulations. I imagine it takes a fair bit of mental/emotional/spiritual strength to write something so elpiphagic and not end up like Princess Luna in the end.
And finally, as my parting words: Fiat Lux.
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I thank you for your compliment, and understand that this was not the story you were looking for, as it was intended to be misleading with it's beginning in an attempt for shock value. It isn't something I'm used to, and will hopefully improve upon in the future, and I hope this doesn't turn you away from possibly looking up my other stories, as they are quite the opposite in that they hold a much more lighthearted tone throughout their entirety.
Also, I must congratulate you on not taking a typical "I didn't like this it was stupid" sort of stance that I have come to expect from the internet. Even if you didn't enjoy the story, your comment has made me rather happy.
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Took your advice and read it on the 31st.
I realize it was meant to be a horror, and that does make certain things necessary.
I think one of the big problems I had with it is that you jumped main characters. Narrowing the focus down to a single character would give you a lot more control over the information unfolding to the readers. It is also a lot less jarring (in the immersion sense, not the Boo! sense).
It's fine how the antagonist(s) was(were) handled. The conflict was ok. I think you could have probably played a bit more with the whole fear of the dark theme a bit better had you focused on the end protagonist the whole way through.
If you want me to mail you my critique that isn't trying to avoid spoilers, lemme know.
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I would like your critique, indeed. And I thank you for constructive criticism.
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If you wish to know, I may send a PM on the inspiration and thought put into them.
Also I'm very glad you enjoyed this story. Though If I can get around to it, this may be merely attempt number one, as I seek to improve upon it on further Halloweens.
OH NO IT'S JOHN CARPENTERS THE THING!
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Kinda, yeah.