"There is no greater agony than the shadows hiding thier stories within thier darkness..." Maya Angelou & Myself.
A teenaged otaku gamer is sent to Equestria by a mysterious man on a mysterious island. Strange forces seem to be at work with the presence of this human. Filled with questions and determined to find answers, our hero searches to find those answers through violence, madness, and (surprisingly) friendship. What trials lie ahead for him? Only one way to find out.
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Too all the people out there that are reading this just know that I'm far ahead of you in this story. I've read 40 chapters of this because I'm pre-reading it and let me just say one thing to you all; it's worth a read (if you can handle the madness that comes from it. O.o)
*watches Trevor get turned into slenderman*
This is exactly the sort of writing and plot I'd expect from me from when I was 12.
Great stuff! Keep it up!
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You should have seen my face when i saw this during the pre-reading. o.O lol
Meh, I'm still a person who never liked this episode of the series. Trixie is an entertainer who's job is to CREATE stories. Also, how the hell would you react if some hecklers from the audience started messing with your show? Then again, there's also the lack of punishment for snips and snails for acting like idiots with Trixie losing her traveling cart and never showing any replacement being given to her.
Ok, I'm not reading anymore of this and here's why. You are using copy paste episodes with absolutely no real changes. We have a character who is omniscient essentially to what's going on and just goes with the flow without doing ANYTHING interesting. If I wanted to watch the episode I would. As for the in between chapters, we have almost nothing interesting happening with minor advances to what can be called a plot, considering how little of it is developed and not just bs "oh this is hints from the future" without ANYTHING HAPPENING. What advanced from a plot perspective from the conversation with Celestia? Well, we have more mystery from the minor disappearances and the explanation Celestia gives but based off prior knowledge of trollestia and hints at knowledge of our world (water to wine), anything she says is inherently suspect. Thus, nothing is settled and nothing really interesting happened in that conversation, no real developments of anyone. Most scenes should serve at least two purposes, most of your scenes serve one, if that at times.
I'm taking into consideration the person in the prior comments mentioned some 40 chapters read as a pre-reader, all I can imagine is a lot of them are pointless filler like this chapter. For this to be considered as a good story, you need to cut and tighten most of the story.