Alice Pony Sacrifice

by Vocalmaker

The Little Dream (Introduction) [UN-EDITED]

-Introduction-

Dreams, What are dreams?

Dreams are successions of ideas,emotions, and sensations that occur involuntarily in the mind during certain stages of sleep, this is how the dictionary defines dream but they are more than that.A dream is the creation of someone’s imagination, his desires, his fears, his world, his everything, but which hardly anyone knows is that dreams are alive, think, move, feed they can be as big as a universe or as small as a room.

This is the story of a dream who was different from the others, with something that made him unique, something that was never seen before.

Long time ago, there existed a little dream a dream who was different from the other dreams, a dream without owner, a dream that no one dreamed, a dream with a single desire, always be remembered by the pony race and never disappear, what do I mean by disappear, you ask yourself? well, actually dreams can only exist through the minds of living beings, in other words if all ponies stop dreaming the dream would eventually die but this dream was alone and empty, as no one had dreamed him so there was no one to walk through it, no one to see, no one to talk to, no mountain, landscape or even sun or moon..

This made the dream ask himself. “I Don’t want to be forgotten, What I do, so that people keep on dreaming and remembering me?”

The little dream thought and thought, and at last he had a wonderful idea.

“I know, I know the answer!” He said to himself.

“If I want to continue existing, I must made ponies come to me, and they will built my world as they want, so they can never escape, because If I can’t be their dream.”

“I will be .... their new reality. and I will exist forever and ever they will perish here in my terrible land against themselves, fate and all the odds stack No one shall be able to forget me… What a grand dream I have turned out to be!”

Author's Note:

(This chapter is un-edited and it will be edited soon so please be pasient)

Finally the first chapter of my little hobby to get out of the routine, please enjoy this little future story and comment what you like and what you don't every comment is well recieve.

Comments

[SadisticRainbows]

First off I want to say, I'm a big fan of Alice Human Sacrifice, so this immediately piqued my interest. I've only read the prologue, but I like it so far. Though, I saw a few mistakes.

“If I want to continue existing, I must made ponies come to me, and they will built my world as they want, so they can never escape, because If I can’t be their dream.”

Make not made.
Build not built.
Add a '...' to the end of the paragraph.

I also found that you tend to make run on sentences and just fill them up with commas. Hope I helped!