Keep going.

I am sorry but you just don't keep my interest its just you have so many typos its really hard to follow along the story was good but I think it was rushed a bit.

Vixle moans a bit to much for a guy :P
Good story though.

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Yeah I don't like seeing typos that often either

3320549 well isn't you're picture a bit inapropriate :D

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By no means. :3

3332265 oooooooooookkkkkkeeeee

I'm a pretty easy going guy when it comes to grammer and typos so no problem there. Am I annoyed by typos...just a little but not enough to make me not read stuff.

To be honest this is the second HiE fic I've actually read and like.

Only a bit of advice would be make the chapters longer. Other then that it's all cool.

I like the story idea, and it's a nice layout, but it moves a little fast. Protip: Commas are your friend, I only counted one in this whole chapter. The sentences (especially dialogue) seem very rushed when you leave them as run-ons, and it just doesn't sound right. Play the scene out in your head as you write, and imagine when there's a pause. Smack a comma in there and: boom. It sounds better. Other than that, almost everything else was great. The order of events was good, but it still felt a bit rushed. Try adding just a little more description, perhaps explain the setting in greater detail, or a character's thoughts or feelings with more description.
I hope I helped, and sorry for the tl;dr.