I just read Fluttershy's phone sex all in one go. I got to the end and you were saying you were gonna make a sequel, but not for a long time. Lo and behold, 45 weeks later, I randomly stumble upon your sequel a day after it is published. Fluttershy phone sex was utterly hilarious, so I'm looking forward to another treat. You also made me almost consider getting a real phone sex operator to be Fluttershy for me. Ps made an account just so I could follow you :)
I loved the previous story, and I know I'll love this one, but it seems to me like you didn't learn anything, from the story that you yourself wrote! The chapter says 'All thanks to Fluttershy', but both you and I know it really wasn't.
Firstly, Pinkie did not come out of this worst. In fact, she was literally the closest the story had to an antagonist. The ones who really lost were Big Mac and Spike, with Flutters herself coming in a close third for all the emotional trauma. Secondly, Fluttershy pointed out that Mr Cake, Spike and Twilight ringing Moaning Mares had nothing to do with her, therefore she wasn't responsible for Spike's blue balls, or Pinkie's homelessness. Finally, and this is most important of all: Fluttershy didn't cause Applejack to lose the farm; Applejack caused Applejack to lose the farm. Blaming Flutters for getting Applejack into an abusive relationship is not right. If you refuse to blame Applejack, then blame Big Mac, he's supposed to be the responsible one.
I've scanned this chapter with the help of my irony-tinted spectacles, but I can find none. If this is in any way meant to be ironic, then it's not very well written. If it's not meant to be ironic, then was it even you writing that last chapter? Because you have become as cruel and unthinking as your characters. Not gonna lie, dick move bro.
Also, speaking of characters, what kind of a world have you created? Pinkie Pie is some kind of demonic Succubus, Luna is a rapist, Rarity is a heartless manipulator. The only one who appears to have survived is Spike which I guess I'm happy about.
Can this story be saved? Well, I guess it's already progressed so asking such a question now is pointless.
ITS ALIVE!!!!!
4683402 YES!
4683409 *EVIL MANIACAL LAUGHTER*
In other words: RariJack. NOPE.
4683541 Well this is a sequel to my other story in which you would have already known RariJack was a thing... sorta
4683534 The first chapter of a sequel to a story that was based off a crazy premise
4683556 I don't ship it. In fact, I hate it. Therefore, probably not gonna read this. Sorry.
4683564 *looks at your avatar image* Ok... well sorry this fic isn't for you. I can't please everyone
4683573 noticed.
awesome!
MOAR.
If that's all right with you, author...
I just read Fluttershy's phone sex all in one go. I got to the end and you were saying you were gonna make a sequel, but not for a long time. Lo and behold, 45 weeks later, I randomly stumble upon your sequel a day after it is published. Fluttershy phone sex was utterly hilarious, so I'm looking forward to another treat. You also made me almost consider getting a real phone sex operator to be Fluttershy for me.
Ps made an account just so I could follow you :)
Finally!
Glad to see this is up, I LOVED the first story, I hope this is just as good!
~Wywint
4695935 I plan to make it that way
I loved the previous story, and I know I'll love this one, but it seems to me like you didn't learn anything, from the story that you yourself wrote! The chapter says 'All thanks to Fluttershy', but both you and I know it really wasn't.
Firstly, Pinkie did not come out of this worst. In fact, she was literally the closest the story had to an antagonist. The ones who really lost were Big Mac and Spike, with Flutters herself coming in a close third for all the emotional trauma. Secondly, Fluttershy pointed out that Mr Cake, Spike and Twilight ringing Moaning Mares had nothing to do with her, therefore she wasn't responsible for Spike's blue balls, or Pinkie's homelessness. Finally, and this is most important of all: Fluttershy didn't cause Applejack to lose the farm; Applejack caused Applejack to lose the farm. Blaming Flutters for getting Applejack into an abusive relationship is not right. If you refuse to blame Applejack, then blame Big Mac, he's supposed to be the responsible one.
I've scanned this chapter with the help of my irony-tinted spectacles, but I can find none. If this is in any way meant to be ironic, then it's not very well written. If it's not meant to be ironic, then was it even you writing that last chapter? Because you have become as cruel and unthinking as your characters. Not gonna lie, dick move bro.
Also, speaking of characters, what kind of a world have you created? Pinkie Pie is some kind of demonic Succubus, Luna is a rapist, Rarity is a heartless manipulator. The only one who appears to have survived is Spike which I guess I'm happy about.
Can this story be saved? Well, I guess it's already progressed so asking such a question now is pointless.