That is a funny ending. i can almost hear him screaming in agony from the pain.

Flutterbutter Estacado. Ruthless animal lover and italian-equestria gnagster-veterenarian.

MIKE PATTON IS

THE KINDNESS

3190949 The final bit of the game is spent getting the birthday cake for Jenny.

"thE VANILLA OOOOONNEeee. FOR JENNY."

3191614 JENNNIIIEEEEEEEEE

when is the new chapter coming out?

3214596 "Give it a day. If it's not done in the next 4 hours it will be done by this time tomorrow"- Captain Princess, My Editor.

As a fellow Darkness fan that was about to do a Darkness in Equestria story myself, a friend of mine came across this and showed it to me. After reading the first chapter... I think your idea is better. However, You should probably consider doing a little bit of editing. I've only read the first chapter, but there are some spelling and grammar issues here and there (not enough to be too distracting, but can still be a bit of a sore for the more picky readers, like myself), and you seem to have a habit of having two different speakers appear in the same paragraph, which (as far as I've been taught) is a literary no-no.

None the less, I do like this, and I would love to see it improved and expanded on.

the only problem I have with this story is that eventually I'll finish it.