As a gas mask collector, this irks me. First off, filters, not gas canisters. If they were gas canisters, the mask would do the opposite of what it should. Second, there is no "mouth" of a gas mask. Oh, and are all of the masks "double cheek loaders"? (2 filters) If so, that would be somewhat illogical, given their situation. The better choice would be a center mounted filter, hose, or a "rifleman type" (single filter on one side, the side opposite to the shooter's shooting arm, in order to allow easier aiming with rifle-grip weapons). Sorry for the meaningless comment, or sounding condescending. Good story either way.
5892180 5892171 Thanks for the heads up, in actuality I've never owned a gas mask since military hardware is pretty hard to come by in Australia so I'm guessing what the proper terminology would be for this kinda stuff. Anything else that's obviously wrong or is that all?
So, split up four ways. I have a feeling they'll all meet in Ponyville again. So patches got the everfree right? Welp, i feel sorry for the local food chain, 'cause there's a new predator in town.
Loving the story, keep it up because you can do it!
6135240 Thanks man. I plan to get back to writing this soon since I've got a lot more free time and motivation. I'm gonna dedicate whole chapters to one character for awhile just to get the individual plots rolling.
This is great.
Good work again LPC.
5885673 Thanks Sim Stat!
As a gas mask collector, this irks me. First off, filters, not gas canisters. If they were gas canisters, the mask would do the opposite of what it should. Second, there is no "mouth" of a gas mask. Oh, and are all of the masks "double cheek loaders"? (2 filters) If so, that would be somewhat illogical, given their situation. The better choice would be a center mounted filter, hose, or a "rifleman type" (single filter on one side, the side opposite to the shooter's shooting arm, in order to allow easier aiming with rifle-grip weapons). Sorry for the meaningless comment, or sounding condescending. Good story either way.
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Thanks for the heads up, in actuality I've never owned a gas mask since military hardware is pretty hard to come by in Australia so I'm guessing what the proper terminology would be for this kinda stuff. Anything else that's obviously wrong or is that all?
5892621 Nothing else is out of place, really.
5893341 Cool, I got something somewhat right
So the four of them end up in different places. Interesting...
5975158 Trust me, Canada has EVERY RIGHT to be pissed off
So, split up four ways. I have a feeling they'll all meet in Ponyville again.
So patches got the everfree right? Welp, i feel sorry for the local food chain, 'cause there's a new predator in town.
Loving the story, keep it up because you can do it!
6135240 Thanks man. I plan to get back to writing this soon since I've got a lot more free time and motivation. I'm gonna dedicate whole chapters to one character for awhile just to get the individual plots rolling.