Two kingdoms' rulers are always arguing. Equestria and Stabalia. The king and queen of Stabalia are constantly telling Celestia and Luna to rule with an iron hoof, and Celestia and Luna tell them love and tolerance. They fall from their old friendship, and soon argue every time they communicate. rumors of war soon spread, and it seems likely to happen. King Noon Sun finally comes up with the solution: his daughter, Sunrise Glow will marry Princess Celestia's nephew, Blueblood. Sunrise Glow soon fears for her sanity.
Chapters (4)
cool! just a few issues, it needs more description and longer chapters
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Not bad! It has some funny scenes and the concept has lots of potential. I would advise doing a little more spell-checking and staging the scenes better though. Describe characters physical actions and their surroundings as things happen, I was a little confused when Cadance showed up myself due to the lack of staging.
Good luck and keep writing!
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Thanks for the advice! I will try to follow it. Please be patient with me, I know that I'm not a great writer and all that I have available to type on is an iPod.
Lot of immortality going around... Boo.
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Yeah…Giving out the gift of immortality was no one of the Sisters' best plans.
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I know that pain.
Doing a great job, regardless!
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Do continue.
I am interested.
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I can do those now
On the bright side I now have a laptop to type on! I LOVE MY CHRISTMAS PRESENT
You're welcome...
Now excuse me while I go burst into happiness because someone credited me... I am WAY overreacting but SQUEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE
And laptops be fabulous
You may want to read up on the lavender unicorn sindrome... Though this story is great, I believe your writing is suffering from it.