I feel bad for the author. It looks like he spent alot of time on this then look at dem dislikes. xD

Granted I haven't even read it yet lol. Probably won't.

3302247 I don't think the author inserted enough effort, as already stated in the description.

{I know I spelled accidentally wrong. I submitted the art to deviant art before I realized my mistake and was to lazy to go back and change it.}

If he did, at least change the error on the title, even if he already submitted the story like so in DeviantArt.

Spike is Ponyvilles most eligible bachelor, big mac with cheerlie.

You should polish this up a bit, the idea isn't awful :)

I admit, it's not bad, but like Terego said, you need to polish this.

Why don't you find an editor and ask him to help?

Mac has really gotten himself into it, w/o even trying....

And I can see that you are going with the idea that Big Mac and Applejack are Bloom's biological parents.....hmm...

You really need to find a editor at least. This entire thing looks like a first draft. Also, if you are going to have it as a clopfic, all of them should have some explicity with all of the potential suitors, not just your apparent favorite, otherwise, you can use the Teen rating with a sex tag and call it implied. It's for the sake of some objectivity.

Also, with the Spike and Applebloom tags, if they are just a mentioning glance, they don't need to be tagged; the tags are there to specify the main characters in a story. Here you can use the Big Mac tag, as well as the Mane 6 tag, since you are creating a harem, but you don't need either the Spike or the Apple Bloom tags unless they are also main characters in your story. Just mentioning them does not warrant a tag. You only have a max of 5 tags you can use, so choose wisely in the future.

lol, I like this story; it's raunchy in a very funny way - that poor bastard made the mistake of even talking to a woman, and now he has to deal with all of this crazy shit

I'm honestly not sure why this story got so many dislikes. There are flaws and the subject matter does objectify both genders, afterall the main six come off as being merely sex crazed and at times kinda bimbo-ish. Although I believe that the following chapters will try to give them more character as it moves away from sex and more into the pursuit of a relationship.

As for Mac, he comes across as being incredibly submissive, being more than willing to just sit there and obediently do as he is told, as well as being incredibly forgiving given that he didn't freak out about being drugged and raped. I will admit that the fantasy of having a woman force herself on myself is appealing, if it actually happened I would most likely be incredibly distressed and downright panicked if a woman actually tranquillised and tied me up. The fact remains that this story doesn't do either gender any favours, but that's okay.

Stories like these are a guilty pleasure, they contain themes that I frankly would find distressing in real life, but in fiction they are both amusing and entertaining. So, I gave a like and hope that you will update soon.

Thank you for this story! I really like it.
3302799
Nope. Spike is sissy girl. His place in the "friend zone"

I have to say people are underrating this story. Yes it has flaws and just about every story does. The story line is good it's just feels like it's missing some details is all. I'm interested in where this story can lead to.

Seriously, you need to continue this; right now. Don't listen to those 40+ stupid assholes that downvoted this - instead, you should listen to the 40+ of us stupid assholes loyal readers that actually upvoted it. Let that be your motivation and... hold on, I just insulted myself - I need to fix that real quick... There we go; anyways, let that be your motivation and get back to making new chapters!

3511527 Hoo, ya damn right !
static2.fjcdn.com/comments/Ya+damn+right+you+are+_3b8720a97db9b6b9bd11b1741882ade2.jpg

Run BITCH RUUUUUUUUUUUN!!!!!!!!!!!!

https://lh6.googleusercontent.com/-rpZAssPqCVc
/UsW40FYFBlI/AAAAAAAEL1A/tZA1jVhnI5E/w413-h376-
no/afternoon-break-013-12312013.gif

Big Mac, you know you're f**ked, right?